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Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 04 2014 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

Really liking this so far! I love the world this takes place in, it's so unique and well thought out. Even the fact that they speak different languages is a big deal! I hope you do something with an american character and japanese GTS...Unlike before where they can "kind of" communicate, this scenario would have no communication whatsoever!



Author's Response:

I hope you continue to like it as you read more. I really need to have some more descriptions of it, then again more description takes away some of the wonder. Some of the references are based on cultural lore, others exaggerated, and some just plain made up. None of my characters have "Titan, Star Trek, Insert sci fi here" universal translators to help them. As for what happens to the American's that's a secret. As for communication, even without language humans can communicate, just not directly. Instead it takes time is arduous and things get misunderstood.

Anyways I hope you continue reading. Thank you.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 09 2014 8:42 PM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

 Ah so the Ryujin are not as invulnerable as I thought, Hina will count herself lucky they didn't try to blow her out of the water. And Shouta, please show some manners, especially in a place where the women can squish you like a bug!

 

I think that perhaps your chapters could be longer, my only criticism really and this is one story I want to see finished. 



Author's Response:

Had they wanted to blow her out of the water, it would have been much easier then the explorative fleets encounter. The Yamato is terrifying enough prospect for the Ryujin, but it was with an escort of a light cruiser and five destroyers. Shouta is a man of pride, as a result, he's not taking the situation too well.

 

I want to make the chapters longer as well, but that also puts a  lot of pressure on me. I'm not very good at segmented writing, typically I write a whole chapter in one go, then edit it.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 05 2013 6:52 PM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

Hey ErikAFreak I just started reading this story and needless to say I am impressed.

Judging from your replys to everyones comments you seem to have a good understanding of physics. Are you formally educated in the subject or is your insight due to the reaserch you mentioned in chat?

Anyways I hope to read more when I have time.



Author's Response:

Hey I already answered your question in Giantess chat. Since other's might be curious I'll also answer you here.

First off thank you for the review. My understanding of physics is mostly related to research, but it also helps I studied the higher math's and sciences while in college. I just went the IT Computer Tech editor/writer route in college. My friend is at a university becoming a particle physicist, so there's that.

I'll try to review your Rise of the Nephilim when I get the chance to fully read and take it in.

Reviewer: faeriehunter Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 12:09 AM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

Replying to ErikAFreaks author's response two reviews down:

ErikAFreak, have you read the wikipedia article for the Japanese destroyers' main gun? Since you didn't mention that they normally fired high explosive shells perhaps you haven't. The article can be found at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Type_3_127_mm_50_caliber_naval_gun.

I'm not a physics expert, but most of what you wrote seems to be correct. Ironically, that probably makes the 50 caliber guns too effective; the shells fired are likely to pass completely through the oni and travel on instead of exploding. (I'm assuming that the shells are designed to penetrate a ship's hull as far as possible before exploding.) A possible way to solve this problem would be to fire from further away. Because of air friction a projectile will lose momentum and thus penetrating power the further it has to travel before reaching its target. Then again, firing from further away makes it harder to hit the target. Since the fleet probably can't replace shells fired, I think they'll choose accuracy over impact. Another possibility might be to use less propellant in the gun than normal, but I've no idea how easy or hard that is to do.

One thing that I think you've got wrong is the oni's perspective. You say that it would perceive a 5 inch diameter "bullet" as being one inch in diameter. That would mean that the oni is five times human length. However, its weight (over twice that of Maki) and the rest of the story make it more likely that the oni's size is increased by the same factor used for Ryujin women, which seems to be around 30:1. If an oni is indeed 30 times "normal" length as I suspect, it would perceive a 5 inch projectile as 1/6 of an inch or 4 millimeter in diameter. At that size you'd likely need a couple of hits to drop the oni unless you can get a shell to explode inside the oni.

By the way, if the size increase is indeed 30:1 for Ryujin women that would make a Japanese man approximately as tall as a Ryujin woman's thumb.

 



Author's Response:

Yes I've read it plus more. More recently which I will share below.

Yes Ryujin woman are anywhere between 120 to 170 feet tall, with 150 as an average for adults.  Your right I did get the perception wrong on the bullet size, at the time i had been doing some other calculations and it got mixed in there.  However Oni fall under a larger scale then the Ryujin woman.

The ships themselves were fully armed before the operation, so it will be a while before thier out of ammo. Each gun had a life of about 500 to 700 shots and each gun would have had 120 ammo, with the ability to shoots 5 to 10 rounds a minute. Note these were seasoned battleships near the end of the war and also shooting faster results in more wear on the barrels. Speaking of ammo, due to the mission and lack of any air cover the destroyers most likely had an excess supply of incendiary shrapnel rounds made for anti aircraft. They might produce similar effects of a mini shotgun to the Oni. They rely on fuses which detonate by time delay which are manually set by the loader. As for the regular shot, what was common by the end of the war was most likely solid steel shot, or hardened tip sabot in Japanese munitions. So likely the destroyers in Operation Ten Go would have been armed with them.

