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Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 7 Memories

I really hope youre still out there and continue this story (and finish it too sooner or later). I miss your Penny stories so much :'( Hope youre ok.

Author's Response:

I am still out there, just busy. This story had a plot written out etc and I have plans to eventually continue it if I get the time too. I will always be writing for fun and for improving my writing skills. Enjoy my new penny story if you want, Penny & Pickle.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 17 2014 3:39 AM Title: Chapter 7 Memories

I really hope to see an update soon again, I miss your work here so much :/ Not really a fan of the last chapter, but just because I dont really like pigs haha :x Still the plot seems great so far and I hope to see some plot with a horse vore resulting in becoming manure a day later. But also I would love to see some tf again in "abusing" her friend in eating something tiny like a M&M or using something horrible, like a toilet paper or an anal bread for example, like a kinky gift from Cassie to her friend which would be used sooner or later.

Author's Response:

Yeah I keep getting distracted and getting writers block. I'll write more as I get the time and the idea's to write. This story is not finished.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2014 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 7 Memories

Awesome to see this back.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the support. I will try and keep chapters coming as I get the time to write them.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 10 2014 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 6 Schools Out

So damn glad youre writing at this story here again :') It's my favorite and I wish so much it will get continued. I missed reading on it over the last couple of weeks so much :( I wished you had wrote out on this part a little bit more "The few remaining contents of the bag spread onto the floor where some young boys were sitting....When she sat back down she watched as the boys grabbed up the chocolates. "What a waste."", I really liked that idea that Joel maybe got a one way ticker through one of these younger boys digestive tract. Even though you mentioned earlier in the story that Joel was one of the first M&Ms she ate that day. Hope so much youll have time really soon again now to continue :)

Author's Response:

I'll try and right more when I can. I'm glad you like the subtle tone I used. as for Joel, that's a mystery. She could have ended up in anyone's stomach who ate the M&M's. All I said for certain was that she was gone, and most likely through Susan, or so hoped Cassie.


Anyways, thanks for the review, look forward to more when I can get some more time!


Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 09 2014 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 6 Schools Out

Good to see it back.

Author's Response:

Thanks AdamX.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 31 2013 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 5 Lunch Crush

I hope so much youll be able to continue on your story here really soon again :') I miss it so so much. I wish you a happy new year. Have a nice new years eve night!!!

Author's Response:

Hopefully free time will come up to write, now that the busiest part of the year at my workplace is coming to an end. I'll still be busy but hopefully more writing time can be alloted.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2013 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 5 Lunch Crush

Cassie has the makings of a future giantess sociopath. She's on the right path it would seem.

Author's Response:

I'm glad someone has noticed. Cassie is a bit of a sociopath, as your clearly starting to notice. She started all innocent, but she is gradually revealing he true self to the readers. Coming up eventually you will be able to see more of why she ended up that way, but that flashback scene is for a future chapter, I hope you will still be around to review it when I do.

Thanks again for the review, hope to see you next chapter.

As for Cassie's personality, there is a few truths we can take from it. She really does love her best friend Susan. She is very manipulative. She's a compulsory liar. She blends into society perfectly while still being able to stump out of the life of another simply for getting in between her and Susan. She has her own rules on what makes a human, human, and if you don't measure up, she will heartlessly step on you. It's not for pleasure, nor is it for a greater purpose, she simply labels certain people worthless bugs of society. A perfect target for Dexter Morgan, wink, wink.

Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2013 2:24 PM Title: Chapter 5 Lunch Crush

Hi man, this is some fantastic story so far, Im so glad I found it. I just love transformation stories, and this is just intense good stuff. Hope youll continue this soon. I will look into this and follow your stories!!

Author's Response:

Thanks a lot for the praise. And I hope you enjoy the rest of my works.

Transformation stories seem to be a much more rare commodity in this community. Also it seems to always end up grouped with GTS stories, making them harder to find. Not that there are alot on the site, the majority being GTS content. I wish more auhtors would do them, I know there are good transformation story authors on this site besides myself. The last story not done by me, if I recall correctly was Slug by Tinyone234. It was very short, but good, if not without an innaccurate title. Still, with the amount of authors on GTW, we could sorely use some more unaware transformation content.

