Reviewer: wildcatman Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02 2013 3:24 PM Title: Shrunk ....

Here;  'Grabbed',  'Gripped',  'Feel'.....

And, you need to Cap.  on  "I',  when your speaking of yourself in first person.

Nice Idea's though, just need to elaborate on the storyline, and refine it.  A bit more build-up and discription is needed, before you just 'plunge' right in,...ya-know?

Just my advice, you can take it for what it's worth.  :`)