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Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: October 10 2013 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 1

This story has potential, it is interesting. If developed right this will be a memorable story. 

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: October 09 2013 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

That was a nice initial chapter although I must mention that you don't need to keep using the name Oliver all of the time. Once the reader knows it's him you don't need to mention him by name again, unless you bring in another male character. That would be in order to avoid confusion so that the reader knows who you are referring to at particular points in the story.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 09 2013 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 1

This is quite good for a first go; you seem to really understand how to utilize the size of the giantess in the narrative.

Also I'm curious are you from the UK?



Author's Response: Thanks, and yeah I'm from the UK.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 09 2013 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 1

Safe?! Yeah, right. Like some sorority sister/roommate of the first giantess _never_ comes looking to borrow something behind the latter's back (or take back what's been borrowed for too long).

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