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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 04 2015 12:10 PM Title: Chapter 16

RIP, Scott. :-(

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 03 2015 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 16

For some reason, I felt like Elizabeth barely had anytime with Scott.

Scott kept escaping her, and also the fast pace of the story made it seem like time has sped up.

I liked what you did with Taylor and the mother. They both had their time with Scott and did t really interfer with the story (except minimizing Scott's time with Elizabeth.)

Looking forward to Trinity!

Author's Response:

There is a solid reason why I made minimizing time with Elizabeth a priority.

Elizabeth is a sex-crazy teenager with no respect for other people. She has no intention of making Scott worship her or torturing him. She just wants sex. If the chapter was mostly her, it would be monotoned and repetitive. Apologies for the strange sequence of Elizabeth's days.

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