Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: April 12 2017 2:43 AM Title: Double trouble...

No need to apologize for publishing a new chapter, it's not like you're forcing them to read or something. Though the interesting plot is indeed making me read it ASAP xD

The relationship Casey has with Abby is so sweet, I like a to their excahnge at the beginning and how the dullahan worked so hard to keep her out of danger, even if she failed at the end... Hopefully she can get back to the tiny before something bad happens.

This was more of a show of strenghts. Certainly the humans have a lot to fear if thoe species can do so much while being that young, even if they standards they're teenagers, I guess the only advantage humans have is numbers? And I suppose those are the twins that Casey mentioned before, maybe devil girls or succubus going by the pics. I actually thought that the twins might be harpies so I guess I was wrong on this one. I'm eager to see what they might do. Maybe in other scenario Abby wouldn't be as intimidated by them, since they're relatively short. Though after that display of power there're not two ways about it... I wonder if Casey would've been able to easily handle one of them? Maybe the reveal of their rank might clarify that, I'm a bit curious about under which criteria the rank is choosen.

And there's also the question as to who is her mistress. I'm a bit confused about what they were looking for. I thought it might be Casey but since they were curious about her in the end it might not be? Or maybe they just didin't get enought information from their boss.

Anyway, this is looking really interesting. Good job as always.

See ya.

Author's Response:

Wasn't really apologizing for my chapter lol, It was more that I was posting them to fast since some people might not visit the site a few days at a time. The chapters might get backed up and I know sometime's people don't have the time to read them. :(

I'm glad you like where this stories headed and don't worry, a lot of the questions you have will be answered in the near future. As for the two girls where it left off, that will also become clear next chapter. I'll try to post it soon. :D

Thank you for the review Kenta, I'll be leaving you one soon~

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09 2017 3:34 AM Title: Comfort in tragedy...

......... Dammit, you made me cry a bit ;_;

The first part was really sad, the whole being displayed alive thing sounds completely horrifying. And just thinking her mother might still be like this to this day is even worse. I'm not sure if I want to know what happened to her body. Since some time has passed since then I'm sure Casey has accepted what happened to some extend but still.... Damn.

Then Abby's past which was also really sad, her mom doing that to save her... It's also a wonder what happened to her father. I think the whole thing hasn't been told yet? For a second I thought the figure she saw might be actually a human but since he walked through the fire he should be from a different species.

The girls finally could find comfort in each other. It was a touching moment, they finally left their differences as species aside and embraced each other as live beings that care about the other. I really liked the way Abby tried to hold the Casey to console her, even at that size. She couldn't do much but I want to believe Casey appreciates that, and Abby too when the dullahan did the same for her. Abby might have felt relatively safe with Kari or Nya but I'm sure she just got to a deeper level of trust with Casey.

And for the second part, I'm note sure if it's because she took off her head, or because she could finally take a bit of a load off her shoulders after telling her story or for sharing an intimate moment with Abby, or maybe all of them, but was Casey acting a bit different after that. More playful, happier. The way she acted was really cute.

And of course, the grand finale. I was wondering how far you would go with the monster girls, as in if you were going to use regular interactions for those parts or make use of their characteristics as monster girls. I'm happy it was the second. Separating her head and using it in that way with Abby in the middle was great, I really enjoyed that. And well, this chapter as a whole.

I have some doubts though, for curiosity. Casey said that humans are mostly attacked because of their energy. Those that means that all the victims are raped or do they "settle" with other fluids like blood? And because of the thin with Ebon in the chapter before I suppose her species does eat, so maybe they also get some energy like that? I mean, Casey seems to be able to eat but don't get anything from it. Ebon seemed to be doing that as a necessity. I also forgot to mention this last chapter but I think she's either to young to be able to fly correctly (or well, land) or injured somehow. I lean more to the second option.

See ya.

Author's Response:

Then, I guess I did my job. I don't want my stories, any of them to be read from point A to B with happy endings. Throwing reality in, as dark as it may be shows more for what the world really is to them. Sorry for making you cry. ;-;

On regards to Abby's past, for now it's on hold. We don't need to delve into it just yet, but don't think it's over. As for it being a human whom came, I wouldn't say that either.

