Date: June 29 2023 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Suburban Mom
My apologies for posting this as another review, but there's no other way for me to respond to your response to my original review.
I was unfamiliar with your other story in this universe (the Grove View Apartments one), but I briefly read through it and I can see the differences between that one and this one. While the girls instantly turning evil and rapidly destroying everything does have its charm, I like the approach you are taking in this one a lot better. I like that Kristen's character gradually eases into embracing the goddess thing, and isn't some psychopath from the start. I have no doubt there are many people in real life who would be as callous as those girls in Grove View though if given the chance, but probably not most. It was also kinda disappointing the country on the rug was destroyed so quickly. It would have sucked if Kristen had destroyed Ostrov like that (which she easily could have) instead of having things gradually develop like you're doing here. This approach is much better.
I also like that there is much more interaction with the tinies, because of their ability to text Kristen on her phone. This means that even though the Micros are barely visible to her, and the Nanos aren't even visible to her at all, there is still a lot of interaction that can be done.
I still have to give you credit with the Grove View Apartments story because you catered to the extremely rare niche of shrunken countries, which I thoroughly enjoy, but it is so extremely rare. But I just wish those girls had taken greater care in their managing of those tinies. It also seemed towards they end they lost interest in them and just wanted to wash their hands of them by destroying them as quickly as possible. I hope that doesn't end up becoming the case with Kristen and co. here.
I also want to say I appreciate the background behind these cities/countries. The more they are fleshed out, the better. This along with their ability to communicate with Kristen makes them seem a lot more like humans rather than bugs. Its something I felt the other story was lacking in. For example, when Isabella ordered the micros in the box to clean her shoes it just seemed like she was ordering around bugs. She had no ability to hear their words, so the interaction was very one-sided. Maybe that explains why she lost interest in them, eh? It was still cool and all, but here in this story when Kristen makes Braithe clean her shoes it works much better, because they can communicate back to her. She knows it humiliates and degrades them, and that they're something more than bugs.
Anyway, I just want to say please don't hold back on details on the backstory of these cities/countries and the worlds they come from. For example, Ostrov seems like a pretty interesting place. A very powerful country on its world. It just makes it all the more surreal that this mighty nation ended up on the floor inside the house of this woman. The mightier these places were in their former worlds, the more of a goddess it makes Kristen that she now has them at her mercy, if that makes sense.
On the topic of the bug thing, I just realized that these people should have been dealing with the micro-biome that lives on Kristen's skin, and which has been raining down on them for all this time. You see, every person has billions of microscopic organisms like dust mites and so on living on their skin. These things are too small to see by the naked eye, but the Micros and (especially) the Nanos should be keenly aware of them and probably having some major problems as a result of them.
In the case of the Micros, its probably not too bad. The Micros are visible to Kristen's naked eye, but her dust mites are not, which means the mites are substantially smaller. How much smaller? I dunno. Like a small dog to them maybe? They can probably easily deal with these things just with a sharp kick. Pets might be at risk to them though.
In the case of the Nanos, this is probably a really ugly problem for them. In their case, I'd expect the dust mites and other stuff that lives on Kristen's skin to at least be on par with them in size, or probably even larger. And there would be a lot of these things raining down on their country as she walks through the room too, so you have to imagine this might be a major nightmare for them. Ostrov's people might be being killed by these things, and it might be devouring their crops, their forests, etc. Its probably a major problem for them.
But Ostrov does have its military, and fighting Kristen's microbes might be a full time job for them. But at least it gives their military some purpose for existing, since its not like they can do anything at all to Kristen, and there's no other nations for them to fight, so what else would they need to have a military for? So fighting Kristen's dustmites is their purpose now.
Not to mention if some real full-sized bug like a spider were to show up. In the case of Ostrov, they might have to resort to using full blown nuclear weapons to take it out.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Human_microbiome
Here's a wikipedia article about Human microbiome, basically the stuff that would be living on Kristen's (and Ginny's, etc.) body, and which the Micros and Nanos would probably have some problems with.
