Reviews For Chartreuse and a Necklace
Reviewer: SafetyPin Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2012 10:04 PM Title: 1: Going to her Place
Author's Response:
Date: December 31 2012 10:04 PM Title: 1: Going to her Place
Good start. Well written. Good potential.
I'll wait for the real action to begin before giving it a rating.
Author's Response:
Gracias. I hope you find it meets that potential.
Reviewer: sm7in Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2012 5:36 PM Title: 1: Going to her Place
Author's Response:
Date: December 31 2012 5:36 PM Title: 1: Going to her Place
Straight to the point without really sacrificing content. Nice story, I look forward to what may come.
As to critiquing, formating was fine (confused me a little at first too) no prominent typos but the paragraph opening with "Score" is a little difficult to figure out at first, and you may want to fix the sentence where he shrinks down under his clothes.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I tweaked those parts just a little bit, and I think they're clearer now.