As for Casey acting differently, you can attribute that to her head no longer being attached. When it's off, expect her to be a different girl entirely. Almost like a split personality. Also, I do plan on using the Monster aspect of Monster Girls if thats what you meant. Don't think i'd limit the potential for each girl to act accodingly towards their own kind. You'll see soon what I mean.

In this world. from the context I used, energy, is the essence in any form from a human. Sweat, blood, other... fluids. But that doesn't rule out other parts as well. Bone, meat, flesh, e.t.c. Pretty much all Monster's need some type of energy to maintain themselves and it comes down to which ones they want. Some can be harmful to humans, other, not as much if they lose them. Make sense? That being said, only some Monsters need to go that far. For the more beastial type monsters, energy is needed, but so is food. Ebon as you'll find out will have some more explained towards her actions later. And about her sudden... landing. Wait and find out. ;)

Thank you for the inquisitve review Kenta, I love how you go into detail about what you think. :D

See ya.

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: April 02 2017 5:51 AM Title: No sense losing your head over it.

It seems you're keeping a good rythm with this story, I think you said this one might be longer than PLD, right?

Abby seems to be becoming more open minded now, after what happened last chapter and her talk with Casey. At the same time that also seems to be of help with her relationship with the other girls. She's doing way better now and younger ones also seem to be accepting her more. The way Najia is recovering should also help to earn their trust I think.

I love Casey more and more as the story develops. I find her attitude really adorable. I'm really looking forward to the next one, since it seems to have some more of her. As for what she had to do to save herself and Abby, I'm not sure if she's a quick thinker or just let the urge inspire her. I'm usually indifferent about that kind of content but I found it rather nice here for some reason, maybe because of the characters. Also, it was funny. Just for curiosity, would covering her in sand would also worked or wouldn't be effective enough? Also, it seems Casey has some control over her clothes, I wonder to what extend.

There's also the bit of sadness she showed in her conversation. I suppose the reason they all look up to Najia so much must be because she helped them in some way in the past. I think it'll be interesting know more of that in the future. And about the other girl, Ivy, which I might get and idea about how she's related to Ebon by the pictures.

See ya.

Author's Response:

Hmm, well it might be. I'm pretty sure it will have more chapters since it has many more characters but i believe the shorter chapters fit in better which allows me to post sooner then a month at a time xD.

As for Abby, things are changing for her, mostly by force but you'll see a natural progression with her with a couple of the upcoming chapters from now that will help ease her into their world.

I'm glad you love Casey, i'm trying to go for unique characters once again and writing for a Dullahan definitely has enabled me to do just that. xD

For your curiosity covering wouldn't eliminate smells but burying would. For a short time at least.

Expect some things to e revealed soon so shift the flow once again. I look foward to the next chapter greatly.

See ya. :)

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2017 3:43 AM Title: From bad to worse...

Nice, another chapter.

I don't really know a thing about accent so I can't tell you much about that. I think I've heard some of those words in an irish video though, if it helps.

Anyway I love Casey's character, her dialogues and scenes were really fun. I'm really eager to know more about her. I wonder if there's a reason for Abby's attitude towards her being slightly different. I mean she's still scared and all but maybe she feels more at ease with her? Like, enought to talk back. She also tried to initiate a conversation with her, that's a first. Also Abby seems to have gotten a used to Nya, at least a bit.

Something I'm wondering, is there a reason why Casey wants her head to stay in place? Other than mixing up aming humans, which doesn't seems like she does much. I mean she has been like that her whole life so she should be used to it. Is it because of the twins?

And with the ending, Abby doesn't get a rest. Probably this will lead her to some serious thinking about her own kind. And it was really cute what Casey tried to do for help her, I'm liking her even more.

Will be waiting for the next one.

Author's Response:

Well it was an Irish accent I was attempting to write, so hopefully I did something right. :P

Casey will have more of her own experience's explained in the coming chapters so don't worry. As for her head staying in place... she has her reson's, i'll leave it at that.

I'll be updating soon, hopefully. I already started on chapter 6... hard to belive I just started this back up. xD

Thank you for the review Kenta :D

Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2017 3:32 PM Title: From bad to worse...

I never read Precious Little Demons, but I'm loving this story. It's super interesting! I love Nya especially.

Author's Response:

Well Foreignkanto, if you're new to my work I welcome you along for the ride. I think you'll find the chapters to come will be unique to their own as well so enjoy and thank you for leaving me your thoughts. 

