[Report This]Date: June 07 2023 8:06 AM Title: White Mask
Really liked this story, very vivid, hope you write more like this
Date: February 20 2022 11:08 PM Title: White Mask
SPOILER WARNING!!!
SPOILER WARNING!!!
So I finally did it. I finally made an account on here so I could review something. You pushed me over the edge. There have been several other stories that almost did it but sadly few of them have been finished yet so I never got around to it.YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED!!!
What can I say? This story was so damn spicy! It really got me at a few parts in more ways than one! I almost choked up during the events of chapter 10 but at the same time I didn't know how to feel because the scenario was just so incredibly well done! I had a bad feeling something like that was going to happen but I absolutely did not expect it to be that extreme! It may have been totally fucked up but damn if it wasn't a ridiculously hot scenario in a cruel sort of way. I feel bad for saying it tho... I'm going to have PTSD after that. Good job!
I just loved your characters. Each one of them had a distinctly different personality and motivations.
Joel is a super relatable guy and really had me rooting for him the entire time. I really wanted Leo to make it out too damn it! That scene was straight from Avengers and I hate you for it (not really)!
Now for the main girls. I just loved how you gave each of them a different style!
So I guess I'll start by saying that Andrea was just so cruel and it was truly a spectacle to behold! The way she ruthlessly paid no mind to her fellow team and carelessly stomped right over them during the CTF game was really twisted and fun to read. I was looking forward to her getting what she deserved and would've loved to see Joel's revenge get drawn out a bit more because that psycho bitch deserved it.
Next we have Lara. What a sweet girl that didn't deserve her fait. I loved her attitude and motivations for helping Joel and Theo. I also loved her somewhat unaware and reluctant nature. She really didn't want to have to do the things she did. Her carelessness in a few scenes resulted in some very interesting and twisted scenarios. As a huge fan of unaware and reluctant gentle giantesses Lara was my second favorite.
And now for Lisa who was probably my favorite. I was already liking her confident personality and sisterly protective bond with Joel from the very beginning. I was a bit confused when you didn't really use her for a few chapters once things really started kicking off. I think she could've had a bit more presence towards the beginning of the games and getting to see her and Joel interact early on would've been interesting after the sudden shift in perspective.
My favorite thing about Lisa is how cold and confident she was. It was obvious from the beginning chapter that she wasn't a bad person and looked out for her friends but at the same time she was capable of some of the most casually brutal displays of power out of all the contestants. She was definitely my favorite giantess because she was incredibly unpredictable in how extreme she could get. She clearly didn't explicitly take pleasure in murdering people like Andrea did but at the same time she didn't really seem to have a problem with it either. She adjusted to her new circumstances very quickly and was very much a survivor.
I just could not get over how casual she was about some of the horrific things she did. If Andrea is the kind of girl that goes and burns ants with a magnifying glass and Lara is the kind of girl who takes bugs outside in a napkin, then Lisa seems like the type who would see a bug crawling by her foot and just casually step on it without looking back down or making a big deal out of it and would just walk away with it still stuck to her sole. It's that casual cruelty that makes her very unpredictable. Even after she came back around and escaped with Joel and had her coming to Jesus moment once she got to see things from Joel's perspective, she still wasn't afraid to get her hands dirty towards the end. She has a heart of gold for those she cares about and will do what ever she has to to protect them and do the right thing, but don't stand in her way because that heart of gold can still be as cold as ice! I just love it when the big women are perfectly fine with accepting the power they have over those beneath them for good or ill. No spectacle, no theatrics, just the laws of nature. She's bigger than you therefor she can and she will so best stay out of her way. It's super hot. Well done! The ending with her was very good.
Overall, I really enjoyed the twists and turns in this one and now I kinda want to watch Squid game because this story had me on the edge of my seat the entire time kind of like the final season of Attack on Titan right now. You hit it out of the park (I also read your other stories before this and they were absolute bangers too)!
