Reviewer: Quicksilver Signed [Report This]
Date: April 15 2013 8:15 PM Title: City Tour (Part 2)

Man, it’s only been about two and a half weeks, but it seems like so much more time passed between when you added the “Cat and Mouse” chapters and the “City Tour” chapters.  It goes to show how eagerly I anticipate additions to this story and watch for them.

 

And I hope you don’t take all my thoughts on your world’s background as an indication that you need to include all that information in the story.  I share them more for the purposes of brainstorming some ideas.  But you’re doing just fine.  I enjoyed Svetlana’s antics; she makes Lena look as graceful as a ballet dancer.

Author's Response:

Hallo:

Thanks again for another comment. And I know I don't have to include all the information, but I guess some could be helpful, and even fun. I appreciate those thoughts. Also, I'm glad you liked Svetlana. She's a fun character to write, and I'm glad others feel the same. Thanks again and hope to hear from you again.

Wholia.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: April 13 2013 11:22 AM Title: City Tour (Part 2)

It didn't take much for her to knock some sense into him. I'm guessing Svetlana could be another love rival? Everything happened rather suddenly in this chapter but it's still a wonderful story.

Author's Response:

Hallo:

First of all, thanks for reading and for commenting. I know this chapter seemed to rush a few things a bit, but I tried to imply that some of it went back to years ago, with Lena's family; and I didn't want to go all over that yet. But you're right, it was kind of sudden. I'll try to avoid that in the next chapters. Thanks for the comment and I'm glad you liked it.

Wholia.