Giantess World
Reviews For Shrunk At School
Reviewer: thomaterrich Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2014 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Date: March 29 2014 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Please continue this story
Reviewer: EmInEm Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06 2014 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Date: January 06 2014 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
continue this story plz
Reviewer: Ratched Signed [Report This]
Date: December 25 2012 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Date: December 25 2012 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Awesome
Reviewer: Ratched Signed [Report This]
Date: December 25 2012 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Date: December 25 2012 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Awesome
Reviewer: Carycomic Signed 
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Date: November 07 2009 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
[Report This]Date: November 07 2009 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
If it's meant to be 1st-person p.o.v. narration, all the way through, then you shouldn't suddenly shift over to 3rd-party p.o.v. It's very distracting!
You also need a few commas, here and there, to make some of your sentences less run-on. Other than that, this installment wasn't bad.