Reviewer: Skull Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08 2023 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 35

Please, try and finish this book. It's amazing. I love it

Author's Response:

I have no plans of dropping it! Sorry for the delay and thank you, Skull!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: January 14 2023 4:35 AM Title: Chapter 35

So first off I hope you had a good new year.  

    I really liked this chapter it had a couple of surprises. I really liked the Naomi and Poppy scene, it was hot.  I also loved to see more Naomi, she is so interesting, I am still trying to get in her head, so I am still looking for ward to her next chapter, and I am really looking forward to seeing The Poppy/Naomi scene, ( though i do have two request since you do ask for them, can u do more with Poppy and being around butts, and could you do a scene with Poppy as a sponge when the girls are showering or bathing, the idea of using tinies as a sponge or rag to clean yourself is hot,( mind this is your story, so if you don't want to I am ok, I like most things you have written in this story, even the stuff I normally don't like.

     So you surprised me with Nell, I wasn't expecting for Poppy to be interested in her, but you pulled it off.  So this will be an interesting direction to go in, and honestly if she is going to really imprint on anyone short of Cloe, ( yes i am still rooting for Cloe), Nell is probably for the best, ( i do still think Nell isn't the solution, but if she is stuck with the BSA, then Nell would at least take her wants into consideration, and might actually help out other shrunken in time). 

     So of course this will cause even more fracture between Naomi and Nell, and might even completely destroy that relationship, though mind it probably was headed that way anyway in time.  Also I do wonder how it will affect Naomi, if it will cause her to double down or actually take a step back and reconsider her approach to Poppy. At first glance I think it would cause her to double down, but there is a slight chance that it might cause her to take a step back, after all the other girls haven't been any different in there approach, so the others haven't been forced to change, but Nell does act different, and They have scene how Poppy responds to Nell, ( and they know poppy is going through the motions of loyalty).  So it does make me wonder, and honestly I would really like to see one of the girls actually change a little at least and maybe become a better person, at least a little, ( honestly I think Molly has the best shot at this, but I am rooting for Naomi a little to.  So this is turning out to be even a better arc than I anticipated.  

     I am interested to see where that think with Lucky Days ( such a wierd saying), and the cherry tomatoes thing goes, you brought it up a few times.  Mind I still think Naomi will be involved in Zoey coming back into play and I am so ready for it.  THere is alot to this story I am still looking forward to.

Also I am like the others have said ok with the parents taking a break this arc.  I can really only take so much of them before I want to strangle each of them.  

Author's Response:

Hey Ralgar,

I am in fact, having a good new year.

I'm glad you're liking Naomi, there's definitely a lot more of her coming up. I'll take your suggestions and see if I can implement them in later chapters if there's space. 

Lol I'm glad you're a Chloe fan--I am too. 

Nell and Naomi's relationship is already so strained, that I think Annabelle imprinting on Nell behind Naomi's back would cause some serious consequences for the sisters--or even the entire Sano family.

Also, I get the whole thing with the BSA adults, lol, they can be a lot. 

I always appreciate your support, Ralgar.

Thanks for commenting! 

Reviewer: rubber Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03 2023 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 35

awesome chapter

Author's Response:

Thanks rubber, I try :)

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03 2023 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 35

It is nice to see Anna getting some reprieve from her constant torture at the hands of the foursome. Getting to honestly express her genuine feelings with somebody who will listen is refreshing for both her and fans of her eventually regaining her freedom at the end of this. Nell is a tremendous influence and ally for her thus far in their time together.

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Putting Anna right back to work I see.

At-least there was a bright spot in she might have achieved something helpful for somebody without it leading to more bloodshed or mangling from the BSA. A small victory for our perilous heroine as she fights the good fight against the insurmountable odds she's up against right now.

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A really touching scene unfolding here.

Nell seems like the best friend Anna has right now outside of Stephen and Bite...and in the same way Anna might be the only friend Nell in her own struggles with the foursome. This is a breath of fresh air for us in Anna's corner and maybe putting even more in Nell's the more time she spends with Anna and their relationship grows.

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Something tells me if Anna wasn't against the entire fucking world that she could play the foursome off one another to formulate a plan of escape from them. Much more difficult with the BSA behind them but the cracks seem to be definitely there in terms of each wanting Anna for themselves.

Perhaps maybe even Nell could give the powder keg a little nudge to set the explosion in motion.

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Well well well...a lot to unpack here.

1. If Nell is somehow friends with or indirectly via another party somehow connected to Zoey this will be a game changer in many ways. Even more so if the foursome or Zoey learn about the others -true- natures involving Anna.