But I think the same principle can also work in reverse, too. What I mean to say is the Nanos are so small that they are on par in size with this stuff, and as a result they could actually live on Kristen's body and become part of her body's microbiome themselves, and without her ever even knowing it. In fact, this might already be the case, like since even the first day when she stepped down on Ostrov before she knew what it even was. If some of them managed to avoid getting squished, they might have landed in between her toes and established themselves there and eked out an existence for all this time. Who knows? They're so small the cracks in her skin would be like canyons for them to hide in. Leslie could also have some living on her too.
Just some food for thought.
[Report This]Date: June 24 2023 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Interlude I
I recently discovered this story, and just finished reading through all of it. I'll give you my overall thoughts on the story as a whole and some ideas and suggestions that have come to my mind, but I decided to leave my review under this chapter specifically because of the part regarding Nyla, which I'll get to later.
First of all, I want to applaud you for the slow-rolling and plausible descent of Kristen into madness (or power-lust). Your story is a very welcome and refreshing change from the vast majority of stories out there, where the woman is always invariably turned on by destruction and killing right off the start. It is so very much over done, and feels very contrived, yet most giantess stories are like that, and frankly it gets a bit tiresome and boring. But the way you wrote Kristen being depressed and horrified that she had killed so many people (even if on accident) was on point. You had her gradually evolve and ease into embracing her dominance over the tiny people, and it was well done, so I applaud you on that.
Now for a bit of constructive criticism, though. You wrote that eventually Kristen began bringing food and water to the micros, and this works out well and good to explain how they get their food, but if I am recalling correctly, it took some months before Kristen started doing this. So how were these cities able to survive for those months without food or water? For Ostrov it kinda made some sense, because it was not only their cities but also the farmlands of the entire country that was brought with them. Cities can't supply their own food and need to have it brought in. A city might have enough food to last a few days or weeks at most, but certainly not months.
Now, as for Nyla and why I am posting the review on this chapter specifically. I'm NGL, I was kinda looking forward to seeing Kristen do something to punish this tiny woman for the threats she made to her daughter. It felt anti-climatic that she was not only allowed to survive (when so many others had died for so much less), but even ended up being rewarded by given such a powerful position and a life of luxury. I guess you could consider this a complaint, but I was bit disappointed she didn't get what she deserved for the threats she made.
That said, I do enjoy the humiliation she is subjecting the city to in forcing them to clean the filth from her shoes. Please do not hesitate to go into as much detail as you can when it comes to these humiliating and degrading jobs Braithe is now being forced to do.
Now, if you are receptive to ideas and suggestions, this chapter mentioned the black tar filth stuff that the workers cleaned from Kristen's sandals and made up of her skin, oil, dirt, sweat, etc. What exactly do they do with this stuff after they clean it off? It has to be discarded somehow, but where and how? My idea, if you're interested, is that someone in Braithe (maybe Nyla herself?) comes up with creative uses for Kristen's foot filth. Maybe it can be turned into compost and used to create some arable land for farming like Ostrov does? Not that they need to, since Kristen now provides them with food, but maybe they want to have a little more variety in their diet or something by growing crops native to their world which Kristen can't provide? Otherwise, maybe the foot gunk could be refined down into industrial chemicals like fuel or lubricants or something? The oil from Kristen's feet is oil, after all, so maybe it can be used to power and lubricate the very machinery they use to clean her shoes? Maybe they are able to collect Kristen's foot oil to such an amount that they can use it to power their vehicles or export it to other cities in the room for them to use? Or maybe if they don't think its too disgusting they might even eat Kristen's foot gunk or dried skin cells as a delicacy? Or use it has building materials somehow? Maybe in place of concrete and steel, they can use Kristen's skin cells as building blocks? The city of Crest might want Kristen's foot oil to use as annointing oils or incense or something in their temples when they do their rituals in worship of her. So please consider my idea that the city of Crest might really want to import this stuff Braithe is extracting from Kristen's shoes as a waste product.
