Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: January 10 2014 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 6 Schools Out

So damn glad youre writing at this story here again :') It's my favorite and I wish so much it will get continued. I missed reading on it over the last couple of weeks so much :( I wished you had wrote out on this part a little bit more "The few remaining contents of the bag spread onto the floor where some young boys were sitting....When she sat back down she watched as the boys grabbed up the chocolates. "What a waste."", I really liked that idea that Joel maybe got a one way ticker through one of these younger boys digestive tract. Even though you mentioned earlier in the story that Joel was one of the first M&Ms she ate that day. Hope so much youll have time really soon again now to continue :)

Author's Response:

I'll try and right more when I can. I'm glad you like the subtle tone I used. as for Joel, that's a mystery. She could have ended up in anyone's stomach who ate the M&M's. All I said for certain was that she was gone, and most likely through Susan, or so hoped Cassie.

 

Anyways, thanks for the review, look forward to more when I can get some more time!