[Report This]Date: March 23 2015 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 10
I think you may have gone a bit heavy on the social realism front. Otherwise this is effectively an epic.
[Report This]Date: June 01 2014 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 10
This story deserves more attention. Very good story and characters; I thoroughly enjoyed it. The only peeve I had was spelling mistakes, but I'll let it slide ;D
Author's Response:
Well at the time I wrote the story I was of the mind set that I'm writing a story for free and people should be grateful I went through the trouble of writing it. My attitude on that has improved a bit. I'm still surprised by how many people enjoy my first story more then my later ones.
Date: September 28 2008 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 10
those poor soldiers (not the dead ones). just pluck! and they're going on a ride with a 100ft newborn. lol. it was good story overall. 4/5 for plot/description/etc. 2/5 for grammar, punctuation, spelling, syntax, diction, etc. you seriously needed a beta reader. you have a lot of homonyms switched up. i.e. knew=i knew you were up to something! new=i got me a brand new girlfriend! and that sort of thing. also, there were several times when i had to reread a sentance mutliple times to figure out what you were saying. i won't go on, it's not nice to rant in a review. overall, though, it was a good story.
Author's Response: I really wasn't worried about grammer or the such while writing this story. It was just meant to be something fun. Now I don't have the drive to go back and redo anything as my current works I find far more enjoyable. My later works I concern myself more with proper spelling and word usage.
Date: June 23 2007 6:49 AM Title: Chapter 10
This story seems to be unique round here. There seems to be something for everyone, but the chapters are rather long-winded. There also seems to be hidden references to published works (e.g. H.G. Wells and Victor Hugo). However I still feel that you've done well, remarkably well.
Author's Response: I have no idea who Victor Hugo is and while I know that H.G. Wells wrote the time machine I've never read it. I'm just not interested in those types of works. Actually, if it doesn't have a uber fem or giantess in it I don't tend to be interested. I'm a fan of details and thus I tend to detail what I write a great deal plus I feel the need to make sure the reason for a happening is clear. This really wasn't meant to be a story for everyone whenever I was writing it rather I attempted to make Kate more real. She isn't entirely benevolent and indeed has quite a temper if she's pushed too far however she's not evil either. You reap what you sow for the most part with Kate and you reap more then what you sowed as well.
[Report This]Date: December 23 2006 9:24 AM Title: Chapter 10
This truly is a work of love for our favourite subject. Happiest's imagination is very broad, presenting both the gentle and violent ends of the spectrum. The only detractor is his missuse of some words, and problems with spelling and grammar. But overall, it's a great story.