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Reviewer: Panzerhunter Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01 2021 3:08 AM Title: A Weekend Alone: Tina

You've seen the end... Haven't you...?

Reviewer: Inwiththebooks Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 01 2021 2:36 AM Title: Time for Change

I dunno man, could just be that smug big girls gonna win and be smug. Just my hot take.

Reviewer: Panzerhunter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 31 2021 5:06 AM Title: A Weekend Alone: Tina

Once again Tina gives a master-class in how to look so suspicious she might as well be holding a flashing sign proclaiming her guilt. I think the other commenters are forgetting Dana. We haven't seen her in a few chapters, but she's the one who would have put a missing persons report out for Eva. Why she would have waited this many weeks, I wouldn't understand.

I'd be very surprised at this point if Tina is not suspect number 1 in the eyes of the police, and even Dana. I'd expect after how flustered Tina got when prompted on Eva's whereabouts plus weeks of no Eva that any denial that Tina is involved would have trickled to 0. After all, Dana would know about the shrink ray's existence, and if Amy figured it out, Dana would likely have figured it out as well.

Guessing how this ends is actually extremely difficult, because we have no information on the capabilities of the shrink ray. Does it have some way to locate a shrunken object? Can Tina just blast a wide area until Eva shows up? I think Eva can be restored, because despite Amy using Tina for her own ends, I don't think Amy would want to hurt Tina by having Eva lost forever.

Does Dana suspect Tina? Does the cop? I would expect the cop to have a better poker-face than Tina. It doesn't take Sherlock Holmes to see all the signals Tina is putting off. Tina is so delusional that she sees what she wants to see. She doesn't even seem aware enough to acknowledge the wall her back is against. Her alarm bells ring, and she puts them on snooze.

Is Tina going to crumble over the weekend or is Eva? We've already seen cracks growing and guilt starting to eat at Tina. A whole weekend where she can't think about much else especially after her latest torture of Eva. Eva is in a realm with no sound and no motion. She's on the scale of atoms, which means she's millions of times smaller than a millimeter or billions of times smaller than a human. Sensory deprivation wrecks people in real life in hours. she's got at bare minimum 48 hours + Friday after Tina left and Monday before Tina arrives. If she's strong she can recover, but I doubt it's pretty.

Did shrinking that small make any unintentional modifications to Eva's biology? She's already part plant.

This is looking like it will turn out poorly for Tina. The only question is how much of Eva will be left to save.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2021 11:04 AM Title: A Weekend Alone: Tina

Amy is definitely manipulating Tina to some extent, but there's one reason against shrinking Tina. One missing person is an isolated incident. Two missing people who worked at the same place and knew each other is pattern that the police will not ignore.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 28 2021 3:55 AM Title: A Weekend Alone: Tina

Tina has the mind of a child.
It becomes more clear to me that Amy has complete control in this relationship and probaly always had with her. Always being manipulated by Amy to do stuff.

Tina can see the straightup bully who doesn't hide behind false kindness, but not people who act kind to her, but clearly manipulate her.

Not saying that Amy is pure evil and also has limits how much hard should be done. But I have a feeling when she feels threatened enough by certain factors that increase the chance of being found out and that such a threatlevel dangerously coming close to a certain threshold for her, than she could decide that keeping Eva alive in the care of Tina is a liability.

And with that reasoning, she can use Tina as a possible scapegoat. Have a feeling she built in safety nets unaware to Tina.
I think that Amy after a while came to the conclusion that after her experiments, letting Eva live would be dangerous.

Letting Tina do this in the office, not her, but Tina. To give someone the idea that it is ok to shrink someone to subatomic levels is safe, is beyond absurd.
Your theories would be miles away from being correct with so many possible variables and something never tested before.
Those assurances are lies, but Amy is well aware of what easy buttons to push to get Tina to do something and justify them for Tina who is so willing to accept any justification from someone what she has been doing to Eva.

Amy could have decided that she has enough data in combination with her fear the police won't let it go and that there is enough evidence left behind by Tina to take her down aswell. 
Tina is weak, and already gone to Eva's house leaving clues behind and is careless and Amy knows that.
Eva has to eventually disappear for good before something goes wrong. If Tina is cought with Eva, than Amy will be in trouble.

Maybe Amy knows something else that could endanger her, but that action was clearly to get rid of someone. Because you can't make it believable that Amy or Tina can ever find Eva at subatomic level. That is impossible. If Eva ever wants to get back, she has to grow back herself.

But this kidn of action from Amy must for 80 percent had the intention of getting rid of her for good.

Reviewer: sandman579 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2021 2:51 AM Title: A Weekend Alone: Tina

Tina set out wanting to break Eva's spirit. Despite her telling herself and Eva that she wasn't a bully, she wasn't cruel, and that she's only doing proper karma towards Eva the cracks are forming from what I've been thinking. Tina, what you been doing towards her isn't isn't jailtime or punishment, it is abuse. Her durability from the shrinking only encouraged you to do some very violent things she would survive but still feel. Of course Eva is still fighting and resisting you. In her mind none of this is justified and fair. Her treatment has kind of been like living with an abusive lover who beats you and degrades you. Heck Tina never even ahd to do the usual most of us do with a horrible boss, pack up and quit. Eva was fired and out the door with Tina getting her job. In a way the proper punishment was already delivered.

