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Reviewer: Amy_GTS Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 11 2024 1:20 PM Title: Sara's Bedroom

Absolutely loving this so far! Hints of teasing mixed in with building the characters as people.makes the story so much better! Excited to see the next installment!



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 11 2024 3:42 AM Title: Sara's Bedroom

This was a really rewarding chapter.

I love that Sara was so shy about asking Evan out. She has been assertive, playful, and even a little flirty throughout the story so far and even isn't afraid to scold Evan when she's worried about him. So it's nice to see that she had just as much of a fear of being rejected as he did, and that her feeling that way seemingly contradicts her regular personality helps to highlight how much she likes him.

Also, Evan's admission that the reason he drank all that jungle juice was to build up the courage to ask Sara out is kind of poetic. Not only did it bring them together, as he pointed out, but, in a way, he's kind of shrinking for her. Hmm, I wonder if she'll take advantage of that?

And I really like how Evan is now taking this whole situation in stride. Pretty much as soon as Sara offered to take care of him for the night, all of that initial shock and fear seemed to melt away. Suddenly, he's feeling prideful (not accepting help up the stairs) and a little adventurous (exploring the girls' shoes). Not only is he crushing on her, but he naturally trusts her a lot as well. That shows that his feelings for her are more than skin deep.

Oh, and Sara getting Evan off with her foot and not even realizing it was an incredible scene!

I absolutely love Chloe! What a fun character. As soon as she realized that she wasn't the only one shrinking, she it seemed like she was ready to enjoy the experience. With her showing a kink for being dominated, I'm pretty eager to see Mia, who seemed to enjoy the power she had over Mike (even if she's actually pretty nice), get her turn to play with the volleyball captain.

I don't know if we're sticking around in Sara's room or if we're joining Mike, Lily, and company for beer pong next chapter, but either way, it should be a lot of fun!



Author's Response:

Thank you again for the review!

There were two things I was worried about for this chapter when I put it out initially... the romance of Evan/Sara and the foot scene. I'm happy to hear both seemingly turned out well.

In regards to Chloe--she was originally not supposed to show up until later... but somehow adding her here felt right. I also enjoyed her character so much I've added a chapter to my outline to give her a little more spotlight.

As far where we're going next--I'll let that be a surprise for now. (But you've guessed the 'where' for the next two chapters.)

(Also! I saw you wrote a story. It's on my to do list to it check out!)

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