Awesome!! I simply loved it!

Like you pointed out to me, I can't see my first review here, but I remember telling you that the story was very good but Katelyn seemed to be just words, telling but not exactly showing. Always winning, always getting, while Finn always had to give, to cede. Well, this changed a lot as the story grew!

You not just put Katelyn actually demonstrating her feeling and words but also put Finn's feelings and thoughts, whatever they were, on the table, showing how he was enjoying Katelyn's love and how it contrasted more and more with the Katelyn he used to know, at the same time showing his disapproval, be it public or just in his thoughts, about many of Katelyn's bad behaviors, including the party queen thing (OK, I loved the lesson she taught to Tina! <3). He started to have a voice in the relationship and Katelyn, despite loving to be always the center of attentions, let him have it.

Also, the development of the situations and dynamics were just brilliant, I must add that! The characters weren't just plain and obvious, for example Katelyn being just an caring ex-bully and Finn being just her boring ex-target and current lover. They reacted differently (sometimes even unexpectedly) in different situations, Finn kept having some hard feelings about Katelyn's past for a while, just fully accepting that she changed after Katelyn, in a bold move of love/reliability, claimed to be the only responsible for the 'growing problem' at the party, saving him from the worst... this didn't just made your characters more believable, it made them natural, it made them human! I felt connected to them! For example, I hated when Finn revealed that Gloria, despite talking again with Katelyn, actually didn't care about her when she was a giantess, and OK, I'm guilty: because of that, I just loved that Katelyn sort of ruined Gloria's party with her meltdown lol. Katelyn's losing nothing by forgetting Gloria. I felt sorry for Finn's past, felt happy that Katelyn was not only trying but actually being different, being better for Finn... I hated Tina but sort of forgave her when she talked better in the last chapter... these sort of connections don't happen when you're dealing with plain characters, those who are just a bunch of descriptions and robotic actions.

And the best surprise: you gave us a hook for a continuation! I don''t know what role Finn and Katelyn will have in the second story or if they'll show in it at all, but I'm already looking in advance to see it!

GREAT story! Hope we get a sequel!

Author's Response:

Thank you! Don’t worry! I’ve already got a sequel in the works!