[Report This]Date: October 02 2022 1:38 PM Title: The Elf and the Tiny Water Spirit
Your writing style is quite enjoyable to read, I liked how you introduced the characters and seamlessly swapped perspectives. This was a fantastic start that has me hooked, I'm looking forward to seeing were you take the story next.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind review! I'm glad you liked it.
I've got a few fun ideas for how the story will continue, so stay tuned!
[Report This]Date: October 02 2022 6:51 AM Title: The Elf and the Tiny Water Spirit
I swear, Faen better survive! Don't you dare kill her; I will throw some serious hands if you do.
This is the start to a really great story and an even better relationship between the two characters. I so want to see their relationship progress and the obvious increase in affection and affinity towards and for each other. That gentle tag better be accurate.
Your description is good and paints enough detail without it being overwhelming. Something that might streamline is in the time jumps to put an asterisk * instead of just an extra break between them. Also, it's a pain on this website, and you have to redo it once its pasted here, but italicizing thoughts is a great way to weave in thoughts naturally.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the review!
I'm glad you like Lia and Faen's dynamic; and don't worry, I've got a lot of fun plans for how these two get along in the future ;)
Thanks for the formatting tip. I'll have to double check in the future, cause I definitely had nice little line breaks in the original document.
I hope you continue to enjoy!