Ahhh!! I'm speechless! Wow, I really loved this chapter so much <3 Even if it's shorter than most others, and it's still introduction and "nothing special" really happened, please believe me when I say, this chapter is totally under my favorite chapters Ive read of yours, actually I would say it's on rank 2 and the last final chapter of your Christmas story is on 1 :-) But what does this chapter make so special to me? These parts:

"Tommy got a boner just from looking at her, but he tried to hide it from Jenny"

"He could feel the boner coming on and imagined ramming his penis deep into her vagina. Thrusting, moaning, kissing her boobs, nuzzling his face into her belly as his dick found her sweet spot and the climax hit them."

"Tommy thirstily gulped his down and felt the cold soda pop rush into his stomach. It made him gassy, so he burped. All the girls looked at him, and Claudia decided she could do better. She drained her Sprite and gave an even bigger burp."

"As they waiting for their massive amounts of food to arrive, Tommy’s stomach felt weird. He burped again, that felt better, but then he suddenly needed to go pee."

I just loved the parts so much always where Tommy got a boner because of looking or thinking about Jenny, I love these kind of erotic moments so much, especially about what Tommy might think in these very moments and what he must picture in is mind.

The whole part of Tommy draining the coke and burping is so awesome, my favorite part <3 Please say that there were some tiny micros in his coke he uknowingly swallowed and booked a one trip through his digestive tract, I loved this idea so much especially combined with the part "Tommy’s stomach felt weird. He burped again, that felt better, but then he suddenly needed to go pee". If so, it would be awesome reading the POV of those micros again of what happened.

I love the concept of those rude boys, who seem to get some taste of their owen medicine ;-)

And now... I dont really know where to start to talk about the ending of this fantastic chapter, and about Bobby. Damn, what a cliffhanger and fantastic idea. It seems Bobby snapped during the last couple of days/weeks because of his gf got eaten, and especially how Tommy and Simon were so careless about it. And especially how Tommy didnt quit with that "bitch" Jenny, who did this to him, indirectly. I would imagine Bobby got "insane" and the sadness and hate grew bigger, and he also grew it against his "friends" Tommy and Simon. So Bobby became the "bad guy", right? :x

I loved this part so so much:

“There must be a second shrink ray.”Bobby nodded, then walked over to the door and leaned up against the wall, as if to talk to all of them. “I thought of another possibility though, something simpler.”“What?” Tommy asked.

Hahaha :x Loved that total surprise which came out of nowhere, fantastic idea man. Like Tommy got the most logical idea, and it seemed totally reasonable, and than... oops, sorry, nope, Im the bad guy.

I'm so damn curiosu now how it continues. So Bobby shrunk them all, Drew, Rob... and Tommy. I hope they all got really tiny, around ant size :x

I also love the idea of if there were some other micros in Tommys coke before, that they were so small now and in Tommys bowls, that a normal sized person wouldnt even see them anymore and theyre smaller than dust particles.

So Bobby wanted revenge for what that bitch Jenny did to his gf, and in his hate and sadness he somehow got the mad reason that it was all Tommys fault, and if Tommy wasnt such an "asshole" it wouldnt make it all look so more sad and worse to him, but he chose to stay with that "monster" Jenny, and didnt care about his feelings. And Bobby got the idea of, well, if that's what Tommy wanted, he would show him what it was like for Francise, and what she went through, digested and turned into shit.

I would love to see a scene where Bobby thrw the three tiny ant sized boys into a bowl of white onion dip, with tiny little onion particles and tiny black pepper dots. The micros would totally look like tiny pepper dots and no one would notice them in there, especially because of the white thick dip, which covered their bodies, their clothes, and if they were driven in, it would even be on their heads and their faces, totally marking them white and melt into the white onion background.

The total humiliation would be, if Simon would snack from the dip and scoop up his friend Tommy and one or the other two boys, Rob and Drew. There could be a "battle" inside Simons mouth like this is all your fault you freak, talking to Tommy, about his weirdo friend. They were all spared of swallowing and just be glued into a thick salvia mixed dip white spit slime on Simons tongue, and while fighting some bad luck would happen causing Rob or Drew to slip and land face first into the slimy goe and sliding backwards towards the back of the mouth, and suddenly the tongue would rise into two parts, because Simon was swallowing the left over spit and dip goe in his mouth, causing Tommy was at this moment on the front part and "safe", but poor Rob or Drew gets swallowed. Just like the middle part of the tongue would devide the mouth into two parts, the front safe part, and everything behind the middle tongues part would be send backwards into the slimey abyss causing a swallow reflex. Of course Tommy would survive though maybe when Simon laughed and spit a tiny bit of dip/spit, Tommy glued into it like into a water drop.

In the end of course I would love Bobby taste his own medicine and got somehow shrunk too to ant size and book a one way trip throuhg hell :-x

Thank you so much again for writing, I hope you liked my review as always <3 And you saw how much this chapter meant to me!! You said at the end you wanted to here if things worked out different. YES!! They did :3 I would love seeing these things more often, what I talked about, and the three examples I put out. Loved the burp parts so much of Tommy, and the ones where he got a boner because of Jenny <3

Please have an amazing Sunday!! You rock <3