I wonder if anyone will ever send me a message about wanting to add to My Penny Series, I'd love to see how another author could do it. Now I'm rambling, Anyways look forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2013 9:48 AM Title: Chapter 5 Lunch Crush

So glad seeing another chapter!!! And noo :x please dont say there wouldnt be a next for some time, that breaks my heart :'/ And yes, totally liked how it went, and what happend to Joe and a random guy. Loved the trick prank Cassie played out and Susan has no idea at all about everything. Maybe a great way of using irony would be if one of the last M&Ms left, which would be Joe, would be given by Susan to a boy in her class asking if he could have some, which would be ironically the boyfriend of Joel or just a best friend of her. Or the M&Ms would be half empty being stored for later by Susan, Joel still under them, and later at some point the one unlucky M&M would be feed by Susan to one of Cassies horses. Totally loved the conversation at the end, that was the best of it all :') "So where is Joel?" "She said she had some stuff to do. But she left you this Susan." Cassie held out a bag of M&M's. "That was nice of her, hopefully she gets to class on time." Susan said as she ripped open the M&M's bag. "I'm sure she'll make it in time." Cassie hid her smile. Really great. Also how Cassie thought she was so clever is a great idea, of maybe in the end it backfires at her in some way. I just hope for the best that youll be able to maybe write the next chapter in between next to what you wanted to do. I am mostly looking everyday for this story aha :'p The best thing about the whole chapter was how Cassie used Joel, letting her tf herself without knowing, thinking she would do something totally different, or be part of a magic trick, that was so great. You should use this concept another time, manipulating someone in doing something with the penny and saying the word at some point, without the person has a clue what he is doing to him/herself.

Author's Response:

Thanks again for the review.

Well I have three stories which are active, and only focusing my time on one story isn't really fair to those readers waiting for new chapters for my other ones. One has been without an update for two months for example. That said, this story has been flowing out of my head nicely, and I know what direction it is heading, it will not be abandoned for too long.


Susan is getting more suspicious of Cassie as the story progresses, so I think it's only a matter of time until something has to give. Well, to use the penny as a weapon, as you have described, manipulation is really the only way. Seeing how the user has to perform a ritual for it to work. Most of my characters who have fallen prey to it have been manipulated into using the penny without their own knowledge. Honestly one of the hardest parts about writing a penny story is the rituals involved.

It's not so easy to make Joel Candy, Janet Shampoo, or Jason a Frog. I have to setup a ritual which makes sense. The penny would make an awful murder weapon, but as a tool, it's dangerous and powerful. But as the Penny itself proves, it wants to devour souls, and it has no trouble manipulating will and mending destiny to make it so. The victims of the Penny would just be far too unlucky otherwise. It even twists the soul of those who would use it's cursed powers.


Spoiler Chapter 1.

Well hell if anyone got the reference in chapter one, you would have seen it turned a benevolent ruler of Egypt, who prided himself on ruling over his people for prosperity, into Hitler. The Penny is a twisted Cursed object brought into this world with thousands of human soul sacrifices. Those wretched souls, now make up the Penny's Very Tainted Soul. Ah, but all of this was in Chapter One.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 14 2013 9:14 AM Title: Chapter 4 Dissection

"Sometimes no description is better than the best written POV" exactly!! So glad you got me all right :'))) But this just goes together and works if the "normal pov", of the unaware people, do something really horrible on the one side for the tfed people, and mosly just something normal/ordinary for the unaware. The reader than has to read between the lines, wait, this is all sounding so easily and normal, but then this is just right happening to the tfed people and then it must be total horror to them. I just love this play of things. I also got a idea someone maybe ended as an "butt sponge" for cleaning horses, most people arent aware about this, but for cleaning the anus a special sponge is under the cleaning utilities for washing/cleaning horses. And it would be a horrible fate someone ending as this tiny special sponge tool, being used to clean horses butts all over again and in between not even been washed or cleaned again, getting dry after being used, the smell and particales all in it still, and the next day being used again. Anyway I am so damn looking fr the next chapters :') This story is so damn great already. Youre the true best author on here for unaware, especially transformation.

