Giantess World
Reviews For Life with a Giantess Teacher
Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed 
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Date: February 05 2014 8:51 PM Title: Shopping
Author's Response: Hmm. I thought I did a pretty decent job with detail. I know I dont have all the senses down but I believe I had a good amount of detail, especially in the beginning. As for length, I think the length is fine for now; I probably will increase it as I write more. I think I got the details in alright. If we were comparing stories, yes, you would have the most descriptive story, but I think mine has more action within one chapter. I cant deny we have different writing styles so I understand how you want my story to be seen by your format. As for the senses: True, I dont have about anything for smells, texture, but I think I got the feelings part. Sounds? I guess I could add some, like the car ignition, but I dont think it is that necessary to add, "Ben heard the car engine roar, he knew he was in for a ride". I mean I could add it, but I think it should relate directly to Ben's experience, like the sound of Miss Silva's panties snap or something. Anyway, thanks for the review midnightwriter!
[Report This]Date: February 05 2014 8:51 PM Title: Shopping
I don't want to sound like I'm trying to take over your story, so I'll just keep it short.
Try lenghtening your sentences, add some more detailed words...
Smells, textures, sounds and feelings, discribe what Ben is seeing... Everything!
Author's Response: Hmm. I thought I did a pretty decent job with detail. I know I dont have all the senses down but I believe I had a good amount of detail, especially in the beginning. As for length, I think the length is fine for now; I probably will increase it as I write more. I think I got the details in alright. If we were comparing stories, yes, you would have the most descriptive story, but I think mine has more action within one chapter. I cant deny we have different writing styles so I understand how you want my story to be seen by your format. As for the senses: True, I dont have about anything for smells, texture, but I think I got the feelings part. Sounds? I guess I could add some, like the car ignition, but I dont think it is that necessary to add, "Ben heard the car engine roar, he knew he was in for a ride". I mean I could add it, but I think it should relate directly to Ben's experience, like the sound of Miss Silva's panties snap or something. Anyway, thanks for the review midnightwriter!