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Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed [Report This]
Date: November 13 2022 7:51 PM Title: Deep Into The Depths

Love episodic stories like these. They make for easy reading lmao.


Really liked the premise and executions of chapters 1 and 3. They both did a good job capturing the terror of shrinking, although I think chapter 3 was better. Props on chapter 4. Shaving is a super rare scenario. Dialogue was hit or miss in some chapters, so I guess work on that.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. I feel these stories work better in episodic form since they're short and get to the point. I try to capture both horror and the risk one will take when lust takes over. 

Regarding the dialogue, that is a weak point of mine. I think I can take an educated guess at which dialogue was a miss. That's on me trying to push a chapter though when I was in a writer's block. Thanks for the critique  

Reviewer: Da Boss Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 13 2022 8:00 AM Title: Deep Into The Depths

One of my favorite chapters of yours!  Really well written, looking forward to whatever you write next! 



Author's Response:

Thanks!

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