Author's Response:

I don't know if I can rightfully claim a title such as best author on here for unaware, especially transformation. There have been quite a few good authors on GTW, though I'm happy to hear your opinion of me is so great. I must be doing something right.

I just added a new chapter, which I hope you will enjoy as well as the last. It has a lot of hidden references and clues for foreshadowing. And yes, reading between the lines is great!

Thanks again for the review.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 13 2013 7:43 AM Title: Chapter 4 Dissection

No really :p I hope I got myself clear how fantastic this chapter was, and what I loved about it. I am feeling really captured right now in my inner self, not sure if I can make you understand what I liked about this chapter so mach. Did you get what I wanted to say? It's all about leaving out the pov of Jason. How Cassie prepared her own frog and the read wasnt sure yet if it's Jason, just giving him a tiny little segment in between, like slowly waking up, where am I, what happened, and so on, and then light, seeing the face of one of the girls, cut. And then the preparation of the "other frog" began, and the reader be all like oh my god, now this is Jason, will he get through the same procedure Casie just did on her frog, and than, bam, how Susan just grabbed "her frog", went, or lets say, tried to go through the same steps, and out of pure bad luck again went too fast, because of Cassie indirectly. And how his brain was all functional and he was just paralysed because of the broken/half broken neck, and how he must feel everything and go through everything. The horror is just fantastic. Mostly the best unaware tf you ever did. The whole point of everything going together is just so great what I love about this chapter. Also how the girls talked about it then, and Cassie made fun about Susan and "her frog", how she would even found it more funnier if it had been the girl, and how all are so damn unaware about it was one of the poor boys from the class. Damn... I know youve mostly planed everything already, but if youll be able to put in between maybe a bird vore, landing in birds stomach, how it would make quick work of his "insect" and reduce it into bird poo, mostly reeaving itself on a car or house window the girls would be in, would be really ironic and awesome. And the whole farm idea of someone going the hell of a horses digestive tract, and later ending somewhere from the horse lifting its tail in a pile of manure would also be so great. I also liked how this friend of them, Joel came into action and  tried to let it all sound not so bad at all, getting them just to forget about it, where she wouldnt even know all the details. It all adds so much to the idea of the boy never to be seen again, ended as a "something", mostly something horrible, in this case a opened frog, still alive, partially organs removed, and it's all fun to the girls, and Joel even tried to change subject, so that the idea of the human Jason once was is completely trashed and made litterally nothing worth about. The same aspect would fit so well into someone being reduced to a bird poo and also on the farm of a horses. Maybe even Cassie would ride out her stallion horse to school a day later or with her friend Susan together and the horse woul releive himself on the schools car lot, making Susan be all like "eww" and Cassie just laugh it off like "relax Susan, it's all just natural", in this kind of thing. Maybe one of their teachers was the one ended in that pile, and ironically they would stand in front of his car which was parked there since yesterday. Again thanks so much for this story :) I am looking into so much now for the next parts and hope thell arrive really soon :))

Author's Response:

I do get what you're getting at. Sometimes no description is better than the best written POV, sometimes some things just can't be explained or described, and instead just needs to be seen or imagined. That was the case with Jason's POV, it was just enough to queue the reader to the knowledge that he was there. Any point of view description I could have written would have paled in comparison to my readers imaginations of it. The whole first portion, was just a build up for it. Honestly it took a lot of time and effort to write that chapter, easily five hours or more. For 2,000 words, that's a lot of time, mind you I also used that time for research and editing etc.

