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Reviewer: Jay Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 12 2011 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

I'll surrise and not mention Carly doing anything twisted to him with her feet this time! I think a fitting scene of humilation might actually consist of Carly using him to get herself off, so to speak. After she's done with the deed, she could hold his drenched, psychologically damaged little body between her thumb and forefinger up to her face, mocking this latest dispaly of utter degredation. All the while, Jack's face is drenched and his small body quivers helplessy from this latest display of carnage.



Author's Response:

thanks for the suggestion.  to be perfectly honest insertion or anything closely related is sort of a personal turn-off for me regarding the gts fetish, but i'll see what i can do

Reviewer: deviant Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12 2011 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 6: Early Morning Jog

this story rocks.  this girl is a total fucking monster.  one would think after 5+ years he would try pity against her.  haha.  this story is bringing me back here.  luckily for me i just kind of buzzed over part 2 so i've got a whole other story yet. :)



Author's Response:

hehe yes i tend to get a little wordy, so the second one is something of a time commitment.  thanks for reading.

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 10 2011 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 6: Early Morning Jog

I love how descriptive you are when describing where Jack is on Carly's body. It really helps the story. Great chapter.

Dave



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thanks!

Reviewer: randysavage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 08 2011 8:42 PM Title: Chapter 5: Paint the Town Blue

Another great chapter.  I got a laugh out of the part of Jake getting high off of the nail polish fumes.  Keep up the awesome work man.



Author's Response:

i'm glad my poor attempt at humor sort of worked, and thanks for the review

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 07 2011 11:03 PM Title: Chapter 5: Paint the Town Blue

That was a weird chapter but I liked it. I liked that Carly was actually nice to Jack and didn't punish him when he got sick. Seems to me in some weird way they really do care about each other, Sometimes I wonder what their relationship would be like if Jack some how got back to normal size after all this time. I don't think they would be hating each other as much as they did at the start of the series.

Dave



Author's Response:

i'm pretty sure there's no bro/sis relationship quite as screwed up as this one, hehe ;)

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 07 2011 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

Jack was kind of a jerk in the flashback. I hate to say it but in each story there have been times when he's been a jerk to Carly. Sometimes I think he deserves some of what he gets. But me being an only child growing up.I don't really know much about the love/hatred that can exists between siblings.

It was a great chapter as usual though. I loved it.

Dave  



Author's Response:

thanks for reading.  part of my intention is to get you to somewhat sympathize with Carly despite her insanity

Reviewer: Jay Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 04 2011 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

Again, it's great to see you come back to this story and wrap things up. I can honestly say that I have no idea where you're taking things and how the these two sibling's story will end. That's a good thing. I also like where I think last chapter was pointing to; Carly seems to be in a mood to play with her brother at her feet. The ease by which various body parts of hers so easily manipulate his nether regions, I'd like to throw something humilating that hasn't been seen quite yet: What if Carly were to immobilize his hands so that he can't touch himself and experiments on whether her foot stink alone is enough to cause him to orgasm? I think it would simply be another incident in a long line of them involving her feet having utter superiority over her brother. Now, however, even the very smell of her feminine foot stink can have it's way with him in the most intimate of fashion. Great stuff so far. What small critique is that I don't ever like to read about anyone younger than 16 in these stories that's involved in the main bod of the story. Because you're so talented, I overlooked her being 14 in the first 2 stories, but it makes me a mite uncomfortable to read about her manipulating her brother at age 12. I realize that she's 19 now, which is great. Other than that, great additions!



Author's Response: I am very, very aware of your preferences at this point bud, and hope you're ok with the fact that we diverge a bit in our tastes regarding the foot scenes. As for the age thing i see your point, i hadn't really considered it though since there's no sexual content in chapter 4; additionally, as an author, being not terribly far off in age from carly, it hadn't really bothered me, but i'll keep the age thing more in mind from now on; thanks for the feedback, i appreciate it

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 31 2011 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 3: Cut Down to Size

I liked this a lot, I think it would be fun to have Carly where Jack to school.

Glad you have a new ides for a story. But please continue this one as well, The "A Little Blackmail" Series of stories are my favorite stories on the site.

