Um, your story is one huge paragraph.  No matter how good it may be, and I believe it probably is; it's almost impossible to read as one solid paragraph.  Could you please break it up into more easily read, smaller paragraphs.

Would be more than happy to review it once it is more manageable to read.  Thanks in advance.

A bit of advice, I found when using Microsoft Word you may need to add an extra "enter" {i.e. press the "enter" button twice} in between paragraphs for proper spacing, though not always.  It really depends on the program; but you can do a preview screening before posting so you can see any potential issues.

Heck I've posted a few times and still have issues, so don't feel bad about it.  Though having one huge block of words to read might discourage others from reading your story.

Looking forward to reading your story once reformatted.