Also, have you considered having Kristen put the nation of Ostrov to work for her in some similar fashion? The thought of even tinier people being put to work to clean Kristen's intimate objects is very hot. Its hot when that entire cities are doing this, but an entire nation which is even smaller? Wow. It doesn't necessarily just have to be her footwear, like what about making them clean her dirty panties, or even her vibrator? Butt plug? ;) Maybe the nanos of Ostrov can find some legit uses for the filth like I suggested with Braithe? Just some ideas, of course. But I do understand that Kristen is on great terms with Justyna, so I'm not sure what would prompt her to impose such a punishment on these hapless nanos. I just know that I would love to see such a punishment be imposed. ;)
And what about Ginny? Surely her footwear (and other intimate items) could use some TLC too, right?
Oh! And that's another thing which reminds me. When you wrote about Ginny taking the cap of tinies home with her, it made me think: what if Ginny had used those tinies as colonists to found a new city of her own inside of her own home? Having a cap full of thousands would have been a great starter population. Don't get me wrong, it was great she enjoyed herself with them, but she could have used just some of them and kept the rest to replenish their numbers so she could continue to enjoy them over the long run.
BTW, that's another thing.... whether intentionally or not, Kristen, Ginny, Leslie, etc. are taking a HUGE toll on the population of these people. I don't know what your long term plans are for this story, but if Kirsten is to maintain her role of goddess for a long time to come and if she isn't being much more sparing in their lives than she is, then she's going to run out. These people are reproducing and regenerating their populations right? I could see them being so demoralized by their situation that they don't reproduce much, but assuming they do it is still a long time for new micros to be born and grow to adulthood. Unless the tinies have some sort of accelerated growth that comes from the shrinking or something?
Oh, and btw what about actual literal bugs and stuff? Every house has them. if, say, a spider got into one of those rooms it could be a disaster, right? Maybe just possible the militaries of the Micro cities might be capable of killing a spider though. I know they can't do anything more than tickle Kristen.
And as for the crack in the wall... here's another idea I'd like to toss out to you. What if the Micros dug through the wall into the adjacent room with the Nanos and were able to interact with them or something? I mean there's LOTS of potential to this idea. Or Kristen might even purposely arrange for the Micros to interact with the Nanos somehow? For example, in the last chapter where someone had tried to assassinate Justyna, Kristen understandably wants to do something to help her friend out, but given her enormous size its impossible for her to do anything with the precision necessary. But a Micro on the other hand could make for a great intermediary, right? Kristen could deploy a Micro (or team of them) into Ostrov and order them to assist Justyna or something.
Before I forget, here's one final thought about Kristen putting the Micros (and maybe Nanos) to work for her. Making them clean her items is very cool and intoxicating, but what if she could put them to work in a way that was profitable to her somehow? Being so tiny, they can do extremely intricate and detailed work that normal sized people can't. Maybe Kristen could make herself rich in the real world by putting these people to work making something that she could sell for profit?
I don't know, anyway this is your story and I don't mean to impose or anything but I just wanted to share these ideas that popped into my mind as I was reading it.
It's a great story, and I look forward to your future updates!
Author's Response:
Hello, Giantess Nation. Thank you for your review. I'll try to address your points in order and as best as I can without spoilers of future plans.
Thank you, I appreciate your take notice of my slow buildup with Kristen, I didn't want her to be evil and I wanted a slow descent and her to feel more like an actual human rather than a rampaging lustful woman like some other characters I wrote.
As for the food being delivered after a few months, I don't know what a realistic time was, I'm definitely not a city planner and I honestly have no idea what it would look like, but it's fair that I don't know. In my head, I was thinking that cities had stockpiles of dehydrated food and tanks for water and stuff like that it could last them all a few months, and they only asked Kristen for food when they were rationing everything and becoming desperate in which she was obliged to help.
Nyla has a story arc for later, but I get the frustration, that's kind of what I'm aiming for anyway for right now.
I have some set plans for the tar and gunk that comes from cleaning shoes, that will come up soon in a couple chapters.
Ostrov working on/cleaning things is something that could happen, I've thought about it a lot.
The next chapter I release will show a little bit of what Ginny has done over some years with her little volunteers.
