[Report This]Date: May 19 2015 1:16 PM Title: About That Favor
Wow. I was expecting something a bit... more inspiring? Hopefully she gets what she wants out of that book.
The moment at the end when April lifts her with her foot is extremely well done. You say it in as little words as possible, but I cringed with the feeling of her mental state.
I honestly felt like I wanted to go in there and... yea, it's not gonna happen.
*sigh*
Every time I read your story my blood boils, and that's an amazing thing to be able to do. You're just so damn good at expressing the inner thoughts of a character and showing the disparity. April thinks this is a joke, she just doesn't have the slightest point of reference.
Is she EVER gonna get some sort of relief? I just want them to know how she feels, but I don't know how you, as a writer, could even DO that. It feels like it's been going on forever for her, and I really wish that now - when we're introduced to this story - we're at the turning point.
But until then, my blood boils.
Nice work.
Author's Response:
Hot damn, I don't know whether to be ashamed or proud on how this made you feel. I definitely understand what you're getting at. One can only take this kind of abuse for so long even if it was intended to be just a good natured joke at times. Juniper's already starting to be fed up, so who knows what's going to send her over the edge. Anyways, thanks for the review, and I'm glad you're sticking with it.
[Report This]Date: May 19 2015 7:04 AM Title: About That Favor
I'd love to be friends with her sisters.
Author's Response:
I'd like to think they're pretty chill... as long as you're not the size of a toy to them.
Date: May 19 2015 4:03 AM Title: About That Favor
Whew. Well this was fun timing with your review on my story. I'd actually taken a peek at your first chapters earlier yesterday to lament that you hadn't updated in a while, which was why I mentioned it in the reply.
I continue to really enjoy the increasingly complex dynamic of the sisters. June definitely has a real web of a love/hate relationship here, since she's clearly able to go from almost rationalizing May's wearing her in a shoe, to cursing out April's playfulness. Like you said, you don't ramble, and just pick out words with punch, making each interaction of the characters feel unique. The dialogue feels natural too.
I do sincerely hope you'll keep it up with this one. There are really only about 3 ongoing stories currently that I've become invested enough to keep checking for updates, and this is definitely one of them, so it was a pleasant surprise to see it pop up.
Author's Response:
Oh gosh, hearing that really made my day. I definitely appreciate your reviews.
The sisters are just as fun as they are complex because I have to keep asking myself what can Juniper tolerate, which is probably what the older sisters ask themselves every day.
[Report This]Date: May 18 2015 10:56 PM Title: About That Favor
Those big loving sisters, gotta love em
Author's Response:
Well someone has to, because I don't think June's willing to return their love. Thanks for the review.
Date: May 18 2015 10:01 PM Title: About That Favor
Short but you're right, you said what you needed. Nice to see you back , its a nice chapter to read and you gave us some insight into the past.
Author's Response:
Hey thanks! I see you're back to updating as well. This chapter actually says quite a bit for being so short, but I've never been one to ramble on for too long. Anyways, I definitely appreciate the review.