[Report This]Date: May 05 2016 5:14 AM Title: Chapter 11
Liked the way you showed the tiny woman loosing her head.
"She was... Angry. Sad. Furious. Emotional. She was a lot of things, but mostly, she was sure that everyone was going to die."
"I'm not a monster after all, she thought to herself, scraping his viscera off her sandal."
"Funny, considering her nature had flew out the window this evening."
That emotional turmoil : )
"You're alive," said the Virgin, "are you okay?"
A stupid question, she thought."
: D
"The detachment the was on some level horrifying in the extreme but that part of her was still pushed out"
Typo "The detachment the"
Interesting "Dialog" between the Virgin and Priestess
That self pleasuring and insertion scene : D
Author's Response:
im not verrrrry pleased with the way i wrote the decapitation scene (thats a phrase i never thought id ever use ever), but it'll do.
I wondered if i wasnt being wishywashy with the virgins emotional state. i dont think so, but maybe i was.
ehhh typos.