Reviews For The Rippling Wall. (Formerly 'She')
Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: July 10 2011 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 2; The start of "the good stuff"
Date: July 10 2011 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 2; The start of "the good stuff"
So here in chapter 2 epscially, I think it would best if you put speech on separate lines to the description. I just makes your story easier to read.