Date: February 14 2013 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 2
Marian mentions she comes from a planet orbiting the star Algol. I did a bit of reading, and this apparently lone star is actually part of a systen containing three stars and as such, this would make it very hard for a planet(s) to exist because of the effects of gravity. Any planets that do not want to be flung away would to have to be so close to the that star they would be too hot for any life.
Author's Response:
You take it seriously, do you? Good, I like that.
Anyway, I read Algol is a binary system, meaning it consists of two stars, not three. And binary systems can have planets with a stable orbit at Earth's distance.
And let's be honest, what do we know about Algol the Krawalonians would not? :)
[Report This]Date: October 16 2011 9:55 AM Title: Chapter 2
The action moves pretty quickly, doesn't it? I like the premise, the race for the objects, and the allusions to the alien society. Good writing, but you'll want to go over it all one more time to clean up a couple spots.