>^,^<

Reviewer: Nothingness Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2017 10:12 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...

Congrats on posting your second story, man. Pretty good stuff here. Keep it up!

Author's Response:

Thanks Nothingness :D

As for why I never used FF/f mostly because at any given time there isn't more then 1 girl. I might adjust it later depending what happen's though. Thank you for messaging me. :)

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25 2017 4:57 AM Title: A Deal With The Devil...

Ceratainly I wasn't expecting another chapter so soon. Just remember that there's no need to rush, if you need to take a break just take it.

I really felt bad for Abby at the beginnning of the chapter. Still, numb Abby seems to be doing better. Not exactly doing good but is progress nonetheless. Now that the deal has been made, she has some hope to aim to but the road there most likely won't be easy. Still, at least now she knows that Nya is mostly on her side and not some lusty beast that sees her as a toy. And Kari too should be her ally as long as they keep cooperating with each other.

I like the way Kari and Abby interact with each other, they seem to have similar likes, even if they've strongly different point of views about the way they see the other race, and it was a nice little detail what Kari did for Abby's clothing. I'm sure she's feeling really guilty right now, though Abby most likely either directly ignores that or wouldn't believe it. On another circumstances they might've gotten along very well. Though, just maybe that possibility still exists in a not so close future. The biggest issue, other than Abby's trauma, most likely is the way each kind see the other, since humans hate towards the other two doesn't seem to be one sided. At least, that's what I can deduce by the conversation the witch and the human had when she was tyring to convince Abby to help her and also Ebon's attitude towards Abby. There's also the possibility that this is just an isolated case because of what happened to Najia. It was fun when Nyaa joined the other two, It might take some time until Abby get use to her though, even if she kind of understands the neko's motives. Now, I'm looking forward to see what Casey does next.

Something else to note is the introduction of terms such as Beastial and Hominals. I like information that adds something to the background and the story's world. Also, I might be wrong but: "All of our kind thrive from energy, and humans have an abundant source of it… T-T-That includes… well…". I think this is an interesting piece of information that I think might spell trouble for Abby later on.

Author's Response:

"Chuckles darkly" Indeed...

I'm glad you caught onto that little mention. You never seem to miss the tiny bits i through into my stories. XD

I'm not trying to overwork myself, i just have a lot of time on my hands since school's coming to a close in a few months. If you think i'm bad now, just wait till Summer's here, >:)

Though... if my family wants to vacation out of country again i might be in trouble... :(

Either way, i want to make sure this story thrives and is able to stand on it's own two legs and not just under the shadow of my last one's success. I want people to like it for it's own unique twist, and characters and plot. "shrugs" I'll probably be updating soon again anyways, probably not as soon as this chapter but i've started on the next one already. I'm really looking foward to Casey as well. I wanted the line up to be special, and if a Dullahan isn't one of them then i don't think I should be writing this. XD

Hope to see your reviews again soon Kenta! :D

Reviewer: Hyperian Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23 2017 6:49 PM Title: A Deal With The Devil...

A (quality) double chapter release in just 2 days?! I'm starting to wonder if YOU'RE a monster too! xD

Apologies if my previous comment about Abby's characterization seemed generalizing; I was certainly not trying to suggest she's just a less sympathetic Claire! Now that she's calmed down and isn't screaming at the mere sight of monsters, I'm really enjoying the dynamic she shows for her new "companions." The medical scene with Kari was a perfect example of that; Abby's struggle of maintaining her Hippocratic oath and wiping away the tears of the child clashes wonderfully with the disdain she holds for all monsters and their deeds. Love the internal conflict, and I'm very interested to see where it'll take us next. Wouldn't be terribly surprised if Abby nurses Najia back to full health and then, upon regaining her size (if Kari is able to pull through with the request), leads a witch hunt against the "monsters." Not out of any particular malice, just because it's what people do. And it's a lot easier to hunt a creature down when she doesn't look like an adorable child before your eyes! :p But of course, I could be wildly off-base with that... just a thought!

Thanks for the writing suggestion! I could definitely stand to have another set of eyes take a look at some of my ideas and let me know if they're worth expanding into actual stories or not. As for your experiences, did Franchise Writer provide guidance on particularly developing the basic ideas, characters, and themes of PLD into the full story, or was his advice geared more toward plot details, pacing, etc.?