If I had one bit of feedback it would be that personally, I like it when the author sort of takes the time to vividly describe the appearance of the characters. I'm ok with forming my own mental images but I also love when a character's appearance is thoroughly drawn out and set in stone and especially in a story with as many characters as this one it helps keep the mental imagery more organized. Several of your characters were described as "Asian with black hair" and about all I had to go off of was that Andrea's unique trait was black painted nails. Several other characters were described as being "dainty" but that's somewhat ambiguous. This isn't meant to be criticism, more just a personal observation. I like when characters have their height, weight, shoe size, body build and facial features set. For example, I imagined Lara to be about 5'10", about 135lbs with size 10 feet, blond hair and blue eyes, lean build and somewhat Scandinavian features. Is this accurate? I really would love to get a better mental picture of what Lisa looks like besides, blond hair and green eyes, dainty features and red nails. I'm so sorry if this comes across as being really picky or demanding. I would just love if you gave extra details on the appearance and body proportions of the characters in the future! I think this is especially important for continuity in an ongoing storyline. There has to be an established canonical appearance if you will. Am I just bad at imagining characters? Idk. I always find myself looking for picture references to fill in for certain characters just so I can better visualize it.
Thank you for reading my TED Talk! Can't wait for part 2.
I suppose now that I made this account to review this I should go review some of the other good ones I've read on here so the authors will finish them :/
I give Squish Game a bonified GOAT rating for giantess stories (and I've read hundreds over the years)! Thank you so much for writing this and I really am super excited to see what kind of trouble Joel and Lisa have gotten themselves into!
Author's Response:
You have touched my soul! Seeing a properly written review for a fully finished novel-length story I've written is truly heartwarming and mind-blowing at the same time.
I totally agree with you about the character descriptions, I personally as a reader have a powerful imagination and I can make up what I believe characters to look like without any guidance, hence why I avoided it, I felt as though it was a good idea for everyone to make their own interpretation, but I'm starting to feel as though that may not be a good idea and I would like to take steps to improve it.
Your breakdown of the characters is awesome, it's weird to me because they were visualized powerfully in my head and written over quite a bit of story, so to see someone draft up the same descriptions perfectly means I must've written their personalities distinctly and that makes me happy.
I'm glad you think my other content is also equally good, that makes me feel more confident about my style and structure going forward as I wasn't sure if I had a good niche with an audience like me.
You've motivated me to continue the sequel, I'll use this amazing review as future inspiration to power through. Thank you for taking the time to write this!
Date: February 20 2022 3:50 PM Title: Financial Meltdown (Finale)
Looks like Lisa will get what she deserves. Shit person. Joel should stay away from her.
Date: February 08 2022 1:57 PM Title: White Mask
HI,
You're thinking to do a sequel on Lisa ? Does she survive on the last game ?
Meanwhile, thank you for your story, great such time for me, and it has permit me to talk about my kink to my wife ! lol...
Author's Response:
I realized I may have mini spoiled one of the characters surviving. :[
But I appreciate the comment, my sequel has a large focus on other characters, I've not fleshed it out at all because it will be a while in the future.
Date: February 05 2022 12:54 AM Title: Showdown
Such a great story. Definitely been my favorite to follow each week on the site. Can't wait for the ending. Have you considered a prequel or sequel?
Author's Response:
I've planned both actually, I've got a story about Mineko's games planned as well as a sequel focusing on Lisa. Might be a while before I do them though.
Date: January 31 2022 5:42 PM Title: White Mask
Can't deny that I'd like to see a spinoff or a story with tinies stuck at that size. Half a mm?
[Report This]Date: January 17 2022 7:43 AM Title: Hide & Squish
Whoa! What a chapter!
While this game is basically the same as the maze one, I found this way more entertaining.
2 factors made this game more fun. First, is the characters. In the maze game, everyone was kinda random and we didn’t know most of the contestants. However, in this house game, I knew most of them and each event felt very engaging and it was fun to see how it all unfolded.
Watching Thomas protect the main group was also kinda interesting. I expected him to expose the group to Andrea so I appreciate the plot twist.
The second factor was the deaths. In the maze game, there were hand crushes, people being stepped on, and a few people swallowed. But here, man, this was creative!
I mean, one dude got cooked in a microwave. Another got trapped in slippers for a slow death. Another got sat on in a chair who was actually a former teammate. That one Ed guy got trapped in a book and used as a stepping stool. Brilliant! Another got flushed down the toilet. And Amy got shredded by the food disposer. Oh yeah, and how could I forget the lawn mower. I mean, damn. This was so cool to read.
Yeah, what a long, but entertaining chapter. Arguably the best game, from the audience perspective. Brutal deaths from simple stuff. I love it.
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: December 18 2021 5:38 AM Title: The Cat and the Mouse
Haha, this chapter was so long that I actually wasn’t able to finish it on my first read. Life kept distracting me and finally I was able to finish it.