Dave



Author's Response:

glad you enjoyed it.  carly's suggestion may not come to fruition, though, as that happened in the second story already, but trust me when i say i've got some fun alternatives

Reviewer: underherheels Signed [Report This]
Date: August 31 2011 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 3: Cut Down to Size

I think she should wear him to class :P



Author's Response:

hehe we'll have to wait and see

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: August 30 2011 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

I have to say your writing of Carly is tremendous. I know the humiliation route has been done many times before but the way she does it has a certain -homegrown- touch to it that I can't put my finger on.

 

Also if you are looking to start a new story I would love to see even if it's a one off epilouge of how Ashley made out.

 

Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

i'm glad you think i'm making a well-worn genre work.  the new story will probably be a separate thing, but i might someday get around to a follow-up on family reunion

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 28 2011 6:53 PM Title: Chapter 2: Cookies and Sweat

That was a great chapter. I love how Carly humiliates her brother so much.

Dave



Author's Response:

i'm pretty sure you've got the medal for most reviews on my stories.  i appreciate the consistency greatly.

Reviewer: deviant Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2011 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

Really enjoy all three of these, this bitch is just fucking mean!  haha.



Author's Response:

that she is.  :)  glad you like.

Reviewer: happiest_in_shadows Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2011 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

I have to say Carly is triggering some fairly strong feelings of dislike and wanting to see her suffer. I wonder if that's really what the guy should be hoping for though. After all even if Carly had to pay for what she'd done at some point that doesn't mean his life becomes better. Rather then hoping to see Carly pay perhaps seeking better treatment would be a better move.

Now on the subject of better treatment I don't believe the male lead is really doing his best to obtain that or has really given in. Doing what Carly wants him to do whenever she tells him to do something or is made to do it, not arguing with her and given preprogrammed responses these aren't the acts of a pet or a slave. Rather those are the acts of a tool.

I would even go so far as to say he's putting up some passive resistance to what she wants in that she has to tell him what she wants or at least show him. This really isn't giving into her or giving her what she wants from what I can tell. What she seems to desire is to be worshiped and that goes beyond doing what he is told to do in that moment.

In those five years has he really tried to move beyond the status of tool and into the category of pet? When she comes home don't stand there and wait for her to pick him up jump up and down and tell her how happy you are to see her. When in her fingers don't just let her hold you kiss those fingers and if she likes it lick them as well. Grasp her thumb with all your might and hug it. When she licks him kiss her tongue or lick it in return. Look into her mouth and ask her if she'd like you to check her teeth and see if they need anything remove from between them.

Now I can't say for certain whether or not this would have the desired result of moving from tool or toy to devoted pet status in Carly's eyes but after five years it seems worth a try. It might back fire but it still seems worth the attempt. After all the little dog that greets you with yelping and playful antics is a heck of a lot more loughable then the one that just grunts at you.



Author's Response:

i agree with essentially everything you've said here about toy vs. pet, and fear not; i've thought all these factors through, and unlike the first 2 blackmail stories, i have a very deliberate direction i intend to take this story in; i hope you enjoy the ride.

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2011 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

That was a very good chapter to start with. I'm glad you have started a third story in the series. This is definitely my favorite series. I was a little surprised by the five year jump. I am really looking forward to seeing what new games and Cruelty Carly is capable of at 19.

Dave



Author's Response:

thanks for your consistent support, hope you like some of the things i have planned for this one

Reviewer: randysavage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2011 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

you have a lot to live up to with how awesome your previous 2 stories were.  but this first chapter already has me excited for what's about to happen next.  great work man



Author's Response: thanks, i'll certainly do my best

Reviewer: Jay Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2011 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later

I'm really happy to see you delving into the third and final chapter of this story! Good move on cutting to five years later, as it allows the reader to imagine how terriblely cruel Carly has been to keep him at her sweat-ridden body for so long. I obviously will be following every sordid chapter of story. And while I have my personal hopes for how Jack's fate ends up (brutally slow, smelly foot-related death), I'm sure whatever you do will be awesome. You have some real stamina to put out the stories you do!



Author's Response: thanks for the review. i'm sure you're well familiar at how our tastes diverge a bit in that respect, but i hope you continue to enjoy regardless

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