Date: June 29 2023 4:58 AM Title: The Awakening
Glad to see a new chapter for this story!
Definitely one of my favorites!
Hope to see some Unaware foot action and more awesome stuff from you :D!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Happy to be working on this again!
Date: July 13 2021 5:43 AM Title: The Awakening
Looks like Stool has a new reason for his nickname. XD. This story is pretty compelling so far. I like it.
Date: February 02 2020 3:00 AM Title: The Awakening
Nice story so far!
I hope they defeat those two bitches and get stool and Diego back to normal.
And I hope Marisa stays gentle and her and Diego end up together.
Great story so far. Keep it up.
Date: March 16 2018 11:44 PM Title: The Awakening
Great story so far! Love that things are getting more interesting with Nadine and Heather joining the fray. I'd love to see some butt action after two chapters of feet. I'd love to see a volleyball game where they had to stay in the back of her underwear, maybe with Nadine threatening to crush Marisa between her own cheeks if Marisa doesn't keep her tomorrow in her butt .
Date: June 09 2017 5:28 AM Title: The Awakening
You've got a decent start here, especially for someone new to macro writing. I like your inclusion of sensory details beyond those directly related to the shrinking to help set us in the world, and the buddy-cop (buddy-teen) premise is a good one to begin with. Marisa also seems like a pleasant giantess character to act as center of your story; too many stories describe the giantess as the flawless socialite hottie, so it's refreshing to see one show up who appears closer to a normal, relatable person, and her shyness is an appealing contrast to her size advantage. I hope you maintain that element even as she begins to fall more into the role of the giant. Either way, good luck in continuing.
Date: June 09 2017 2:49 AM Title: The Awakening
A really interesting and promising start.
I like the way you're introducing the characters, their behaviour and the dialogues are reasonable, and you are giving away just enough of the plot to make the reader come back for more.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Date: June 08 2017 7:12 PM Title: The Awakening
I like how it starts. Keep it up
Date: June 08 2017 5:00 PM Title: The Awakening
Love it so far. I think you've done a great job at setting up the rest of the story with this chapter. You said you want to focus a lot on character development. I recommend finding a balance of action, which is mostly what people come to this site for, and character development. If you find a good balance, you'll keep people interested in the plot, which will make for better action scenes, and then the action scenes will keep them wanting more.
Can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Glad you're loving it! And that's true, the right balance would make things better for the future chapters. I have the scenes planned out in my head, but still need to figure out these two guys lol
Date: June 08 2017 11:33 AM Title: The Awakening
This was a great opening chapter. I honestly was kinda hesitant to read it with the odor tag lol but I'm glad I did. And was the bitch Marisa was referring to the adult aged one?
aaron
Author's Response:
Thanks! And yeah, I'm still figureing out the whole 'tag' thing. I guess it would be better to just add them as I go, and that they really make an impact lol. Also, no. She's someone young and cruel :)