Just like the original show, I was never a fan of those rich investors, but I did like how weird they were portrayed in this story. While I don’t expect to see them in the story any more, I would’ve be surprised if they make an appearance in a game or two to mix things up.
Wow, capture the flag. Now that’s a classic. I really thought it was cool how you designed a map of the arena. At first, I was confused, but I guess it made sense. Teams were lined up in a way that certain matchups were likely to happen. Seems like the teams in the middle had the true disadvantage though.
I really liked the creative parts in the fights. Amy trying to eat Michael was awesome. Such a power play.
The fight with Alesia and Lisa was also pretty cool. That felt like a chess match. They both seemed hesitant but were smart enough not to make stupid mistakes.
Then Lara and Andrea just were straight up fighting lol. That wasn’t capture the flag, that was boxing or something, haha.
Lots of crazy action, but not many people got eliminated this time, so I have a feeling that the next game will be even crazier.
Well, I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Date: December 06 2021 12:58 AM Title: Tag Team
I want to start by saying this is easily the most invested I’ve been in the plot for a giantess story for a long time. I love your writing style both in terms of action and characters. This doesn’t feel like a cheap squid game fan fic either, it fits the concept in its own way and feels as twisted, gut wrenching and sad as squid game did while still being sexy and satisfying to anyone who enjoys giantess content.
That being said I’m a little confused by how Andrea wasn’t eliminated in chapter 3.
so it’s established there’s a system that detects player vitals like in the show from what I can tell. Lara makes the bold accusation that Andrea just ate someone, and soon after the minimized player count goes down by one, So how and why didn’t the guards put the two and two together and eliminate Andrea for killing a player in between games? Especially if they witnessed her about to crush those minimized at the table they should be keeping an eye on her.
and I might be wrong about the whole vital thing which explains Andrea’s situation, but then that just opens up another question of how the scoreboard was able to tell that Sergio survived being stepped on when even the woman who did it had to take a second glance?
To be fair I haven’t read past chapter 3 yet but I intend to. But other than this potential plot hole this is a very good story, it resparked my enjoyment for giantess literature and that’s saying a lot.
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks for the review, your opinion is awesome to read.
It seems the Andrea moment in Chapter 3 was rather confusing to a few people, there is some logic behind it which I haven't explained, the operators do not use microchips of any kind, they use a camera system.
I did write a bit about it in an upcoming chapter but your review made me go and make sure it made sense as I'd hate for obnoxious plot holes to form but personally for me it wasnt meant to be focus but I'm starting to realize that details matter, I didnt think people would read into such things, but its exciting that they do!
I hope to do this story justice for you and the other readers, I've got some good moments planned, I'll try not to mess them up. :)
[Report This]Date: December 05 2021 10:30 AM Title: Wipe Out: Part II
Wow, what a way to end the event. I love that plot twist with Theo sabotaging the game. I wouldn’t have thought of that. It seemed too risky for me.
I wonder if Lara actually knows it was Theo and Joel that saved her. She saw someone get tackled, but I wonder. Well, if she doesn’t know, I’m sure they will tell her soon. It would help them gain trust.
Also, that guard making a “1” gesture is interesting. It reminded me of that subplot in the original show where they were harvesting organs. That plot didn’t go anywhere so maybe there’s a good one with this guard.
Also, wow. Only 6 regulars left? That’s crazy! Looks like a lot of tinies will be eliminated for the next game.
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: December 03 2021 10:56 PM Title: Wipe Out: Part I
Love your writing style, both for action scenes as well for creation of relationships/ feelings/ conflicts between the characters. The second part of Wipe Out has been living rent free in my head since I read the first part and the wait is physically hurting me lol. Really excited to see how you will manage the next part, and hopeful for some scenes of either Lisa or Lara (or maybe both of them...) eliminating some tinies that aren't our boys, as this type of relation between tinies and giants (friendly to one and hostile to another) is really interesting to me (the scene where Kristen crushed a tiny just before dropping Michael on the second chapter is just soooo cool). Currently my favorite story on this site, so all the props to you!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind words, was genuinely just recently getting very self conscious about the way I write dialogue & action sequences.
You've inspired me to redo a lot of chapter 8/9 that I'm working on to make sure it's definitely good and I what I want it to be.
