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Reviewer: InscrutableDjinn Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: January 26 2022 9:37 AM Title: Renewal

Ok, so now that a lot more of "the plan" has been laid out I have a few things to say. This story has gone off the rails into the realm of sheer, absurd stupidity. Jisoo and all of her batshit crazy family are a bunch of hypocrites (as has been reiterated upon many times over). They claim they want a perfect world, and will secure their rule by not trying to fix wrongs in the world but to greatly exacerbate them in the hopes that all those that suffer from their actions don't hate them for it. To go from creating specks with the sole reason being making the rest of humanity despise and brutalize them, only to plan to microspeck the rest and have them be at the mercy of normal speck is incredibly stupid in so many ways. For example, the current specks currently survive on the meager handouts of normal people and society. If all of that society and people are turned to microspecks then they all starve. Unless the Amrita corp is somehow able to reach and feed, clothe and otherwise support everyone on the planet the death toll will be in the billions. In which case it might be more humane to just release a bioweapon to kill them instead of messing around with shrinking so they all have to suffer in one way or another. I guess at this point I'm just confused at all the problems they're creating, instead of solving for their "perfect" world, which by all evidence is in reality more of a tyrannical police state built on hatred of each other to avoid hatred of the cause of the architects of it all. I'm a little curious if the Amrita corp has their employees sign in with a sieg-heil before they goose step their way to the office with plans to destroy the human race. I hate to be so critical of a once great storyline but while there may be some mildly interesting drama left to unfold the reasoning and basis for a lot of it grows weaker with every chapter.

The only good thing about this chapter is how Eren seems to have grown a spine and a shred of a conscience. Which while refreshing is starkly in opposition to his behavior and reactions to all of this happening before. He defends Alice and her brother now, but in the moment and after watching their execution all he could muster was a whole bunch of "meh, they were bad I guess." I find his indignation to be justified, however I also find it to be wholly out of character.

Author's Response:

"This story has gone off the rails into the realm of sheer, absurd stupidity." 

So I actually really like more critical reviews but I think that's just very mean and not exactly constructive. On to your review itself I do disagree with your analysis for a couple of reasons, but I definitely like discussing about it in a mutually respectful way. I don't think you really understand that the Amrita Corporation or why a lot of characters act how they do. The Amrita Corporation isn't actually trying to make the world a better place. It wants world domination. However they cannot outright come out and say that to all their members and employees, since obviously some people would disagree. Therefore they say that humans are evil, or that it is all for the greater good, or that their family members are gods and have a divine right to rule. 

Some characters like Jisoo, Ruiwen, and Grace fall into the category of believing that they are gods are have the right to do whatever they want to humanity since they think they know better than them. And for Jisoo, it's also because she fundamentally hates ordinary people. Jisoo being a hypocrite isn't really a criticism, since that is a part of who she is as a character. She is supposed to be a hypocrite at this point in her development.

Other characters like Xiangling, Lianfei and Lukas on the other hand don't see the Amrita Corporation as doing it all for the greater good, but support it because they as individuals will greatly benefit from it. Lianfei who married into the family will be given lots of power, as would Xiangling who worked for the company then had a relationship with Grace, and Lukas has the opportunity to be one of the humans not shrunken by Operation Deliverance and also gain a lot of power money and influence. This is one reason why lots of Amrita Corporation employees do what they do, because they know if they are victorious they and their families would have a lot to benefit, which in addition to a very careful vetting process explains why they are loyal. Then finally you have Satsuki. She is a character who makes it very clear that she understands what the Amrita Corporation is doing if they claim to be saviors is hypocritical. The entire point of her conversation with Eren in a previous chapter was to make it very clear that the true purpose of the Amrita Corporation is world domination, but she goes through with it anyways without caring about the supposed justifications because she thinks they are a waste of time, since she just wants to be a god-queen and have power. 

As for your point about Eren, try to put yourself in his shoes. You are in love with a woman, but now have seen her darker side. Sure she killed some people, but those were two people who he barely knew and one of them tried to kill him and the other defended his would be killer. So he can look past that for the most part. However Maddie is someone who he considers a friend, is his boss, and he has seen her change of heart. Obviously when Maddie is in trouble, it will be much more impactful, and it happens right after Satsuki reveals everything to him so he is especially sensitive to that right there and then. There has been no precedent for him before like this, so I disagree with your assertion that it is 'out of character' for him to have a reaction like that. 

