Date: March 22 2021 12:33 PM Title: A Night of Giving in
Ok, so I love the first chapter for this (I've read all three and am now reviewing them)
You definitely did a great job describing the characters here, Courtney seems like a great middle aged/milf giantess character, plump and pudgy, while having some appropriate feet for a woman of her size/build.
Love the scenes of him getting some 'righteous' revenge on his racist bigot Aunt by pleasuring himself to her feet and using he mouth XD (the added details of her having alcohol on her breath and it bombarding him was a nice visual)
And the ending XD that was great.
Author's Response:
Thank you, Think she's my most interesting character and will definitely be revisiting her.
Date: January 22 2021 11:38 PM Title: A Night of Giving in
Loving it so far! The aunt dynamic is always so fun to read. I hope we get to see exactly how bad she stinks when she eats that taco bell! Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Thank you! There is definitely a chance.
[Report This]Date: January 22 2021 12:46 AM Title: A Night of Giving in
I actually really like the start to this story. The power dynamic is very interesting and what appeals most to me. Here you have this giantess, who already has a dislike for you, and on top of that, she has differing political views... I find that very very erotic.
As far as criticism goes, I would say just tighten up the grammar and sentence structure a bit. I say "a bit" because your sentences are very descriptive and fun to read, but some of them would have benefited from a comma or two (Or broken up into two sentences). And just some other areas where proper punctuation and capitalization would have helped. And keep an eye on your verb tenses being consistent. None of us here are grammar Nazi’s… but it does make the story more enjoyable to read.
That aside, I really like getting to read the main characters thoughts and feelings throughout the chapter… first person is awesome for that and I really like what you’ve done so far. Funny how he was really giving it to her like he was the dominant one in charge… but I sense that dynamic is going to change pretty quick. I’m really excited to see what happens next!
Welcome to the site! Please keep writing!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and I will definitely keep in mind your suggestions.