 

The ironic thing is that now that Tina's thinking maybe I am being too cruel, maybe I am going to far, and that when she brings Eva back she's going to take it easy and slow for a bit is that it might be too late. It wouldn't surprise me if the experience finally breaks Eva's will or mind. Especially if Tina let's slip that the police finally started looking for her but have no leads but even the investigator didn't have confidence in discovering foul play. Thing is if Eva finally breaks down when Tina's finally feeling guilty and ready to reverse course, what will she do? Be overcome with guilt and try to put Eva's mind back together. Just convince herself she was worrying over nothing, the bug's will has finally broke. Or spend a good amount of time either ignoring her or halfheartedly interacitng with her before deciding to change?

 

I'm curious if Amy has a role to play in an investigation into Eva's disapperance. As Tina claimed, Eva really didn't have any friends at work and I doubt Amy would start a tip off without a plan, so the missing persons report could've came from some random friedn Eva knows outside of work. If Tina finally has a guilt trip and confesses to Amy she's thinking on growing Eva back and letting her go, I can easily see Amy betraying her. If Eva grows back, she can name-call Amy as someone who knew she'd been shrunk and kidnapped and even tormented her alongside her kidnapper when she found her. Unless Tina has some convincing character development about hwo she's putting it all behind her, at some point I can see Amy and Tina fighting to shrink the other, one to cover her tracks and the other in self defense.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2021 1:21 AM Title: A Weekend Alone: Tina

In this story, you should never take one character's perspective as an accurate view of what's going on. Tina thinks that the cop doesn't suspect her and will now move on, so it's entirely possible that Tina is under suspicion, and missed the signs. Did the cop really not see anything, or did the cop find Tina's behaviour (especially body language) suspicious and didn't tip her off? When the cop said that she can't comment on an ongoing investigation, that says nothing and could mean anything. Or the cop could've taken Tina's behaviour as a sign that Tina wasn't expecting to see her.

So Tina still has misgivings. What this means is that Tina knew how extreme her torture was, and did it anyway. She could let up, or get used to this.

And has Amy been contacted by the police?

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2021 1:21 PM Title: Brought Low

Tina has now completed her journey toward the Dark Side, and for her, it's probably just dealing with the consequences of that from now on (or not). Eva, I think, it about to reach her turning point, though I can see her going either way: she breaks, or she becomes unbreakable. Thinking about where the story can go from here, it seems like the former would almost make things too simple. Eva submits, Tina wins. You could throw in an external complication from Amy or Dana, but that's the end of their character arcs. But if Tina, in her current mental state, figures out that she can't break Eva, that'll keep their character development going for the rest of the story.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 21 2021 5:51 PM Title: Time for Change

I could raise you that if you are small enough, not even those forces could do anything to Eva. At a certain point those forces are happening 'above you' in a sense. It is indeed an interesting development however. 

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It could. But in no way should people, with any device what soever find Eva in there. Including Amy or Tina. Now that she is subatomic.
This is something Eva must resolve herself.

I agree Panzer, I don't think Tina thought this through and I'm not sure Amy doesn't care at all. It must hit it some point. These are indeed actions you would do to someone who killed your whole family/serial killer.
Keeping someone locked up in a cellar with out the torture or raping is already extreme.
It is interesting that Tina finds some steps extreme to do, but subatomic level shrinking is extreme torture.

Interesting to see where the writer is going with this. Can't wait for the next chapter.

 

 

Reviewer: Panzerhunter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 21 2021 5:06 PM Title: Brought Low

So... does Tina even comprehend how many orders of magnitude there are between bad boss that she could have quit at any time and her shrinking, kidnapping, raping, and torturing that boss? On a surface level, she knows she's doing something wrong, but she doesn't seem to have the maturity to understand. Amy understands and doesn't care.

I'd say you've made a far more effective shrink torture story than any I've ever read by having it largely from Eva's perspective, over so many chapters. Giving Eva several glimmers of hope and forcefully nullifying them. But Eva is stronger than Tina. Anyone else would have been broken already. Weeks ago. The Gym incident or being used as a sex toy in her own bed, or sleeping on coins would have broken even the strongest spirit.

If Eva survives this then she cannot be broken. I hope this finally backfires on Tina in some way. Caught by someone, or the magnitude of her crimes finally hits her, or she turns herself and Amy in after seeing the result of shrinking Eva subatomic for a weekend, or Eva evolves to be able to control her own size or learns the secrets of matter manipulation from being shrunk so small and becomes a god, but a kinder one than Tina.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 21 2021 9:23 AM Title: Brought Low

Tina seemed to lose control. If she walks out that door, no one will find Eva again. Even now she could not find her.