Date: November 28 2021 7:22 PM Title: White Mask
I was thinking about a game in which tinies got shrunk to 1 mm tall. Maybe one of the last chapters. Btw, another Great story
[Report This]Date: November 28 2021 9:49 AM Title: Wipe Out: Part I
This is kinda cool. I like the runner and controller dynamic. You gotta pick someone that is smart but also patient for the controller. And for the runner, they gotta not be scared and decently athletic. For the giantesses, they gotta be smart and athletic. I think the guys got the advantage for this game.
I liked how many regulars got eliminated this round, or that’s how it felt like. I honestly didn’t expect many minimized people to get through, but it feels like a bunch of them made it.
For Joel and Theo, they gotta hope they get paired with anyone except Lisa or Lara. While Alessia is athletic, I think she’s going to mess up somehow. I actually wouldn’t be surprised if she matches up with them since she would likely intimidate them the most.
Well, I really like this chapter and I can’t wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your continuous reviews. :)
I spend quite a lot of time designing the games in my head to make sure they are realistic so I'm glad you picked up on it, sometimes I think certain things are too subtle but you are noticing most of it so that's really great to read, honestly.
I'll avoid commenting too much on story details cause I wanna drop them on you blind without any hints.
[Report This]Date: November 18 2021 9:32 AM Title: Tag Team
That biscuit scene was intense! I like Andrea’s sadistic nature and creativity. Also, Lisa seems to be acting neutral but also trying to win at the same time.
Joel just messed up and he was blind to see it. Even if they did rescue the guy, he would still have enemies. It was a lose-lose situation and he still took it.
The guards don’t seem as menacing as they were in the show. Maybe it’s because I can’t see them, but reading about the guards not being able to detect Andrea pull out a man and show him to a few people before eating him, seems to make the guards less scary. In addition, the guards already saw Andrea about to step on that table so I thought they would be watching her. I guess not.
This new girl seems strange. There is no way she is this friendly and just randomly wanted to join Theo and Joel. Something seems off and I think she is using them.
Great stuff and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Date: November 17 2021 1:51 PM Title: White Mask
Couldn't understand at which size they are stuck to. You forgot to mention it. Btw, seems interesting!
Author's Response:
Yeah I forgot to make that clear, I remember the scene where I was going to place it into the dialogue then I ended up forgetting. I'll edit it into the 2nd chapter.
To prevent you from needing to scan the chapter again, the answer is an inch tall. :]
[Report This]Date: November 17 2021 5:38 AM Title: The Chase
Wow, I love this. I knew someone was going to make a squid game story! Can’t believe it’s already starting!
I like the randomly size changing aspect. I was not expecting that. I think I was “eliminations” meant shrinking, but this works too. Kinda cool to see tinies and regular sized people competing in these games.
I like the thought of Lisa almost capturing Joel. Wouldn’t that be crazy if she found him like that. Would she crush him, or let him go? That should be fun.
I love the couple’s strategy. That’s clever. Can’t wait to see what other creative ways people would do to win each game.
The dialogue was also really good. Had some good conversations in there, and I can feel some rivalries developing.
Next chapter seems like a good time for the contestants too rest before the next game. I’m curious if the guys will be reverted back to normal for sleeping, or will the guards keep them small. Wouldn’t it be funny if they are kept small the entire game? Lol. Imagine the sleeping arrangements. This could get kinky fast.
Speaking of that, will there be sex scenes? Feels like there will be some, especially with some of the guys trying to flirt already. Also, the show had a scene there as well. Can’t wait to see who pairs up with who.
Well, I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review! I was worried that someone had already done a Squid Game edition, spent some time searching to make sure it hadn't been done, didn't find anything personally so I went for it.
I'm glad you liked the dialogue, I'm trying to make it more meaningful to make the action scenes slap harder. As for the couple, I'm also happy you thought it was interesting, still planning out all the clever strategies that will be used and how the relationships will develop between the characters so hopefully there will be cooler ones coming up.
Sleep question; soonTM, chapter 3 question.
Sex scene question; this is unlikely to happen in great detail because I'm personally not that sexual so I struggle to write it comfortably and in detail. There will be romance related things tho, just nothing big relating to genitalia.
Date: November 17 2021 4:44 AM Title: The Chase
Great start, I'm really looking forward to the rest of this story! Really good realism and building up of the characters. Can't wait for the next chapters.
Author's Response:
Glad you thought so, will continue to work on this and give you more to read. :)