Reviewer: Fatedmeal Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02 2024 1:36 PM Title: Freed From Laces, Not From Feet

Yo!

In reference back to your previous reply, the first two chapters may have been set-up, but you effectively interspersed some details that would captivate this site’s audience. Such as the brother imagining what it would be like being shrunken and in the direct line of path of his sister’s soccer ball while she was playing with her friends, and when you were describing Becky’s scale of existence relative to the shrunken brother. Those lines of text built up anticipation and maintained a sense of tension.

Now, of course, you’re expecting me to review this most recent chapter and  I don’t want to disappoint. I think that you did an excellent job in fine-tuning Becky’s character and utilizing it to facilitate the transition from an older brother-younger sister dynamic to a Big Sister-little brother dynamic. I definitely see the appeal that you mentioned in your reply of the unique interactions that you want for your story (a playful giantess that incidentally terrorizes her brother) and I think you’ve accomplished the commencement of that quite well. Especially with the stakes established within the first coming week, but I have to wonder how exactly the Big sister will get to the soccer game. It’s not as if her pet little brother will be able to give her a ride. As he’ll most likely be riding in the stuffy space shared with her moistening and wrinkled plane of a sole and her rapping and bulbous pillars of a set of toes. Regardless, that’s a concern for the future that you made pressing for the little brother at this moment. Love it!

I also love how you depicted the conflict this scene. With Becky’s pet being stuck in her shoe laces. How helpless he was, again, reinforced just how small his existence had become…and is telling of just how pliable his fate is within the relatively expansive palms of his energetically excited owner.

Finally, the embarrassing picture. Its capture encapsulated the giantess’s excited, casual, and teasing approach to this entire incident. It tells us readers that Becky is going to have fun in this story and I’m all for it. While the brother’s reaction just reinforces how mortifying this experience is going to be for him.

I guess that is my hot take for this 3rd chapter.

As for unaware and aware chapters. My preference depends on how inclined the giantess is to be gentle. As you are accurate in the assessment of my own writing, I am a fan of stuff on the more violent side. So the gentler the giantess is, the more likely I’ll prefer the unaware chapters. Unless there is a misunderstanding that leads to some trouble for the shrunken individual, which is the premise for your entire story. So I think that I’ll equally enjoy both aware and unaware chapters. As I’m also an avid fan of this specific middle ground of giantesses that are so hard to find on this site.

Oh yea, and just like duck12345, if you want to ever bounce off some ideas to stimulate your thought process or writing process, then you can just send me a request on Discord and directly message me there. My username is PokemonBreederBrock.

Until next time.

Reviewer: duck12345 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01 2024 3:06 PM Title: Freed From Laces, Not From Feet

I don't log in too much these days so I was lucky to catch the first couple chapters, and looks like I got lucky again! Going to try and keep up with this one but might be a while before I log in again.

Chapter 3 was soooo good - regarding the dialogue I think it's great, loved the teasing from Becky about her smelly feet and especially when she brought up how she used to stink out the car. Maybe playing up the annoying little sister angle is the way to go.

Excited to see what ideas you have in mind but if the well runs dry feel free to drop me a note on deviantart, username is duckster77. I'm resisting the urge to offer suggestions here haha because I'm sure your ideas are going to be amazing and would love to see what comes of this story next.

Reviewer: Fatedmeal Signed [Report This]
Date: April 30 2024 2:25 PM Title: Of Sisters, Settings and Surprises

I’ve got to say that reading your story was a great way to start this week for me. I even got off my butt and started writing the next chapter of the current ongoing story in my gallery, Nameless . I’ve even written 2,000 words already because of how inspiring these initial chapters were. 

I’m definitely a fan of how you depicted these unaware scenes, but I’m also looking forward to how you’ll handle the aware scenes in light of the sister’s misunderstanding. 

I’m definitely looking forward to being a frequent reviewer of this series.

Author's Response:

Wow, thanks a lot! It's rare to have setup chapters called inspiring, it means a lot to me <3 glad it could inspire you too! For the record, I think you're a really talented writer, I kinda wish I was more into the violent sort of stuff so I could get really into your stories - I really mean that in a positive way, well done gore is rare and good, just usually not my cup of tea. I think your Caenis story is my favorite that I've read, even though it's usually not the sort of thing I'd like, so I think that says a lot about your writing style.

Definitely curious to hear what you think of the new aware chapter then, feel free to let me know what you liked and didn't! I think this is a relatively rare kinda setup, since stories are usually either unaware, gentle, or purposefully trying to make the tiny suffer, and I wanted to play with a character who just wants to play around and cause suffering casually, almost unintentionally - though as things go on I intend for her to get more used to tormenting the character, so I'm really curious to see how it develops. That chapter won't be the only one with unaware though I think, so feel free to let me know which approach you prefer as I go :D

I look forward to hearing more of your thoughts, that stuff is super motivating ;)