Anyway, I greatly look forward to the next chapter. And as for you right now, get to bed already! xD Pull too many all-nighters, and it won't be just Najia who needs those echanasea and dandelion extracts!

Author's Response:

No need to aplogize, i take no offence to you finding diference or similarities in characters. There their own characters after all. :P

I'm glad to see you're getting into it. :D

I'll try to update soon, but it might be a couple days lol. I'm pretty tired.As for whats to come you're just going to have to read and find out. ;)

On reguards to Franchise Writer's help, he kind of helped with everything. "Rubs back of head sheepishly" After reading some... or, most all of his stories except some stuff i didn't know about i noticed he mentioned on his bio that he helps people with writing so i just messaged him, and it all took off from there. The idea i had in mind was kind of odd but he honestly didn't act weird when i mentioned what I wanted my story to be about. So, I wrote the first three chapters with his guidance and posted them but about midway into the fourth he really got involved and made me think more on my own story. He's helped me with plot, characters, funny scenes, grammer. He's been like a fun teacher I guess i should say. :P

I hope I didn't rant, I just really appreciate his help and all.

 

Reviewer: Hyperian Signed [Report This]
Date: March 22 2017 8:12 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...

First of all, just wanted to say my sincere congratulations on finishing PLD with such an uplifting ending; it was such a pleasure reading and enjoying each chapter as it released! Moreover, I'm very impressed at your enthusiasm for writing and ability to quickly jump to a new story so soon after the end of the first one. I have a few potential story ideas for the site I have been brewing in my mind for a while now, but I don't have confidence in my ability to keep writing chapters in a reasonable time, especially since I have a fanfiction currently on the back burner that I haven't updated since 2013... yeesh! So, I can't express how happy I am to see you're showing no signs of stopping any time soon!

As for the story, I'm certainly intrigued at this point. I am a big fan of monster girl media (especially Monster Girl Quest, one of my favorite games of all time), so I'm very much looking forward to seeing what kind of society these monsters have built up and what their histories are. It probably goes without saying, but Abby is so far a much less sympathetic protagonist than Claire, even if most of that seems to come from the obvious societal influences and upbringing rather than any personal behavior on her part. But I'll be looking forward to seeing how her experiences with the monsters might change that for the better (or worse? Who knows? haha), and how the monsters will begin to change their respective views toward humans.
Lastly, just wanted to commend you on your technical quality of writing, which seems to continue to improve with each chapter. It's gotten to the point where there are very few noticeable errors or typos, and virtually none that seriously impede the flow of reading. So, on that front, well done!

Looking forward to what's coming up next!

P.S.: Definitely wouldn't mind seeing a gallery of the inspiration artworks for PLD if you still have access to those as well.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your words Hyperian. I'm glad my stories are having an impact on you like they are. :D

If you want to write for this site, i'd definitely say give it a try. It's really impacted my life. But, i do get where you're coming from with the whole time frame thing. I was worried about that to, which is why a lot of my earlier chapters were spaced a month or more at a time. Something i would recommend though is, if you need help with planning, or writing, give Franchise Writer a message. He's told me to tell that to people who mention it. XD

Thanks to him, he's really helped me improve on my work, :)

I'm pretty sure he does Fanfictions to as well... but i'm not sure on that one.

As for Abby being different then Claire, i did that intentinally. As much as i love Claire's altruism, i don't want all my stories to just have the MC being like that. It would be repetitive and unrealistic... well, more so in stories that involve people in situations such as these. But yeah, each of the characters aren't going to be carbon copies of other characters. I like when mine stand out from others and that includes past characters i've already written.

All i can really say is expect Abby to have a profound impact on the characters and to them on her as well. Things may seem black and white for now, but that will be changing as time goes on.

Thank you again for leaving me such a detailed review. I hope F.W. can help you if you do message him. I'm looking foward to any stories you write. :D

 

P.S.

I also love Monster girl Quest~ xP

 

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed [Report This]
Date: November 03 2016 10:53 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...

Hey, nice start, now I've another story to look forward too.

As for stuff I would like to see happening, I think the butt tag will suffice. Maybe some sweat.

Author's Response:

Hmm, i think that will be arranged. I'm glad your looking foward to it KentaRyu.