[Report This]Date: November 23 2011 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 15: Conclusion
forgot how great this story was. will you be adding additional volumes to it?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the compliment. The plan is to add another volume that will be slow growth. I have it tentatively outlined and have about seventy pages of very rough draft written (it needs major revisions still in my opinion). Despite the amount completed so far the end is no where in sight. Also, I took a break to write The Cities in the Cellar and The Wedding Story epilogue scenes (which turned out to be more lengthy and numerous than I first envisioned). Unfortunately, that means this story is on the back burner right now. I will be finishing Cities soon. When that is completed I'll probably get back to this one unless something else more compelling pops into mind. Also, the size of this story means it is a much longer term project than I first thought as well - with a slow growth to giga there are so many angles and things to consider than a shrinking man story, imo.
minuss
Date: May 12 2011 4:41 PM Title: Chapter 15: Conclusion
'msorry, I do have one more suggestion. The part when the doctors inserted the egg in the serum snd revereed the shrinking process, I wouild have gone back to Scott's pint of view and have him amazed that tespace inside the egg is getting smaller, that m aybe, jut mabe he's going to grow again.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the suggestions. I agree with you on both counts. The conclusion was probably a little rushed. I was so excited about finally finishing and getting it posted that I probably lost a little quality at the end. I think in the future I will hold for one more week after completion to allow for a couple of final proof reads.
[Report This]Date: May 12 2011 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 15: Conclusion
Excellent story. I do have a couple of small (pun intended) suggestions. First, I woul;davce stayed with WScott as he shrk beneath 1/16th of an inch so e could be sad about the posibility of never being able to grow again, to wonder wha it's like to be microscope sized ia giant world ala Inredible Shrinking Man. My other suggestion s to make it a bit more clearer that the point of view has shifted from Scott to Kim. Other than those 2 criticisms, wonderful story!!!
Date: May 12 2011 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 15: Conclusion
This story was excellent!! I do have a few small (pun intended) suggestions both relating to the final chapter. First, I would have stayed with Sott as he shrunk under 1/16th of an inch, maybe have him become blue knowing he will never be big again. Kind of lik Scott Carey at te end of Incredible Shrinking Man/ On to my second suggestion, when the point of view swings over to Kim, it should be a little clearer. I didn't get it at first and was confused, but I did figure it out. Otherwaise a FINE slowshrik story!
[Report This]Date: March 24 2011 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 15: Conclusion
i love your stories an this is no exception. well done.
hope to see volume 2.
aaron
[Report This]Date: February 28 2011 1:38 PM Title: Chapter 15: Conclusion
Excellent! Thanks for sharing this, here.