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Reviewer: Wholia Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26 2023 9:01 AM Title: Chapter 1

This story was super fun to read! Thank you so much for sharing. This was wonderful. <3

Author's Response: You are very welcome, Wholia! Thank you for reading! Your reviews make my day :)

Reviewer: barabba9000 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 09 2023 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 1

Well you could add a 7th chapter describing his life in that garden

Author's Response:

I will probably leave the story as it is. I leave it you, the reader, to imagine what becomes of the Boss.
Hint: It isn't not good.

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 09 2023 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 6

Seems the boss is now insect food; wait until an arachnid or Lady Bug finds him.  Surprising ending, I was sure Andrea was behind it all {perhaps she was} though it now seems he was just a rude, paranoid boss and Andrea a faithful and capable employee.  Who knows for certain.

Very nice story, well done.

Author's Response:

Thank you! Now that the story is over I can tell you that Andrea was not the culprit. She is as good a person, despite being a criminal. The Boss simply projected his insecurities and worries onto her. He couldn't accept the idea that he was the cause of all his misfortune.

Reviewer: ReaperFace Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 08 2023 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 6

The tone and description in this is great! Andrea deciding not to hurt him at all the end is somehow more humiliating...

Author's Response:

That was what I was going for. Glad it worked out :)

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 03 2023 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 5

Can't wait to read more of this story.

Really like how Andrea needed to sit on him; but could have used some descriptions of Andrea's sweat and butt odor that he had to endure while beneath her ass.

Author's Response:

Thank you! We're approaching the end now. I hope you will like the ending.

I considered that, but there is a limit to the 'gross' aspect. That scene was more about the feeling of being trapped than anything else.

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19 2023 2:50 AM Title: Chapter 3

Really nice story so far.  Love the boss being entombed in Andrea's snot.

There are a few grammatical errors through out; but nothing major that is distracting from the overall story line.

Andrea seems way to accommodating, almost scheming in nature.  I think the boss has been taken for a ride by Andrea, and I hope she does just that.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked that. I know that sort of this can gross out some people.

Unlike most of my stories, I had little time to revise this one. What you are seeing is very close to the first draft. I hope to go back and fix that later, if time allows. I hope it didn't detract from your experience.

...and who knows? :)

Reviewer: UnawareAuthor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 05 2023 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 1

Okay, I love the setup so far. I'm usually not into "mafia" type of stuff (which I get a vibe of from your story), but that's really interesting so far. Can't wait for the other chapters and what Andrea will turn out to be.

I love to predict the plot, so my guess is that she is the one, who tipped of the police about her boss and could now easily hand him over to the police for some reward, but she'll likely become drunk with power she holds over her former boss and decide to keep him this way, as it is worth much more than any kind of reward from the police. It's also likely, that she has a motive for tipping of the police, which could also impact her choice to leave him for herself to mess with instead of giving away to the cops. 

That's my prediction, I wonder how much I got right. We'll see by the end of the story!

Author's Response:

This type of story isn't my cup of tea, either. I wanted to try my hand at something different. Hopefully I didn't mess up too bad!

Hmm... Interesting theory. I wonder how much of it is right? :)

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 04 2023 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 1

Pretty good story setup so far, though I suspect Andrea is not so innocent and in fact an evil mastermind all on her own.

It will be interesting to find out what happens next.  Looking forward to the next five chapters.

Author's Response:

Thanks! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

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