There are millions and millions of micros across a lot of cities, and hundreds of millions of nanos, it's going to take a lot of catastrophes to dwindle the populations of these two rooms down to a scary level. I'll make sure to include some insights and stories about the population decline and if anyone out there is fighting for population growth though.
An actual real life insect is something I've thought about as well, I like the idea of it, it could show up in one way or another in the future.
There is a lot of potential with micros interacting with nanos, but it might only be brief, I don't want to copy my other story too much with that idea, but it is very possible and I have a few ideas that could be written out.
Yeah, I already kinda did the selling and profiteering thing in my other story so I don't know if I'm going to be willing to write that kind of arc again.
I appreciate your ideas and your feedback, I love it and I appreciate the consideration.
[Report This]Date: June 14 2023 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 17 - The Suburban Goddess II
I really liked Rasha's character. She sounded like a very intriguing person. Hopefully, we see a lot more of her later in the story 🙂.
Author's Response:
I think I'm going to develop her character, she seems like she's going to be fun to write and I expect to put her into more chapters in the future.
[Report This]Date: June 13 2023 4:31 AM Title: Chapter 17 - The Suburban Goddess II
Amazing chapter as always! Thank you so much for making these they’re amazing; You’re the author I always check for when I visit this site! Also omg I love so many of the new characters already, Rasha is amazing, and I’m curious how/if the wine club girls will join more too. I imagine the knowing circle will stay small, hopefully they all find interesting ways to encounter the micros or even nanos without realizing
Author's Response:
And thank you so much for your comments. I'm very glad you enjoy my story enough to come check if I posted! I think the new girls will definitely fine ways to incorporate themselves into being involved and I believe I will develop Rasha going forward.
[Report This]Date: June 13 2023 1:25 AM Title: Chapter 17 - The Suburban Goddess II
Happy to see an other chapter this story is so perfect.
Author's Response:
Thank you again! I appreciate the support.
[Report This]Date: May 16 2023 8:51 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Interlude II
This story every chapter is so perfect .The amount of detail, the fact that you make the character evolve with every chapter. Thanks again for this chapter and i looking forward for the next one.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I work very tediously on details and I appreciate the compliment.
[Report This]Date: May 16 2023 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Interlude II
insanely amazing work
Author's Response:
Insanely big thank you!
[Report This]Date: April 29 2023 9:51 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Suburban Mom
I only found this story recently and it is very interesting so far! Especially the maternal themes. I have got to read some more 🙂
Author's Response:
Thank you! Let me know what you think.
[Report This]Date: April 25 2023 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Interlude I
Great chapter! The POVs are always so detailed and immersive, both from the normal and tiny perspectives.
Kristen, Ginny and Leslie are all very well written and their personalities really complement the power they hold over the shrunken cities. Though, it would be interesting to see how the other moms in the neighborhood treat the micros too.
Author's Response:
Thank you, Minivoid. I'm glad for your compliment on the details.
There will be many more moms and other characters that will become involved and I can't wait to show everyone.
[Report This]Date: April 25 2023 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 15 - Interlude I
This is a very interesting addition! Looking forward to the Nano POV
Author's Response:
It's finally coming next chapter, then they will be a good part of the story.
[Report This]Date: April 24 2023 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Interlude I
I wait this chapter so much,and it was worth every second. Amazing work one of the best story i read in my life everything is perfect. Thanks so much for this
Author's Response:
Thank you for your patience and your kinds words!
[Report This]Date: February 27 2023 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 14 - Stress Test
This is great! I can't wait for more... your writing is so good.
Author's Response:
Thank you, titantonic! I hope you keep enjoying
[Report This]Date: February 23 2023 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 14 - Stress Test
I was just dying for another chapter and I was so happy to see one added today. Great work as usual. I love your writing style; like I've told you before, it's something I'm quite jealous of! (Wiggling her toes over the skyline, such a simple but impactful visual. Sliding her foot back and making the squeaking sound, it all just sounds so real.)
