[Report This]Date: November 09 2022 1:33 AM Title: Intertwined
Loving this so far. Carmen got what she deserved in high school and it'll be satisfying watching her (presumably) reach that conclusion at some point. Seems like she probably genuinely liked Kyle and Samantha, but massively misunderstood the affect her actions were having on them.
They sure weren't too picky about who got to become a Valkyrie, but given how rare the genes are it makes sense. It's almost certainly been a massive net positive overall, even considering any who have gone rogue. I do wonder how they're able to operate with such minimal supervision, given their ridiculous power.
Author's Response:
During the beginning they couldn't really afford to be picky, they're a little pickier in the "modern" part of the story so it's up to you if they'd have still taken Carmen, obviously she's had some eyes on her for some time.
As for Carmen herself yeah she hasn't quite reached the conclusion that she was in fact that asshole, but hopefully we'll get there.
[Report This]Date: November 08 2022 12:19 AM Title: Intertwined
"You half-assed a group project I tried to force you to do for me and I ended up failing the class! This isn't my fault for being awful for years, letting my grades slip such that one project could fail me, or trying to bully you into doing the project for me! You ruined my life by making me spend a brief period working in the exact kind of job you'd expect a high school bully to rightfully end up in, all because you didn't do A quality work pretty much entirely for the benefit of a bully who only got worse from a starting point of locking you in a locker for long periods and breaking your stuff."
Carmen is legitimately funny, horrible but funny. Hopefully she manages to earn her part of the inevitable happy ending and actually faces some consequences along the way.
Normally I don't like darker stories but given it's you and the ending probably won't end up being so dark makes it a lot more appealing.
Author's Response:
Yeah Carmen is horrible, with a ton of self serving logic and a mean streak a mile wide. She's got just enough morality in her to keep her from really going over the edge, obviously she's got a long way to go and this is going to end up being a bumpy ride for her.
And yeah this will be a darker story than what I usually write, but it is me, so you don't need to worry that this is going to end like The Mist lol.
Date: November 07 2022 11:17 PM Title: Intertwined
Oh this is gearing up to be amazing. First off, Richard is exactly the kind of character that I love to hate. Just so deplorable for all the right reasons. Hopefully we'll see him shoot himself in the foot somehow, but either way an excellent behind the scenes villian! Second, I was 100% expecting Carmen to be the Valkyrie to get called in to permanently shrink the millionaires. When that didn't happen, I then thought she was certainly going to simply use the permanent shrinking serum on them. But to wind up being posed as their only guardian? Spectacular potential for a very interesting dynamic.
Can't wait to follow along with this one. Well done!!
Author's Response: It's a fun twist, isn't it? She shows up to basically kidnap them and get her revenge and ends up being the only thing in the way of an even worse fate. The relationship between the three of them is obviously about to get even more complicated, glad you're interested!