Hopefully my next few chapters can live up to this one. Assuming I get some more time to write. Look forward to it. Thanks again.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 12 2013 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 4 Dissection

Ahhh!! Totally loved the newest chapter :) The whole frog idea was really great. Especially these things I loved:

- how the read thought the first frog was the boy, but then got to know it wasnt- how the reader was left alone with Jason's pov after Susan prepared her "frog", and how she failed at killing the brain- the whole conversation afterwards about "the frog", and that it was just a frog, and it wouldnt matter if his brain was still functional, how Cassie liked it all and made fun about it- How Cassie was really good at in vet things, the whole part where she used that needle to kill the frogs brain was so fascinating to read and it build up so much tension, especially because the POV switches, and the reader has to imagine how this actions at the pov letting are affecting the tf person- the whole idea of Susan accidentally not did er job right, which would have horrible affects on her frog/Jason

Just brilliant chapter, really. I was hoping now reading something similiar in the next chapter, and I start to like Cassie somehow as the "bad guy", I hope she survives in the end and just all the people around her suffer. Seeing someone end as bird poop would be nice combined wiht Susan or Cassie letting it all set up in motion, unknowingly feeding a tiny bug to a bird for example, where at a later story time, the same bird would leave a bird poop on a window for example. I also had an idea reading al about Cassie wanting to be a vet and is good at things like that. Maybe it was the annual/half year time to deworm her horses at the farm, which would include giving the horses deworming medicine. The medicine works that it deactivates/dissolves the worms shield skin and afterwards they are just normally digestbale by a horses digestive tract. So maybe one person gets tfed into a worm larve and mixed under the horses food, swallowed, and the twist here would be that the deworming medicine would just take its magic on the tfed person too, and it would easily be digested by the horse.
Again brilliant chapter. I love the idea of telling the girls POV much longer out, and the reader has to imagine what horrors the tf guy went through, in this the frog, and Cassie or the girls in random just talking about it all making fun about it, not having the tiniest idead about what happened before. Cant wait for the next to come :x

Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed reading it.

I made a choice with the POV scene, and ended up choosing a more suspenseful approach. In the end, it what you can't see, that is ultimately terrifying. So Jason's point of view was unnecessary, not to mention anything I wrote would just pale in comparison to something somebody could imagine. To get everything right, I actually looked up many self tutorials on frog dissection. I even watched several video's on it, not for the squeamish of course. Try watching them while reading, it will really creep you out. Or it might just creep you out watching them in general.

I think I got the rest of the story wrapped up in my head nicely, I just need to get it all down unto the canvas. As for what will happens next, I cannot say, that would ruin everything. So I hope you can wait for the coming chapters.

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Date: November 12 2013 8:36 AM Title: Chapter 4 Dissection

Cassie is turning out to be quiet the evil brat...status quo for that name. 


Good stuff.

Author's Response:

The name does seem to be popular on GTW. My choice in the name was coincidental though. I just kind of chose it at random. She is quite twisted, and I think more of "that" will be revealed as the story continues.

Glad you liked it, thanks for the review.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 08 2013 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 3 Biology Class

Ahh, so chapter 2 wasnt all finished when you uploaded it, makes sense now :3 I really liked the whole frog idea, really really clever. I guess Jason is doomed :x I would had liked it even more if he would have picked up by his best friend, boys mostly are even more "cruel" in this kind of topic and make fun out of it all, telling jokes and such, would be an even more humiliating way to go. As I mentioned before, I would love to see a tf at some point ending as a tiny single corn or oat meal flake, and getting swallowed by one of Cassie's own horses. Reading the word "bird food" also got me back to that this would be an awesome ending for a character, getting tfed into a tiny insect and eaten by a bird, or a tiny food like a single berry of some kind, or a peace of candy, like a single M&M. I thought actually the girl would become the shampoo content itself but I wanted it to be open for my mind haha :x I really love the whole idea of the penny reducing random people around the girls, and they have no idea about it, where in the end, I guess Cassie and Susan would become trapped of their own "fun" medicine. I would like the plot idea of Cassie unknownigly "tfing" Susan, maybe in her stables at home, and feeding her to one of her stallions. But also theres room for others now of all the classmates and even the teachers around. I really like the whole plot developement :)

Author's Response:

No it was finished, I just overlooked that I didn't paste it correctly, or there was some kind of error that cut the content. An accident of course, but it's fixed now.