On to the story. As I was reading this, I was thinking 'wow, Kirsten's really starting to become less and less worried about them, isn't she?' Almost indifferent. Which is my favorite giantess personality. But then at the end when she almost took out Braithe, holy crap. I loved how she tried rationalizing it and justifying it in her mind. Man, my heart was racing with excitement as her foot came down over it. I simultaneously wanted her to do it and NOT do it at the same time. But then the crowning moment for me was when Kristen told them to clean her sandals instead. Such a power move on her part and a humiliation to the little city.
Awesome work, great chapter. Please keep continuing this. I can see this being as epic as Grove View. I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter already.
Author's Response:
Thank you, carnage! Your writing style is quite amazing so I appreciate your feedback whenever I get it. I'm trying to write this story more realistic than I did with Grove View, a lot of people want to focus on the fetish stuff. I want to focus on the character first, the rest will come later as a happy consequence.
I think the indifference is what's going to be the catalyst for her accepting her new role,I think part of her is starting to like the power too, even if it was brought on by a shitty date and a bit of alcohol, in a way, it might serve as a tool for more control over her own life, go figure.
Date: February 22 2023 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Suburban Mom
Amazing, chapter as always. Hope to see one focus on stinky feet.
Author's Response:
I can assure you there will be a few emphatic chapters around aromas in the future.
[Report This]Date: February 22 2023 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Stress Test
Amazing. I like how this chapter sets up a fun time for Ginny and a potential stepping stone for how Kristen will develop more ways to interact with the micros, and arguably with the nanos, too
Author's Response:
These last two chapters are pretty big stepping stones from Kristen becoming use to her new role in life.
[Report This]Date: February 19 2023 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Suburban Mom
Leaving another review, because this story is just that good (new chapter coming soon, I hope :D?).
Kristen's internal struggle is so well done. Love how she's slowly warming up to her role as goddess.
Your descriptions, particularly from the tiny point of view, are so immersive. Their feeling of helplessness and awe, as well as the sheer scale.
I'd love to see more worship scenes, boob stuff, and unaware (especially from the nano's point of view). The nano scenes are my favorite!
Again, excellent story. You are spinning gold here! I check every day for an update.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kindness. I do believe we are going to start seeing our main character become who I intentionally wrote her to be.
I can also promise was more tiny POV coming.
Nano stuff will be a major story driver later on, we're just not there yet, but it's coming.
[Report This]Date: February 02 2023 3:38 AM Title: Chapter 13 - The Power Visit Part 2
I can't tell you how much I'm enjoying this story. Keep it up man. Great work! I love Ginny obviously, but I'm really excited to read more about Leslie.
Author's Response:
Thank you carnage! For anyone that doesn't know, carnage is a great writer and you should check out his stories as well.
Date: February 01 2023 9:12 PM Title: Chapter 13 - The Power Visit Part 2
I can tell Leslie is gonna be my favorite character in here (which hopefully she’s in here more). I’m always a fan of overly cruel giantesses (Jessica was by far my favorite in the original Incident story). Really hoping to see non-unaware vore soon! And barefoot crush
Author's Response:
There will be a few cruel characters here and there, Leslie might not be around all the time, but there are many plans for people who might even be worse than any other characters I have ever written. Kristen will have her fair share of fun too.
[Report This]Date: February 01 2023 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 13 - The Power Visit Part 2
I meant to say I would like to see more bare feet stuff from both Ginny and Kristen in regards to Ostrov's nanos, because they both appear to be less destructive and relatively gentle.
I find Leslie to be a very brutish character. That's not to say she's badly written. On the contrary, I, eventually, got to understand that in spite of her other questionable perspectives and behavior she was someone who could be relied on to get to the point of things and ultimately stopped Kristen from lying to herself about how she genuinely felt about her situation.
Great job!
Author's Response:
There's a ton of bare feet stuff coming up, now that I think Kristen understands her role a little bit more, I think she wont be as hesitant to walk around without shoes and the like.
Leslie was a necessary character to progress Kristen, you said it exactly right. I don't want another 14 chapters of Kristen trying to figure things out, Leslie was the tool to do so.
[Report This]Date: February 01 2023 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 13 - The Power Visit Part 2
I really hope to see more bare feet stuff with the Ostrov nanos and Ginny somehow