Date: September 14 2012 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 11: Flimsy Alibi
Well that was odd. I'm also wondering why the first line of each paragraph is indented. I don't mind. It just looks odd.
Author's Response:
Yeah, it's just a formatting thing that happens when I post. It doesn't show up when I upload, so there's not much I can do about it.
Date: September 06 2012 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 11: Flimsy Alibi
Very cool. I didn't realize new chapters of The Freshman were being produced.
Looks like you're taking this in a very different direction. Some mystery kidnapper who couldn't manage to abduct a bug size boy. A Darwin Award nominee type perhaps.
Ms. Tritter, what a treat!
Author's Response:
I'm still trying to discover the exact tone i want to take with this one, but i do have major plot points planned out, so i will continue to write chapters, albeit slowly. the mystery kidnapper wasn't necessarily trying to keep Peter, but simply put him in a dangerous place and force him to get out of it. obviously, more will be given on that later on. glad you liked ms. tritter
Date: September 06 2012 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 11: Flimsy Alibi
Very cool. I didn't realize new chapters of The Freshman were being produced.
Looks like you're taking this in a very different direction. Some mystery kidnapper who couldn't manage to abduct a bug size boy. A Darwin Award nominee type perhaps.
Ms. Tritter, what a treat!
[Report This]Date: September 05 2012 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 11: Flimsy Alibi
Great update an wonderfully written. I kept thinking things would go awry but never did. Well done, I like this teacher.
aaron
Author's Response:
sometimes it's nice when things go smoothly :)
[Report This]Date: September 05 2012 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 11: Flimsy Alibi
Well, I can understand Peter's feeling compelled to lie, flimsily or not.
For one thing; even if he suspected the wackette from art class of being his abductor, he honestly didn't see her (trapped as he was, in the handkerchief). So, he couldn't publicly accuse her of his abduction with 100% certainty.
Then, there's the fact that his Mom would understandably freak out, and withdraw him from school. Completely and permanently! Her earlier fears having been seemingly justified.
Oops! I'm getting long-winded, again. So, I'll just conclude this review with my praise for a continuing good effort. And, my promise that I'll be here for the next riveting chapter.
Author's Response:
thanks, i appreciate the support
[Report This]Date: September 04 2012 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 11: Flimsy Alibi
a nice addition showing of a could be important character