Like I said I welcome all criticism but I also really don't appreciate the unnecessary statement at the start, and don't really agree with your points although I do believe everybody is entitled to their views on something. However if you think the story has gone off the rails, trust me it only gets worse from here. 

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 25 2022 2:41 PM Title: Renewal

   Ah, yes!  The same old excuse:  "We're doing it for The Greater Good!"

   Jisoo tells Eren that specks killing microspecks is for the good of the whole world.  Satsuki claims killing both Jisoo and Keqing is for the good of the whole family.  And the Nazis claimed killing six million Jews was for the good of all Germany.


 Describing that over-used cliche as "bullshit" would be putting it too kindly.





Author's Response:

The road to hell is paved with good intentions they say.

Reviewer: MickShh Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25 2022 5:44 AM Title: Renewal

Great chapter. Eren seems to be back to his normal self. Was wondering when he would realize how evil they were. 

If what Jisoo said is actually their true plan, it makes sense in a truly gross and cruel way, like Hitler wanting lebensraum for his "people". I feel as though the people of this world are too complacent though. Unless there was some kind of mind altering, I feel like this would've been figured out by many many more people. Just looking at today, powerful entities are held under such a microscope by every-day people, I feel like the Amrita Corp would've imploded. But that's just me. I assume you have explanations for these things coming as they're huge loopholes. 

But as of now it's pretty slated that Amrita corp are essentially people who have literal god complexes and are Zedong's. 

I'm really interested in where you're going to take this.  



Author's Response:

There actually is a canon explanation as to why they can get away with so much which has kinda sorta been talked about before! Next chapter talks about it a lot more though, but there are abilities of the Fang Sisters Descendants behind just shrinking people and super strength.

Reviewer: Cloud Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25 2022 2:20 AM Title: Renewal

This is my least favorite chapter. That Erin is so easily manipulated, and that he's willing to try and turn Jisoo against the corporation who controls the world is insanity. He's no more powerful than Jisoo is to stop them, and yet this delusion fuels them both to try, even if it means becoming fugitives against a corporation that has unlimited resources and the control of every force in the world. 



Author's Response: Im sorry you didn’t like the chapter!

Reviewer: lightwing Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2022 9:23 PM Title: Renewal

Wow.  Glad Eren and Jisoo had that conversation.  Also Satsuki, what a schemer.  As for the Amrita Corp's big plan, I want them to succeed.  Honestly, I want their plan to come to pass but then I want it to work TOO well.  There are always unforeseen and unexpected things that have ways of messing up carefully laid plans.  Even when they work, if they work more than they were supposed to, that's a problem.  Their reason for allowing specks to be mistreated, the whole divide and conquer idea may work too well and nothing gets done or too many die fighting each other.  The population loss from causing a second worldwide Diminution might cause too many casualties as well.  The environmental damage from critical infrastructure falling apart or going into meltdown would be problematic, people shrinking during winter and freezing, etc.  It reminds me of what happened after the bubonic plague: if it's too effective and there are not enough people left to keep everything running, the balance of power shifts and the old power structure falls apart.

Every chapter that comes out leaves me more excited than before!



Author's Response:

Fun fact about the bubonic plague, it is the only time in human history since the Neolithic Revolution where there was a dip in the population. Around ten percent of the world died which is insane, I am very thankful to be born into a world with air conditioning, modern hygiene and streaming services.

Reviewer: kenrios Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 24 2022 1:13 PM Title: Renewal

Well, it looks like we're about to climax here. This chapter has left me with a shivering feeling in my stomach. There is a lot that those two have to face, too much power is like David vs Goliath. And its a truly big Goliath. However, what decision Jisoo and Eren will take is unpredictable, Eren's is clear but Jisoo I don't know. That Satsuki is too cunning and evil, if she talks to Riuwen before Jisoo I don't even want to think what  will happen to Maddie. In short, suspense... a lot of suspense as this literary work has always been since it began. Keep it up Kardo.



Author's Response:

We aren’t finished yet!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 24 2022 5:29 AM Title: Renewal

Well Jisoo looks like u finally have to face your hipocracy as well as your families,.  Poor Maddie though it looks like she maybe ok for the time being.  Now what about poor Maeve.



Author's Response: So I’ll admit I don’t know science well enough to know how someone that small would do in the cold for a prolonged period of time, but hopefully she’s alright!

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