[Report This]Date: January 13 2024 7:51 AM Title: The mistake
Really enjoyed that last chapter! Becoming food or rather part of a dish and cooked (and surviving the ordeal!) is hot!
Author's Response:
Thank you! Had a lot of fun writing it :)
Date: January 02 2024 5:25 PM Title: The mistake
Glad your back to writing, I enjoyed this. Still hoping for more smoothing. Especially when the people using Levi are unaware.
Author's Response:
Get ready for a new level of smoothing this next chapter :)
Date: January 02 2024 6:49 AM Title: The mistake
The story was very good in the first chapters, but the further it is going, it feels like ideas are just being recycled. It honestly got me to just skip parts, because i already kind of knew what was going to happen. It kind of feels like that holiday has been going on for months.
This part is just my personal taste/opinion and can be ignored :)// i really hope Levi gets a nice ending. i have nothing against domination i like it even, but the story is turning into just cruelty for him even if he's beginning to like it. The story is evolving into something where i cannot imagine he'll grow back ever, even if he does he's going to be completely broken. And if that happens, how is he going to face his family? Logically he'd not be able to look at them properly, besides most likely looking like a soulless human being by then. I'd be cool to see some kind of revenge actually, something where she'll understand what she did to him.
But you write your story and whatever you have in mind! I'm just some random guy on the internet!
Author's Response:
Hi guy from the internet!
Thank you for your honest review. I can see where you are coming from, it is one of the reasons it took so long for me to write a new chapter.
But I had fun writing it these past couple of days and I plan to disrupt their holiday, so it should pick up soon :)
Let me know if you have any suggestions!
[Report This]Date: October 22 2023 9:33 AM Title: The mistake
One of my all time favourite stories so far. Just perfect.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: August 27 2023 1:45 PM Title: The mistake
Glad your writing again, one of my favorite authors. Love the unaware scenarios and the smoothing is the perfect vessel for that type of content. Hope to see some more feet related content. Smoothed into nail polish maybe?
Author's Response:
Thank you!! He'll definitely go on her nails :)
[Report This]Date: July 21 2023 4:50 AM Title: The mistake
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: July 20 2023 12:28 PM Title: The mistake
A+++ writing
You're a creative artist and a cunning intelligence, and I appreciate you sharing your work with us!
Author's Response:
Wow thank you for your kind words!!
Date: July 19 2023 1:05 AM Title: The mistake
Poor Levi! As much as I love these stories I just feel bad for the protagonist and want them to have the happy ending they deserve, if they deserve it of course, and poor Levi definitely deserves it
Author's Response:
Lol, indeed :) If you have any ideas about that let me know!
[Report This]Date: May 01 2023 12:38 AM Title: The mistake
Alright, completed chpts 6-10. Can’t read any further as I’m beyond bored. The first 4 - 4.5 chapters were pretty good and intriguing, but after that, it’s just been all about humiliation and torture. I don’t mind a bit of that, but paragraph after paragraph becomes torturous to me...and then I get bored. Rate 8.5 out of 10 for the first 5 chapters, 3 of 10 thereafter, but I’ll be generous and rate a 7 of 10 overall.
Author's Response:
Ouch.. lol. Sorry to have bored you so much :)
Date: April 25 2023 1:26 AM Title: The mistake
Completed chapters 2-5. Glad to report that the grammatical mistakes and typos were drastically reduced (though a small amount remain). I did enjoy reading chapters 2 through 4, but it became apparent midway through chapter 5 that the author is writing a story that is trying to 'check all the boxes'. While the writing is good, I disdain this type of writing which tries to pander to all readers. It kind of ruins the originality and freshness of a story, IMO. Unfortunately, the toy tiny tends to lend itself to this. I try to resist such temptations in my writing, which are predominantly vore-oriented, but which include other fetishes as I think will enhance the story. I don't mean to attack this author in particular, as I think the writing is good, but I'm a bit disappointed by the trend among the 'good' authors.
Author's Response:
I corrected the grammar mistakes and rewritten some stuff from chapter 1. Keep in mind that English is not my native language so please take that in mind :)
I don't agree on checking all the boxes. I just write what I like and stay away from what I don't like. I do however consider requests from readers in the discord.
Date: April 24 2023 11:58 AM Title: The mistake
Great chapter hope the story continues. Also hope you add to Property of Lily.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll definitely continue Luna, but don't get your hopes up for Lilly..
Date: April 24 2023 12:18 AM Title: The mistake
Just read the first chapter. I’ll give it a rating after I finish the story.
It’s a very interesting setup and you’ve written an entertaining hook to immerse the reader, with lots of foreshadowing. I would give the first chapter a 9 out of 10.
Some issues - the 2nd half of the chapter in particular is littered with typos (the first half was almost clean). Secondly, I would advise against the swiching of tenses and stick to past tense to avoid grammatical mistakes.
I’ll write more after I read more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! I'll look at the first chapter and correct it. I do believe that quality picked up after that. Let me know what you think if you've read more :) Thanks!
Date: April 23 2023 8:40 PM Title: The mistake
Again, amazing story, hopefully Levi gets some retribution. Either way enjoying it Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you! Maybe I'll write a couple of endings, who knows :)
Date: November 03 2022 3:00 AM Title: The mistake
I'm loving the story so far! I would love to see an Alt. Ending where our "Hero" Levi gets some sort of retribution as I feel that sometimes it makes sense. Keep up the good work!
Date: October 19 2022 3:00 AM Title: The mistake
Really excited to see a new chapter. You did great with the vore perspective! Obviously hope he finishes the trip through her, just because her teasing is so much fun. Any idea when we might see another chapter?
Author's Response:
Thanks! I don't know when the next chapter is finished though, hopefully soon!
Date: October 19 2022 12:11 AM Title: The mistake
I really hope Levi gets some sort of payback or justice for this bullshit but with as far as things have gone it seems unlikely there can be a satisfying ending like that since it would be hard to come up with something suitable that fits the story.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback. I'm just trying to have a bit of fun ;)
[Report This]Date: June 13 2022 7:08 PM Title: The mistake
So glad I found this again! I read this a while ago and had forgotten about it. I just remembered the girls name started with an L and a vague idea of what the tags were. Spent about 10 minutes looking even with the advanced search.
Author's Response:
Thanks, but why the 2,5 star review..! lol
Date: April 15 2022 5:46 AM Title: The mistake
What I find so fascinating about the story is the fact that, from my point of view, it's neither "Gentle" nor "Cruel." For gentle, the victim suffers too much, for cruel, the victim doesn't suffer enough.
For gentle, the sister is being too hard on our brother, for cruel, it's still the sister knowing that it won't “hurt" him.
I find the story funny because of this.
Author's Response:
That is really kind of you to say, it's the exact mix I'm going for! :)
[Report This]Date: March 22 2022 3:12 AM Title: The mistake
Wonderful chapter finally getting to him getting truly used by her. Was excellent and I hope you keep going, I look forward to more if you do. Really want to see him get to experience anal at that size
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: February 04 2022 1:30 PM Title: The mistake
Very fun chapter! Something tells me once she is finished using her new toy, she will have worked up quite the appetite!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Stay tuned for chapter 8 :)