Date: August 20 2021 7:14 AM Title: Chapter 11: The Broken Armada
Interesting to see what the Devourer will do if she is truly experiencing guilt for her past actions or not. Wonder if she'll try to engage in physical activity with the farmer boy on Earth via her avatar; figure she would have to given her real size.
I'm guessing whatever clash you have going on between the Devourer and the remnants of the armada, it'll end up being a pretty one-sided engagement. Unless you have a surprise in store and the Devourer can be physically harmed by something that is basically microscopic in scale compared to her.
Date: July 05 2021 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 1: Devour
To be honest I don't really like rampage stories because they are usually pretty mindless with little to no character development. I'm usually drawn to character driven stories because I'm a hopeless romantic who likes to see people change for the better. This story is seems to be evolving from just being a rampage story into being so much more. Those feelings the Devourer is developing are what keep me reading. I'm hoping they are coming from her heart because I would love to watch as she developes emotions and feelings (hopefully even romantic ones ;)) while she goes from being a monster to being an empathetic person. Regardless, just keep up the good work! I know my hopes are high but I feel like you can make this story even better. Godspeed!
First of all thank you very much for giving my story a read, and I have to agree with you to an extent when it comes to rampage stories. I mean I like them but I want my stories to have a purpose, not just mindless destruction. But I'm afraid that my story will have those rampages from time to time. I mean the main character is a cosmic goddess that Devourers planets, right? Either way I hope you continue to read the story.
Date: July 05 2021 9:21 PM Title: Chapter 6: A Cosmic Choice.
I normally don't make outright predictions, but I'm guess that this "much bigger planet close by," is most likely Jupiter. And if it's not Jupiter, then most likely Saturn. And if not Saturn, then I really don't know which planet it is, assuming it's within our solar system.
In any case, I look forward to the feeding frenzy that seems to be round the corner in the next chapter. Hope to see more soon.
Those predictions are not bad, but I'm afraid they are not right. But don't you worry I'll make the story as interesting as I can.
Date: June 27 2021 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 5: The Blue Planet.
Interesting. If this blue planet is the one I think it is, then this story just took a surprising turn. Wonder if this next world will be spared. Either way, looking forward to more.
Thank you so much I'll keep writing the story I hope you enjoy it more.
Date: June 24 2021 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 4: Sacrifice In The Void
So I was right then, and the Devourer ended up surviving unscathed (at least I assume she took no serious damage). I'm guessing she is going to pursue that ship pretty relentlessly for now. Any chance of other characters from other planets entering into this story, or even another Devourer as a potential antagonist, assuming there is in fact more than one of them in this world you've created?
Would like to see more of the character development of the Devourer in future chapters. It would be amusing to see if she develops feelings of guilt and atonement for what she has done, and what she would be able to do as a show of redemption. Given her size, I would guess that would be a challenging feat for her to do something to make up for it, unless she could somehow shrink her size down so as to be less dangerous when in close proximity to others. Just something to consider.
Anyways, curious to see where this ends up going.
You are very Perceptive, I don't want to spoil the story but I'll make sure to keep the story interesting. Thanks again for your support.
Date: June 23 2021 9:54 PM Title: Chapter 1: Devour
So it looks like her majesty is resorting to a kamikaze attack. I get the feeling that it won't do much to harm the Devourer, but maybe I'm wrong and it could actually do some damage. Curious as to how she will interact with the survivors, assuming she can communicate with them in a way that is safe for them.
Overall, interesting story concept so far.
Thanks very much for your support, got any advice always happy to hear.