The dangers of shrinking someone so small is that a lot can happen. Gust of wind, many forces can take Eva away from that place and she would never be found again. Tina has fire the beam at random at the floor.

Interesting development. Realistically no-one should be able to find Eva. The odds are astronomical.

If Tina just chose her to be 6 inch and just treat her like a normal pet and not paying attention to outburst, she would have a lot of less stress.

 



Author's Response:

I could raise you that if you are small enough, not even those forces could do anything to Eva. At a certain point those forces are happening 'above you' in a sense. It is indeed an interesting development however. 

Reviewer: abovemail Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 21 2021 5:29 AM Title: Brought Low

Now THIS is nano. Great job describing the changing perspectives at each level. Looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

Thank you! Glad to hear it!

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2021 10:38 PM Title: A New Tina

Sexual content in this story felt a bit odd at first - it is a logical outcome of Tina's character arc, but I got used to a story that didn't have any entrapment or near-insertion. Having said that, it's also the porny stuff I like, which is good.

Otherwise, what I've said previously still applies. This seems to be coming to a head, and I'm excited to see how it all climaxes, and potentially blows up.



Author's Response:

Hahaha, I know how you feel. To be honest I often worry if this size fetish story has enough size fetish in it. Though it does have its lewder chapters imo. I can only hope the last handful of chapters make folks happy. 

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2021 10:53 AM Title: A New Tina

Great chapter again. So much detail and possibilties.

Tina will never be satisfied and will have to deal with so much stuff.
In this you can clearly see she admits she would never lasted if she were shrunken.

She sees to much qualities in Eva and doesn't hate her anymore.

I like how Tina sees some things as to awful, but not noticing that letting someone understand that they aren't a person anymore and remove all self worth at the deepest levels is a faith much worse than death.

Eva gets clearly the hardest mental hits of everything, but slowly but surely Tina also gets her karma.

Where Tina and Amy are on the losing side with is that they are forced to go over boundries they don't want to cross. It is already clear to both of them, the crossed many boundries.
In the last two chapters it is clear that they have to justify to themselves with reasons or the guilt pops up.

Also wondering if the police have already taken her stuff from the office.
Or was in the Eva's house where Tina had visited.

I also wonder if Amy and Tina will keep seeing eye to eye on everything.

There is another boundry I have in mind, that the two will maybe cross.
Destroying someones possesions, something that has sentimental value for Eva, like a car, house, are a precious gift from a loved one.


I love how every action have consequences for everyone and not for Eva alone. That what I like so much about this story. Realistic logistics and real people with feelings, moods, morals and values, etc.

 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 07 2021 1:39 PM Title: Internal Discord

If Amy and Tina knew how much progress they're making with Eva...

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2021 8:53 AM Title: Internal Discord

Thank you for this story again, with so much rich detail.

Eva going through this is an interesting mental journey. What Tina and Amy go through is also an interesting mental journey. Tina more calmer demeanor is because of Amy. Tina still a sub to Amy and Dana. Maybe they are in a subtle way bigger bullies to her.

I wonder if Tina visiting Eva's house is going to give problems.
Always having to be carefull and therefor concentrating on to many things is also not easy to live with. I wonder if Tina likes a little bigge Eva. A six inch Eva is more fun to play with than a 1 inch Eva.

This is one of the few times i'm anxious to see how this played out.

Super good work again on the details.

 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2021 7:38 PM Title: Lab Rat

Eva's perspective ends by calling Tina "Miss Tina". It's subtle, and yet tells so much.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2021 6:36 AM Title: Lab Rat

Very good how you keep these transitions in behavior interesting and believable. That keep the story great. And the logitics are very interesting.

I love these subtle uncomfortable feelings Amy and Tina have in the background and interesting to see this develop over time. Very good wrting in that part again.

 

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2021 7:49 PM Title: Lab Rat

Exciting stuff again. Looking forward to the continuation of this journey.

 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: July 25 2021 5:02 PM Title: A New Home

@Barrowman: It's subtle, but I see it now. Tina is now fully dominant over Eva, but she still has not learned to dominate people her own size. With Amy, it's easy to see how this will go. Tina will become Amy's unwitting research assistant in observation of a test subject. But with Dana, there's a major conflict. Tina cares about Dana's opinion, but she has to go against what Dana would think of Eva's situation. This seems like a conflict where something's going to have to give, and the most obvious course of Tina's character arc is to dominate normal-sized people the way she dominates shrunken people, in which case Tina would become a force of nature. The hatred of bullies that was set up earlier would pay off there, and the rationalizations needed to justify kidnapping somebody will give that quite the dark twist.

As for Eva, she does still have her will. I wonder if she could fully process what it means to be helpless and bullied, while keeping that will at least somewhat intact?

@Asterisk: Don't worry, I enjoyed the beach story as a fun diversion.

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