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Reviewer: iki Signed [Report This]
Date: October 14 2023 7:10 PM Title: An Afternoon at the Pool

You're by far one of the best writers on this platform.

The detailed and desciptive way you write is unmatched. I'm honestly impressed and slightly envious of your writing skills.

Love the length of your stories too. It all builds up so well and it adds to how immersive everything is.

I'm commenting on this story specifically because it is one of my favorite ones, and that's saying something with all the great content you've created so far...

The part where Lisa lays with her head resting in her boyfriends lap, grins at him and then simply opens her mouth to indicate she's more than willing to eat unfortunate little Dennis after others were conflicted has to be one of the best scenes in vore history lol.

Lisa and Konstantin, along with Hannah, are my favorite characters and I'm hoping to be able to read more about their 'adventures' in the near future ;-)

I find Lisa to be a more quiet and reserved character, but with a possible darker side to it, one that she maybe keeps a little hidden. It is clear however that she absolutely loves vortex and would never pass up on the opportunity to consume a tiny, even if it's someone vaguely familiar to her. Konzi on the other hand is more nonchalant. He doesn't really care about the fate of the unlucky tinies, but seems more than happy to help satisfy his loving gf's cravings.

Lisa and Konstantin seem perfect for writing more couple related content. Perhaps they can be featured in a story together again, where Lisa is fed by her bf like in this one. Would be interesting if Lisa and Konstantin for example come across an ex-bf of Lisa who has hit a rough path and hence came into contact with Vortex. A bit of smut between the two (or three) of them would be wonderful too.

Mentioning couple related content, I also loved the parts where sex was involved afterwards and how to story went back and forth between the perspective of the young couple enjoing themselves and the simultaneous horrific experiences of their tiny victims.

The way you switch perspectives througout basically all your stories is great btw, giving us readers an insight into the experiences of both pred and preys. And the digestion parts are *chef's kiss*.

Hannah I like because to me she is the most complicated and interesting character. As other readers have mentioned before, she is may even be the cruelest of them all. She's obviously completly conflicted and in denail about what she really wants. But gradually she puts her principles more and more in perspective in order to justify her desire. Unlike the others, she's also the one that clearly derives sexual pleasure from tormenting and eating tinies. Would love to read how she would react if she were to come across a young tiny who she knows for sure is innocent... This would put her moral values truly to the test I believe. Will she give in to her feral (and sexual) needs, or will her conscience keep her from going though with what she deep inside really wants to do. Or perhaps this will turn her on even more, as she knows that there's no way to justify her actions any longer. The innocence of the prey would also add to the cruelty of the pred.

I cannot be critical of your work, but if I were to make one general suggestion it would be to focus a bit more on writing conversations between the characters and, when fitting the story, between pred and prey. The conversations you write read so well and naturally, so I wonder why they make up such a relatively small part of your stories.

Again, truly appreciate your work! It's amazing!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your kind words! :) I really appreciate them!

And yes, I have stories planned for Lisa, Konstantin and Hannah in the future as well. Lisa and Konstantin will play a role in the next story, actually, and I am going to get back to Hannah as well. I agree with you that she is probably the most complicated of all my characters and, in some ways, even more evil than Tanja. She has an inner moral voice that tells her that what she is doing is wrong, but she does it anyway to satisfy much more base desires. And then keeps twisting her principles to justify her behaviour.

I agree with you regarding the dialogue. I need to write more of it, and it's something I'm still practising to make a bigger part of the stories. Between pred and prey characters it tends to be limited because of the way normal-sized people treat shrinkies in this universe (as food that you don't speak to). But I will definitely try to expand it where it offers itself, especially when it involves characters like Tanja or Hannah.

Again, thank you so much for your lovely review. It always makes my day to hear such words of high praise! :)

Reviewer: kbDArt Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 07 2023 7:02 PM Title: An Afternoon at the Pool

I rather liked this one - a lot of your stories involve unaware vore, which in itself is good, but I think the fact that they knew a couple of the young tinies from their club and still casually vored them made this even better. Also interesting to see a volunteer tiny and his POV.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I like unaware stories quite a lot. In fact, one of the reasons I'm writing in this particular setting is that it allows for all types of "pred awareness" - they can be completely aware what they're doing and enjoying (like Tanja), casually aware but not really caring about the prey, or completely unaware.

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