2. That was incredible!

The way you described Nell destroying the mantis underfoot and Anna's reaction was tremendous. I never suspected Nell saving her life would have the next time Anna had to watch a life snuffed out underfoot or the person snuffing it out.

3. What a twist...

General human kindness might be the one thing that gets Anna to imprint on anyone after a lifetime of getting shit on by just about everyone in her life. Not sure the outcome of the story but if Nell wins I look forward to the nuclear winter it will no doubt cause.

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The Sano parents have gotten their time to shine by poking and prodding Anna like a lab rat,

They are also the only family with a dynamic like Nell to play off of Naomi and her ferocity.

Author's Response:

Hey Adam thanks for the review!

Nell really is a great way to keep Annabelle sane. Something as simple as chess is a pretty big reprieve for Annabelle.

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Yeah, Annabelle is desperately trying to gain something from being humiliated by serving the FF. At this point, she's mostly given up on saving herself, but securing the Duforts' safety doesn't seem too out of reach.  

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I'm sure I've mentioned it before, but I do enjoy writing Nell's and Annabelle's relationship, because it's one of the few times (outside of Steven and Byte, like you mentioned) that Annabelle gets to be herself. There's also something more powerful about their relationship being between a Shrinkee and a non-Shrinkee.

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As much as I'm enjoying the back ground of the FF, I honestly cannot fucking wait to write them all together. I think it will be really interesting to see how they interact with Annabelle as a group after they've all had their one-on-one extensive bonding time with her. Maybe you'll get to see those "cracks"--or maybe their bond truly is unshakeable. 

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1. Hee hee, well I guess we know how that panned out.

2. Thank you! I don't a lot of chances to emphasize Annabelle's size through other small beings, so I kind of wanted to milk it lol.

3. Hahaha, then that might be the perfect reason to have Nell win (I'm joking...or am I?)

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As always, thanks for your review AdamX!

Reviewer: Tigerchevy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 02 2023 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 35

Idk if my comment got the spicy scene with Naomi or if it was already planned but either way I'm happy it happened. Great scene and great chapter. Honestly I miss the chapters that were more ff and poppy focused and less BSA.

Author's Response:

Lol it definitely was. I had another spicy scene with Naomi (it's still coming up soon), but I added that scene because you were right--Naomi/Annabelle spice was a bit lacking. I definitely don't mind taking suggestions as long as it fits within the story.

And yeah, I miss having all FF interacting with each other/Annabelle. Don't worry, they'll be back soon!

Thanks again for the idea, Tigerchevy!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17 2022 4:06 AM Title: The Beginning

     So my interest in her Mother being big, is granted mostly kink related ( mother/daughter stuff), how ever there is the aspect that her mother left after Her sisters " death".  This also tied in with the fact that she didn't want children, I think it would be interesting for her to see her daughter shrunk and probably going see this was why I didn't want children.  Would she be cruel, indifferent or would her mothering side try to come back ( mind I don't think Annabel would except and help from her mother by choice, but that's the rub and the interesting part, if her mother is still big, ANnebell would be in no shape to ignore her mother, i mean her Mother could force the issue of helping her or what ever, yes I'm kinky and wouldn't mind seeing a mother daughter scene, but i don't think it would fit this story,. (Poor Annabell, most of us want to see her have a very bad time).

    So yea that's why I would like to see her mother, and her still be big.  Of course her being small would also have alot of potential, I really don't want her to be dead.  Of course that would mean even more characters in this already massive story.  

    I was wondering, if there was any chance of an update this month,(christmas gift) other wise see you next year. Hope you have a Merry CHristmas and a Happy New Year.

Author's Response:

Haha, everyone wants Annabelle to be miserable. But without going into spoiler territory, I've been going back and forth with how I want to deal with the whole issue of Annabelle's backstory/parents. You've given me a pretty interesting perspective. 

Thanks Ralgar!

Reviewer: Nightwatch Signed [Report This]
Date: December 08 2022 3:15 AM Title: The Beginning