The explosive shells Quote:

"The earliest naval and anti-tank shells had to withstand the extreme shock of punching through armour plate. Shells designed for this purpose sometimes had a greatly strengthened case with a small bursting charge, and sometimes were solid metal, i.e. shot. In either case, they almost always had a specially hardened and shaped nose to facilitate penetration. This resulted in armour-piercing (AP) projectiles.

A further refinement of such designs improved penetration by adding a softer metal cap to the penetrating nose giving armour-piercing, capped (APC) design. The softer cap dampens the initial shock that would otherwise shatter the round. The best profile for the cap is not the most aerodynamic; this can be remedied by adding a further hollow cap of suitable shape: APCBC (APC + ballistic cap).[12]

AP shells with a bursting charge were sometimes distinguished by appending the suffix "HE". At the beginning of the Second World War, solid shot AP projectiles were common. As the war progressed, ordnance design evolved so that APHE became the more common design approach for anti-tank shells of 75 mm caliber and larger, and more common in naval shell design as well. In modern ordnance, most full caliber AP shells are APHE designs."

Here's some info "Japan 12.7 cm/50 (5") 3rd Year Type"

Also I thought I should mention that in 1943 the destroyers which would play a part in Operation Ten Go had their guns upgraded from 127mm to 130mm 50 caliber guns. Also the claims of armor penetration of four feet come from a cited Japanese test which was done, but it was not substantiated.

As for adjusting ammo, the guns fired bag ammunition and used a Welin breech-block, must often black powder charges. So adjusting ammo is possible.

The only one which did not use manual charges was an ASW Explosive shell which used propellant. But it could only pierce 1 inch of steel, and had a APHE flat head designed to explode on impact. "This might be effective, but I'm unsure if and how many they had aboard for Operation Ten Go

Likely the amount of shot able to be used will play a more important role in taking down a giant, since unless bone gets in the way, they will likely pass straight through.

 Thank you for correcting me about the perspective. That was a brain fart I wrote there.

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 01 2013 7:56 AM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

It will be very interesting when the women discover that there is an entire fleet of men. 

I think Shouta and Maki are both making mistakes.  Maki for not trying to understand the culture that Shouta comes from and why he's so behaving so poorly to his treatment.  And Shouta for just being an ass. 

Assuming there's no way for the fleet to return home.  I'm hoping when the dust settles from the upcoming battle with the demon, the 2 cultures can calmly discuss how to best integrate the men into the women's society.  To avoid an experience like Maki and Shouta's.

Good story.  I can't wait to read more.



Author's Response:

Yes the encounter between the men and the Ryujin will be very interesting indeed. I wonder who will have the upper hand in any kind of power play though?

Everyone thinks Shouta is an ass... Well he is defiantly upset, but I think with fairly good reason. He could defiantly be a little more humble for his savior though.

Well the story already mentioned that Jimmu of the Ryujin did travel To Japan and become Emperor in the past, but as for it being planned, it was as much a accident as the fleets coming to Ryo no Yo. So if they did return it would be a freak chance. I have no plans for such statically bad odds happening twice.

As for integration, I'm not quite sure yet how that might go down. In a society where females are the bread winners of society, a group of five thousand arrogant prideful heavily armed young men might not see integration as acceptable. At least not how the Ryujin want it.

 

I already have stuff planned, so more will be coming soon hopefully, but I can't promise when. And thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: Prussian-awesomeness Signed [Report This]
Date: August 19 2013 10:33 AM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

When will there be giants, as in your tag?

Author's Response:

The giant people called the Ryujin have already been introduced, the others have not yet come into the story, they will. Be patient.

Reviewer: Arkcrono14 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 06 2013 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

Sorry i was typing my review on my phone and accidentally posted it before finishing this is an awesome story you've created here and the chapters are so long it's awesome

Author's Response:

Thats fine man, I'm glad you have liked the story so far, I'll see about trying to get the fourth chapter out as soon as a I can. Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: Arkcrono14 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 06 2013 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

Read all three chapters in

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 21 2013 10:12 AM Title: Chapter 1 Depart

A very intriguing opener, indeed. Worthy of being the premier episode of an anime series! I saw a recent special on the Military Channel that revealed this little-known, last-ditch effort to repel the American landing on Okinawas. So, my compliments on your background research. Also, it's interesting that your hero should make a "God" reference. As, State Shintoism is the religion everyone in Japan had to follow, during WWII. Yet, there were many "Karisihi-jin" (Japanese Christians) who secretly remained steadfast to their faith. In spite of the penalties discovery of that fact (by the Kempeitai secret police) would carry.

Author's Response:

Well I'm glad it came off very anime stylish, as a fan of anime that's awesome to hear. Historically speaking The Yamato and her final mission are also seen as the final end of the war, as such the Yamato sinking herself is a very symbolic symbol in Japan for Imperial Japan and her passing. As for the "Karisihi-jin", it was just coincidence that I made that reference. Quote "With all the confusion in the ship it seemed all the crew was beginning to have a unwavering hope, as if God was on their side making them lighter. Still this fact remained elusive as some smacked into bulkheads when they attempted to run to fast." I probably should have said "The Gods" or "a god" but I might now leave it in, and make it something special for my main character Kenta. While the story does focus around Kenta and Vice Admiral Ito, this is the story of all 5,000 men.

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