Date: July 18 2023 7:38 PM Title: Update!
Not gonna lie, this turned from hot into outright nonsensical silly.
Author's Response:
Ah ok, sorry to hear that..
[Report This]Date: May 01 2023 12:38 AM Title: The mistake
Alright, completed chpts 6-10. Can’t read any further as I’m beyond bored. The first 4 - 4.5 chapters were pretty good and intriguing, but after that, it’s just been all about humiliation and torture. I don’t mind a bit of that, but paragraph after paragraph becomes torturous to me...and then I get bored. Rate 8.5 out of 10 for the first 5 chapters, 3 of 10 thereafter, but I’ll be generous and rate a 7 of 10 overall.
Author's Response:
Ouch.. lol. Sorry to have bored you so much :)
Date: April 25 2023 1:26 AM Title: The mistake
Completed chapters 2-5. Glad to report that the grammatical mistakes and typos were drastically reduced (though a small amount remain). I did enjoy reading chapters 2 through 4, but it became apparent midway through chapter 5 that the author is writing a story that is trying to 'check all the boxes'. While the writing is good, I disdain this type of writing which tries to pander to all readers. It kind of ruins the originality and freshness of a story, IMO. Unfortunately, the toy tiny tends to lend itself to this. I try to resist such temptations in my writing, which are predominantly vore-oriented, but which include other fetishes as I think will enhance the story. I don't mean to attack this author in particular, as I think the writing is good, but I'm a bit disappointed by the trend among the 'good' authors.
Author's Response:
I corrected the grammar mistakes and rewritten some stuff from chapter 1. Keep in mind that English is not my native language so please take that in mind :)
I don't agree on checking all the boxes. I just write what I like and stay away from what I don't like. I do however consider requests from readers in the discord.
Date: April 24 2023 9:28 PM Title: Back to being a plaything
What another great chapter and so long really get into it. Can't wait for the next one and the evening of fun they about to have
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: April 24 2023 11:58 AM Title: The mistake
Great chapter hope the story continues. Also hope you add to Property of Lily.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll definitely continue Luna, but don't get your hopes up for Lilly..
[Report This]Date: April 24 2023 9:06 AM Title: Back to being a plaything
Spa is a very good idea. I love this story. This world is perfect! Thank you !
Date: April 24 2023 12:18 AM Title: The mistake
Just read the first chapter. I’ll give it a rating after I finish the story.
It’s a very interesting setup and you’ve written an entertaining hook to immerse the reader, with lots of foreshadowing. I would give the first chapter a 9 out of 10.
Some issues - the 2nd half of the chapter in particular is littered with typos (the first half was almost clean). Secondly, I would advise against the swiching of tenses and stick to past tense to avoid grammatical mistakes.
I’ll write more after I read more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! I'll look at the first chapter and correct it. I do believe that quality picked up after that. Let me know what you think if you've read more :) Thanks!
Date: April 23 2023 8:40 PM Title: The mistake
Again, amazing story, hopefully Levi gets some retribution. Either way enjoying it Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you! Maybe I'll write a couple of endings, who knows :)
Date: April 22 2023 1:44 PM Title: Full tour!
Another brilliant chapter, can't wait to find out what she has install for him next. Just love the way he is so close to other people yet they will never know only Luna. Keep it going please
Author's Response:
Thank you! Hope to post a new chapter every week.
[Report This]Date: April 18 2023 9:12 AM Title: Into the stomach!
Very good story ! I love it ! Hard to wait the next chapter ! Good Job !
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: February 26 2023 3:16 PM Title: Into the stomach!
Just read this story again for the unteenth time and just love it! Please can you start writing more chapters I really want more pussy insertion and unaware from everyone except Luna
Author's Response:
Hi! I'm currently writing the new chapter :) Stay tuned!
Date: November 03 2022 3:00 AM Title: The mistake
I'm loving the story so far! I would love to see an Alt. Ending where our "Hero" Levi gets some sort of retribution as I feel that sometimes it makes sense. Keep up the good work!
Date: October 19 2022 8:45 PM Title: Into the stomach!
Been waiting so long for this great story to continue. Not huge fan of vore but this feels different to me because of the great stuff in the other chapters and protencal of what may come. Can't wait for me of this and hopefully more sexual orientation such as pussy insertion and body jewellery. Please keep this going I'm a fan of all your stories
Author's Response:
Thanks! Don't worry, he'll definitely go back being jewelry and more after the vore :) You can always join the discord id you have specific wishes and I'll try to incorporate them :)
Date: October 19 2022 5:48 AM Title: Into the stomach!
Nice. I hope Levi does get sucked into the intestines. I love full tour vore. I wonder if he will be lost in a pile of poop, and she doesn't see him before she flushes.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Wel'll see ;)
Date: October 19 2022 3:00 AM Title: The mistake
Really excited to see a new chapter. You did great with the vore perspective! Obviously hope he finishes the trip through her, just because her teasing is so much fun. Any idea when we might see another chapter?
Author's Response:
Thanks! I don't know when the next chapter is finished though, hopefully soon!
Date: October 19 2022 12:11 AM Title: The mistake
I really hope Levi gets some sort of payback or justice for this bullshit but with as far as things have gone it seems unlikely there can be a satisfying ending like that since it would be hard to come up with something suitable that fits the story.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback. I'm just trying to have a bit of fun ;)
Date: July 17 2022 5:48 AM Title: Down the hatch!
Loving the story! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: June 22 2022 5:30 PM Title: Down the hatch!
A great story, not really into vore more a pussy insertion fan but like it anyway. Please keep it up well
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm sure he'll return to her pussy once he's back out ;)
Date: June 21 2022 9:36 PM Title: Down the hatch!
Nice. I really hope all the drinks make Luna forget about Levi. Especially if he gets caught in the villi of her small intestine so he has to spend several days in there without her remembering.
Author's Response:
Hi! Thanks! She will forget him for at least a while.
[Report This]Date: June 13 2022 7:08 PM Title: The mistake
So glad I found this again! I read this a while ago and had forgotten about it. I just remembered the girls name started with an L and a vague idea of what the tags were. Spent about 10 minutes looking even with the advanced search.
Author's Response:
Thanks, but why the 2,5 star review..! lol