Date: August 02 2017 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 5: Jennifer
Again dude I'm sorry, but all this time tom has actually been the first strong independent man in this world, but now he's use another drone? It just doesn't seem right, he should have met a girl, who likes him for him. Please respond when you get the chance.
Date: August 02 2017 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 5: Jennifer
Also, I liked Jennifer the best, she was the less evil by this world standards. Also you said that tom had two sons. While since you've only done one story, how about you make a sequel, about the two going through almost the same stuff time had went through, only this time they both STAY defiant.
Date: August 02 2017 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 5: Jennifer
Nice story man, but I honestly liked it better when Tom was stronger and more independent.
Date: October 10 2015 11:19 AM Title: Chapter 5: Jennifer
That was a wonderful chapter. It was much happier than the others. I really enjoyed it. There were a few grammatical mistakes but they didn't take away from the enjoyment of reading it. The story feels complete yet you haven't marked it as such. Do you plan to add more?
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for all your comments, I've been trying to edit the grammar mistakes and I marked the story as complete.