First off want to say great work at the started of the chapter with Naomi holding Annabelle down well her mother insert the tracking chip in her body, it was a very scary scene that drive Force that Annabelle was out of escape options now that she has a chip in her body making it permanent for her to remind the girls pet for the rest of the her life, the scene that got me next was the one that showed us Camilla, at first I thought she was going to be a feared and scared girl, but it was the complete opposite, she was confident and brave with the way she acted, but under all that she still misses her dad and doesn't want her dad to get hurt, also wanted to say I'm glad Annabelle used her charms to stop Naomi from killing Camilla, and I hope she can reunite Camilla with her dad somehow without them dying, ask for Naomi's dad thinking about getting Annabelle pregnant, I hope that's just a threat and not something being foreshadowed, for her future, if it is I hope it gets stopped before it happens, ask for the next scene I really do hate spiders, and I can't imagine how Annabelle can feel after that happened it was a good thing Nell saved her when she did, after that happened I believe the cage would be replaces something else so that never happens again maybe a dollhouse for Annabelle? As for the parents I can't believe they're willing to manipulate their daughters by having animal be used as a third wheel between Naomi and Nell but that's just me. P.s keep up the good work and sorry for not getting this review done sooner, I was busy brainstorming a theory on your series for the past few weeks I plan to post it on the review once it's done, about Annabelle and I strongly believe that Annabelle isn't a type zero but rather a new kind of shrink that hasn't been seen before and I hope you see it when it's posted when it's there for to hear your thoughts on it. Pretty good chapter so far and I hope to see more.

Author's Response:

Hey Nightwatch,

Camilla's characterization is something I had a fun time writing. I initially had her more timid, but it worked better with her being assured and confident (as much as a captured Shrinkee could be). 

I can't comment on your theory, but there's a lot of things about to be revealed in the upcoming chapters when it comes to what's going on with Annabelle. I'm very excited (And terrified) for you guys to see the full reveal.

Thanks for reviewing Nightwatch!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: November 14 2022 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 34

    First off I loved chapter 33 with her sister, it revealed alot i think.  I loved the way u described the base, and i love how they get around the city, it does make me wonder how they get around the world though, i imagine flight would have alot of problems.  HONestly  the former commander sounds kinda like a coward, and a moral coward at that.  If u had lied like that to me u can forget about and fondness i might have had for u, ( this is how feuds can start).  He did die in not a bad way though, i mean if your going to die, die doing what u love.  But clear the air before u do seesh.  

     NOw chapter 34, well Naomi's parents are about what i thought, and that is terrible, I want to say that Mollys mother ( use that term lightly) still ranks as the worst but these two are terrible, i mean playing both daughters off of each other, thats wrong.  Well taking the blood is concerning, but we know the resistance has plans in the works.

     So we didn't get as much Naomi as i hoped, but that has been the pattern for the other girls to, so i am looking forward to time with Naomi.  Like anther reviewer said and i have said to, Naomi has seem to get shafted with the on screen time with Annabelle compared to the other 3.  Not a criticism, you have a lot of balls in the air, and already this beast is massive, somethings were going to have to give, but that is the reason i am looking forward to next two chapters, which by the way i am really glad for, i was wondering how you were going to balance naomi and nell in just two chapters.  

    SO Nell is getting access to Annabelle behind Naomi's back, I see no problems with this going forward what so ever.( sarcasm in case it wasn't apparent).  To be honest I just don't see Nell as a workable solution to Annabel's problem and I am willing to bet that Nell was her own hang-up's that will come out during this next chapter ( to be honest would take an act of GOD for that to not be the case with this particular set of parents of the year candidates). 

     So yea I am really looking forward to seeing what happens next.

     

Author's Response:

Ha! Yeah, Grey definitely died doing what he loved. I think Artemis will hold onto conflicting feelings about her mentor and what he ultimately ended up deciding. 

Also don't worry, Naomi will definitely get her time in the spotlight. You're right, this story is massive, so I'm trying to make sure I'm not missing anything or any plots.

I'm excited to see what you think of the upcoming chapters as Naomi and Nell' personalities start to become more pronounced...for better or worse.

Thanks for your thoughts Ralgar, glad to see you're still enjoying this story. I always appreciate your enthusiasm, it keeps me writing. 

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed [Report This]
Date: November 10 2022 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 34

Something was bothering about my last comment, but I could not pin down what. Now I know. I got so carried away about the new information regarding type 0 and forgot something crucial about this arc: Anna also has a sister, we just got confirmation she is alive and their relationship is the complete opposite of Nell and Naomi.

I focused so much on the feelings that I believe Nell harbours for Anna – and could lead to some desire and imprinting – that I forgot Naomi and how she
could also fell some form of true love (a.k.a respect) towards Anna.

Yes, she is cruel, but equally warped. This last chapter goes to some lengths to make it clear a trait of Naomi that has already been brought up several times: how she tries to hide behind a mask what she really feels and is. You see, if Naomi really hated her sister and acted like Leah and the others, she wouldn’t be one to pull Nell out of harms way.

But she did. The chapter made it clear she were the one who did. The chapter also made a point to make Anna remember her own sister while showing us how perverted Mr. and Dr. Sano are as they brought up both their
daughters.

