[Report This]Date: January 15 2022 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 3
What a great chapter. I think my favorite part was how Jackie put so much detail and care into making sure her brother wouldn’t get recognized and also experience everything.
The fact that it was lace underwear, the black paint, he’s tied up. All these little points just add to the helplessness for Denver just makes me smile.
I really wanted Denver to be stuck there in that thong all day, or even longer so having Jackie go through all that work to secure Denver makes me glad he won’t escape.
Also, it’s interesting to have his mouth free and nose blocked. I still think having the nose free is more humiliating since he has to breathe in his mom’s butt all day, while I think taste doesn’t happen as often. But it’s pretty cool to see it happen this way.
Anyway, great chapter and I can’t wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
yeah thats fair i guess, but since this was just coming off a chapter where his nose was free and nothing else, so in order for it to be different, thats why i did that. thanks for the review tho!
[Report This]Date: January 14 2022 3:33 AM Title: Chapter 3
I loved the setup and ending of this one, but would have likely to see more description of Denver's day in his Mom's ass. Since his ears were uncovered, the anticipation of hearing his sister suggest gassy foods to their mom, and then hearing her body digest the food in preparation for the farts would have been a nice addition. It would have been nice to get a description of the after effects of each meal too, instead of a quick summary.
Still a fan of your work though, and still a fun read!
Author's Response:
ooo yea that wouldve been a good idea i guess haha, but glad you still enjoyed!