Date: May 18 2011 1:47 AM Title: Chapter 7
This is the single greatest chapter of any story I've ever read! I love that she is starting to enjoy how he feels under her foot and I hope she convinces him that he will have to go back under her foot to sneak back out of the building onlt to realize that she is in no hurry to take him out and maybe instead of rushing home she could go out for a night on the town with her friend, and maybe while they are in her friend's lab he tells her that she knocked him out under her feet and she tells him to kiss her feet so she will know that he is awake and doing alright, and maybe if he stops kissing she presses her foot down on him until he starts again. just a thought.
I'm realy loving this story so far and I'm sure whatever you have planned will be great.
eagerly awaiting the next chapter, Eddy Cobb.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it.
And your ideas are really really good, but the way that I write, when I post a chapter, the next chapter is already finished, I just don't upload it till i'm finished the one after that. It really helps me out, cause I change so much stuff around in my chapters before I finalize them. But I will keep your idea, I might be able to work that into another story, after I take a break from this one.
[Report This]Date: May 16 2011 10:59 AM Title: Chapter 7
We're starting to see the buildup of a conflict, which makes this really interesting! You've got good thorough physical despcrition and creative situations. Make use of that 3rd person to really let us get into the minds of your characters, that helps build tension!
You're doing great, and there are a lot of requests for things. Personally, I'd just really like to read what you yourself are thinking of. Also, the regular updates are great.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the excellent reviews.
I am glad you're enjoying the story so far. I've read "A Chance with a Cougar" countless times, and enjoyed it immensely, and it influenced the work I did in this story. I do plan on putting my thoughts on the story in the final chapter, so stay tuned for that. Time was a scarcity over the weekend, but I count on spending a little more time this week finishing up the rest of the story.
[Report This]Date: May 15 2011 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 7
This was a great chapter. I cant wait to see what happens. You are a very good writer.
Dave
[Report This]Date: May 14 2011 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 7
chapter was superb. great details an descriptions. awaiting next chapter.
aaron