And in that perversion, what do they want? Their daughters to love each other, but only in name, only as a brand (and that is exactly what the F-4 are: a brand to Naomi, as the heir, to stick to). My Goddess, I pieced all this while at dinner!

It didn’t even occur to me as I read that Anna might work towards healing Nell and Naomi’s relationship. But it might! That way we would have not only
the start of Naomi’s redemption, but Anna gaining true allies – and maybe romantic interests – within BSA.

Judging by Artemis priorities, Annabelle will need Nell and Naomi.

Sorry, sorry. My other comment focused too much in one piece of information instead of looking at the chapter as the start of Nell AND Naomi’s main arc. Sisterhood is something central in the narrative and you left the Sato sisters arc as the last, a possible turning point in Anna’s misery at the mercy of the BSA.

I don’t expect, if it happens, that Naomi just completely change in a single day. And she will most likely feel a rivalry with Nell when Anna is involved… but they will no longer be enemys or the heir of the Sano’s talking to the ugly duck of the family. They will be sisters. And sisters who fell deeply in love with the same shrinkee who is suffering because of them and their families.

I hope you see this new comment before posting chapter 35. Again, I am grateful for all your effort. Thank you and until the next chapter.

Author's Response:

This is such a well-thought out point, Mr in A suit.

I can't speak on what hasn't happened yet, but Naomi and Nell's relationship most certainly has some parallels between Annabelle and Artemis'. If you've read the newest chapter (Spoiler for ch 35), you probably saw a snippet of Nell and Annabelle comparing their better-liked sisters. 

Whether Naomi and Nell grow closer as a result of their shared love of Annabelle is yet to be seen. It may be the very thing that shatters their relationship permanently...

Thanks again for the comment, Mr in A suit.

You always make me consider my characters in a deeper and new way.

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed [Report This]
Date: November 07 2022 8:37 PM Title: Chapter 34

 I had planned on commenting chapter 33, and then saw 34 was out. What
a day! And I totally support more chapters for the Sano arc! God knows how sattisfied I am to see Nell and Anna together.

Anna became exasperated because she didn’t stand up for Tessa, but she has no real power in business matters and it’s just too cute how Nell became so selfaware of her opinion. Anna just can’t see it because: 1. usually she is the one being selfaware of others; 2. Nell is bigger than a building to her.

But, despite her lack of power, Nell acts out whenrever Anna is involved – she is probably the first person to treat Nell with kindness and friendship inside the BSA and the same is also true to Anna. They are lonely and have a lot in common.

Does that mean Nell will help with the Dufort’s reunion? Maybe, but she will certainly want to keep Anna to herself. The reason is simple: Nell will imprint on Anna the same way Steven’s owner did. If you asked me now, I’d say neither Dr. Sano nor anyone knows what Anna really is.

Everyone assume she is just type 0 because she has the healing factor, but, as Dr. Sano said, she is one of a kind, something that has been pointed many times in the past. She is stronger than Bitsy, Steven is not imprinted but Poppy only appears to her and we can assume her healing factor is also stronger. The first one in almost a decade? So she can very well be something a little different.

Yes, Poppy is obsessive but over any and all giants and giantess. Poppy doesn’t really care who, she will call any girl her goddess. Why? If everyone
can be, no one really is to her. The only one Poppy really cares…

It’s really something to think. Seeing how Naomi treats her, how she is not used to praises and is not regarded as a heir, I can understand why Nell would even be willing to imprint on Anna if it meant forging an unbreakable bound between them.

And Anna and Naomi? Oh I can see a dream sequence: Naomi has Poppy in her hands, but she is not the big one here. Soon a shadow is cast upon the two as a certain stale stench impregnates the air. Naomi doesn’t understand, but Annabelle remembers the aroma of Nell’s socks.

I will comment more on Artemis, but I need to think after this last chapter.

You always put a lot of effort and I just want you to know that I am grateful. As always, thank you for your dedication and for sharing on the site. I might
not comment as often as I did due to work, but I am reading. I am going to follow this story till it’s over!

Author's Response:

Hey Mr in A suit,

Another thought provoking comment. To be honest, I haven't given much thought to Annabelle's Naomi nightmare yet, but your idea is interesting. Though, I'm not sure how much I want Naomi and Nell to interconnect just yet.

As always, your theories are always fun to read. 

I'm glad you're liking Nell and Annabelle's dynamic. Their relationship will start showing some interesting parallels to other characters pretty soon. 

I'm struggling to come up with something else to say that isn't a spoiler, so instead I'm going to leave with: I think you are going to really enjoy the upcoming chapter.

Thanks again as always Mr in A suit. 

And don't worry about commenting. Whenever you can, I appreciate it.