Date: July 06 2016 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful story would like to read more.
Date: August 29 2012 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 1
i really like it so far. im gettihg tired of the crap stories on this site so please continue
Date: May 07 2012 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 2
Amazing, you updated it! Hopefully Nastu won't die. What am I saying? Of course he won't die yet because that would be the end of the story.
I did notice a couple of errors, but not really too much to worry about:
“Well than I’m in your dept. Thank you!”
I'm pretty sure you mean debt.
again he fell into Belle hand.
It should be "Belle's hand".
[Report This]Date: March 28 2012 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Best story in the world
Date: March 28 2012 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good start to the story! Just try to edit some of the little grammical mistakes in the future.
Can't wait for where you go with this story!
Date: March 28 2012 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really, really like this story. It makes a welcome change from the usual crudness, and the description is alright. I did notice some minor errors in your writing, i.e. mixing in present tense with past tense in some places but I this is only minor, as I said and I didn't feel it derailed the story, though it is something to note for future chapters. The story is looking very promising, and I assuming the interaction is kept believable and everyone stays in character I can see this being added to my favourites.
Author's Response:
Wow! Thanks for the comments! This is my first story so I might have a few errors in it. As the story goes on I'll make it much better.
Date: March 28 2012 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved this story please write more of it