Date: December 27 2013 4:18 PM Title: Chapter 2: Starting From Scratch...Sort of
Ah, a much better chapter. Remember, each paragraph is supposed to hold only one idea. The only thing I object to in this chapter is the name Travis, but that's me being silly.
Here:
Until it dawned on me that she was tryinh out the new name I got.
You mean: trying
Date: November 14 2013 1:35 AM Title: Chapter 2: Starting From Scratch...Sort of
Travis...hmm...ok fine. It's a nice story so far but there not much description. I know there's supposed to be a lot of emotion, but I'm not really feeling it (as much as I probably should).
[Report This]Date: November 13 2013 9:47 AM Title: Chapter 2: Starting From Scratch...Sort of
I like this story. The gentle giantess is my favorite kind. Will her mom or aunt be in the story at some point?
aaron
Author's Response: I'm not sure. The way I have the story going the story may just contain Lily, Jenna, and maybe The sisters' friends, but I might include a twist and add the mom at some point.