Well I have to show the Penny's influence too, not just the characters misuse of the Penny. We'll see what happens to Jason next chapter. As for the shampoo TF, I considered just what you said. I almost did not give a TF POV or narration of Janet's predicament. In the end a POV scene was added, but mostly because I felt like it this time.

As for the end, I can't really spoil it, partially because it's not even written yet, but it's forming in my mind, and is getting better the more I think on it. The farm may never play anymore then a plot device for Cassie's cruelty. Well I hate to call it cruelty, it's more like she has an imbalance in her brain like a serial killer, where she determines the lives of other things, like pigs at the farm etc, are no more valuable than Janet's. Of course all that's diving deep into Cassie's character which isn't 100% set in stone just yet.

Anyways, thanks again for the review, and look forward to the next chapter when it comes.

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Date: November 08 2013 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 3 Biology Class

Cool concept and good read.

Author's Response:


I'll try to keep up the quality as I add more chapters. If you like the concept, you might want to check out the other stories in the penny series while your waiting for the next chapter.

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Date: November 04 2013 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 1 Penny & Origins

Aha, yes, I liked the reference :') I like it when sequels have lots of back story to tell, and explain how things happened, like a flash back. I dont know what to expect yet becuase it was all a "set up", but I noticed little hints for example "a small young girl named Cassie who loved animals". And how she has all these animals on her farm. If theres anything I could request/wish for, seeing something like someone gets vored by a stallion horse on the farm would be just awesome, like I said getting tfed into a single tiny aot meat flake for example and ending in a horse apple. I am really curious what happened with Janet, because the shampoo fall to the ground, but what happened with her, did you get tfed into that caterpiller? If so, maybe it's a very tiny caterpillar like just 1/2" to 1" long and it would be eaten by a bird at some point. But I guess Cassie and Susan will get their "idea of fun" fired back to them too at some point haha. I really look forward for the next part already so much.

Author's Response:

I guess you will have to wait and see. Thanks for the review.

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Date: November 03 2013 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 2 Hit the Showers

I am so damn happy this story is finally back. There's not much to review so far, it's "just" an introduction into the plot. But I'll give high points because I know it will be great, and I yet like the way it seems to go. Really like the half aware/half unaware idea, mostly everything will go wrong what can go wrong. I also loved the caterpiller idea, mostly also didnt "go like planed" by the girls (; Actually there were a few ideas I always wished to read, but I know you once said you want to write out your own ideas, so it's hard for people to review on this one I think. Just when I read the plot idea of "farm girl", for example one thing came into my mind, seeing a tf into a tiny oat meal flake and ending in a bucket of food for a horse, I always liked the idea of becoming a tiny unaware snack for a horse, or a bird.

Author's Response:

I told you I would get another Penny Series story out, so I hope it'll meet your expectations. If things didn't go wrong, what would there be to read? That said, the Penny has a soul of it's own, and when someone tries to use it to manipulate others, you can expect bad results to follow it's user.

What did you think of the Penny Mythos's story? Did you like the references to the previous stories in the series?

Also It's a shame that no author's have asked me yet to add to this series. I think it has a lot of potential. But most of the writers have their own interesting stories to write, so oh well.

Reviewer: Tapp Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 01 2013 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 2 Hit the Showers

love where this is going!

Author's Response:

I'll try and get another chapter out soon. Thanks for your review.  

Reviewer: tokubetsu Signed [Report This]
Date: November 01 2013 8:09 AM Title: Chapter 1 Penny & Origins

Good so far, really looking forward to seeing how this develops. I'd be interested to see any unaware content too, but it's so early on I want to see your ideas develop more than any requests from me. Do your best! I'll be reading.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the response. I was actually worried about the lack of views, since this story has bombed in that regard, at least compared to my other penny series stories. It's good to know I have readers looking forward to more.

Then again, views are just numbers and not really important, your review means much more to me.

Did you think the first chapter was to stale? There was unaware content in the second chapter, unless your referring to a POV of Janet?

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