[Report This]Date: December 02 2023 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 3 - First Meeting
Another great chapter!
You're doing a good job describing all the different sizes on display. I love the details like how Ayla's breath nearly blowed Ryan away and how her tears sounded like rain to the clinic staff. Also, Ayla navigating the tiny parking lot and crushing the car beneath her knee was pretty fun. The characters continue to be very likeable, everyone's reactions in line with what'd I'd expect from them.
If I'm to offer one criticism: there's quite a few instances of characters being referred to with the wrong pronouns, whether it's referring to the female characters as "he" or Ryan as "she" or either of them as "it." Just something to keep an eye on.
Otherwise, definitely worth the wait. I was a bit surprised how easy it was for me to jump back into this world after so much time away, but I think your writing left enough of an impact that I didn't even need to catch myself up, and then this chapter just keeps the good times rolling. Great work!