Reviewer: Kosmita Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08 2015 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Morals

So, here’s the thing…if Sarah is out of the picture, it’s just David and Melanie having episodic adventures. Which is cool! But I would love to see Sarah sticking around as it could draw up some conflict between Melanie and David.

As of right now, David hasn’t been objecting to anything Melanie does (shit, I wouldn’t). David’s enthusiasm and constant encouragement were the reason why Melanie started eating people. What happens when that encouragement dries up by David telling her not to eat someone? It could go different ways: Melanie could be cool with it…or not. Melanie could grow jealous of David’s newfound relationship with Sarah – even if she’s not a love interest and just someone David pities. Or, as you alluded to in this chapter, David could – without telling Melanie – make sure that Sarah *wins* Melanie’s competition and let her live.

Hmmm…many ways to go about this…In the end, I hope you keep Sarah around. That, and have lots of vore in the next chapter :) If you want to shoot ideas to me, you can always email me. You should still have my address ;)

Author's Response:

Well then, you are absolutely correct. Thank you for your wise words as always. I wasn't entirely certain what to do next, but you've given me a few ideas that I could possibly bounce around. I was really worried at first because I am new to that kind of writing, but I am glad to see that it wasn't a complete flop. We will have to see just what happens in the upcoming chapters! Thanks again for reading and commenting! As always, much appreciated. And yes, I do somewhere! Feel free to email me as well; that goes for everybody too! Haha.