Good chapter! The restaurant concept is awesome and horrifying. Victor is still less interesting than Fred, but I think his discomfort is a good contrast to Mary’s eagerness. 

I keep thinking about last chapter when Fred was venting to Mary. I hope Mary continues to show a submissive streak. I don’t know if Fred would be morally ok with dating Mary, but they seem like a better fit in that Fred actually has the confidence to “boss” Mary around.

Hope we get to see Mary force some Victor/mini interactions. The big F - medium M - small f/m dynamic is awesome and underutilized.

I love the way you describe Mary’s abuse, but I think the individual deaths would be more impactful if you switched to the victim’s POV some of the time.

What do Mary and Victor talk about? Does Mary have hobbies outside acts of control? Her embarrassment that the date wasn’t going well could have been played up more. Near the beginning, Mary makes a joke to her Mom about cleaning her foot then gets embarrassed. And later gets embarrassed when she tried to intimidate her. I love these moments.

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