Sorry for the long comment and if I am spoiling something, but this kind of story just gets my imagination going.

I liked your oneshot story (It’s just a bug) when it came out, so I am very happy to see you trying and sharing a longer story with the site – and I must point out you made a very good prologue.

We have Lucy’s character flashed – her frustration with her lack of power as well as how she is perceived by the ants. It’s interesting how this brought me back to the title of your oneshot – yes, Lucy is acting with ill intent by crushing ants for her own amusement, but she is also hurt after a fight with her family, especially her mother, and, from her perspective, they are just bugs.

Let me say I loved the scenes balancing between both perspectives. You managed to flash the size difference as well as the despair going on with every step, every move Lucy made.

But what about Max? We don’t see a loto f him, but, one thing striked me: even after her sister was acting like a brat about his graduation, he didn’t act with glee when seeing Lucy get scollded and hurt. This is, in my view, a striking difference between the two: Lucy reacts to violence with more violence on those weaker than her while Max seems to try to act more empathetic.

Maybe that’s the reason the general will choose him to be his “secret weapon” against Lucy since violence at their size won’t mean a thing against her. In fact, as I said, they don’t mean a thing to her right now, so the ants need someone capable of making her understand what she is really doing is genocidal level evil.

And I am not using the term“weapon” on a whim. We are talking about a whole world, so it’s bound to exist those who would like to fuel Lucy’s most toxic traits for their own agenda.

On that note, it’s a good thing your protagonists are related, young and not with a huge age difference. Max and especially Lucy will have to grow (no pun intended) as their lifes become entangled with this very tiny, very new world.

But all remains to be seeing. It seems more characters will still be introduced and the real game only begins when he actually shrinks.

Once again, sorry for the long comment, but that only goes to show how much I liked this first chapter. I can only thank you for sharing your story with us and encourage you to continue.

Also sorry for any misspelling. Although I am fluent in english, it is not my
primary language.

Thank you! Added this one to my favorites and will be eagerly waiting for the next chapters.

Amazing story!! Favorited! 

Reminds me of that ant movie, forgot what it’s called.

Oh wow, that was awesome !!! We need more Giant kids in stories so I really love this chapter.Its really fascinating to think that a 7 year old girl can have so much power. Keep up the great work :3

Wtf a 7 y.o. character..