Date: April 26 2016 8:01 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
On the subject of the latest chapter well done! Can't wait for the next insert.
Your storytelling really shines through. I'll have to insert better writer notes at a later date but right now just personal critiques.
Love Part 2 the best! I love the descent into apocalyptic nature and the return of the black painted toes! Those are my favorite! Black better than red!
My vote's for you to continue part 2! It's the greatest and we have too few truly grand apoclyptic GTS stories. This one really shines, both in GTS material and personal interaction.
Also it's not very often, at this scale, to get a first person view from a smaller character. Usually you just get third perspective GTS at this size so bold and very well done choice! Love first person giga!
Also, if she is dead I will miss Amy. Sad to see the characters go. Really great character work. Poor girl.... D:
All in all good work! Love what you've done so far! :)
Date: April 22 2016 9:24 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I am so stoked for the next few chapters, I love the addition of this group of people. The aliens have established their own little settlements and now rule as gods over the little people. If someone is getting sacrificed then there will be interaction with the giantesses, which I am looking forward to.
Author's Response: Thanks! I hate to burst your bubble but it seems like there is a bit of a misunderstanding. The base is not set up by the aliens but rather the people. My idea was that they tried to rebuild civilization but then this alien came along, and after some sort of events, now they have to make a sacrifice to her in order to stay aloe and keep their base intact. Also, if you'd like, you can leave a suggestion for the next chapter or few, since I had a very different idea for the future than what it seems like I'm getting from some reviews.
Date: April 22 2016 8:00 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I was wondering if you were planning on updating any of your other story's
Date: April 21 2016 6:06 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
Wow, is he really working for the giantess ? If he is then it means they have found a way to communicate and perhaps build to something.
Author's Response: Sorry to say but he is not working for the giants. The attackers are, in a way, but not really "working" for them. Hopefully it will be cleared up in the next chapter.
Date: April 13 2016 12:14 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
In addition to my previous review, I wanted to let you know that I've added a guide on how to add images to Giantess World stories and summaries. You can find it in the "Journal" section of my Deviantart page.
Date: April 12 2016 4:24 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
Instead of giantesses seeing more types of light than humans can, having them have a vastly superior sense of smell than humans have may be easier for you. Either way, what I'm trying to get at is it will damage the giantess if she's constantly got to have her head facing the ground (in particular if she's next to a building or looking through rubble). If she doesn't want to deform her spine then she'll need to rely on other senses, whatever they may be, and not sight.
My HTML guide for Giantess World should be ready by tomorrow., and a link to download it will be added to Deviantart in a Journal post. I'm currently also doing a series renders to create an image called "The Perfect Man Hunter", because my reviews to your story got me thinking. The image, I will detail all of the features that would come together to create the ultimate predatory giantess (because people don't often consider how evolution would affect giantesses). I'll have a front view and a side view and I'll be zooming in to various body parts to explain why they are designed in that way. Maybe I'll write my own inspired by this one and based on the ultimate man hunter – but first I have to finish Gems of the Sky (which you can find by visiting my profile).
Date: April 05 2016 9:42 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I wonder if he will fight the giantesses at some point? I am torn between wanting him to go from person to person and actually interacting with the giantesses at this point.
Date: April 04 2016 4:33 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I thought about your reply. Maybe you can say something along the lines of "after such and such an event I fell asleep. After I woke up again this happened. (Or in the morning this happened.)" It maybe "I was go tried so I tried to sleep. Then when I woke up..."Creative writing is an art form and I can see your driver to create a masterpiece.
Date: April 03 2016 2:37 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I've added a Surviving With The Giants inspired image to my Deviantart page. There's a link to my page on my Giantess World profile page. You can easily find the image in my gallery on Deviantart.
Author's Response: Wow man. That is great! You've got some real skill there, and it's pretty similar to what I was envisioning. Wonderful job on it. I'm glad you're enjoying the story enough to make something like this! Sorry for not publishing a chapter recently. I've been watching some stuff and I haven't had any really good ideas yet. Again, great job and thank you!
[Report This]Date: April 02 2016 9:02 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
As to the 'how would the reader know they were aliens', I might have left it up to 'who the hell knows where they came from?'and not defined it at all.
Is it an experment? An accident? Are they aliens? Are they from another dimension? The author himself probably doesnt know - the aliens just might be a guess on his part.
But it's a well done story so far - a Mad Max/Walking Dead with massive feet. Interesting.
Author's Response: That's a good idea. I probably should have done that instead. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: April 01 2016 3:22 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
In terms of being repetitive, you can reinforce an idea in different places, that's for sure. But the key is maybe not doing it blatantly. My example was you saying pretty much the same thing very next sentence.
I'm tempted to do some Surviving With The Giants inspired renders in Daz3d. Any reference images you want to provide would be welcome You can contact me by visiting my profile page on here and e-mailing me. Or you can find me on Deviantart.
Author's Response: Yeah, pretty poor move on my part. No need to write that sentence twice. :/ As for the renders, I'm glad you're interested enough in the story to consider something like that. Unfortunately, I have no reference pictures for you and I'm not a skilled artist at all. You could make it however you want. There aren't many details in the story about looks, so you could make them however you wanted. The only thing I really described was clothes. In the next chapter I was going to talk a little about looks but since I'm kinda vague with details you could really make the refer however you wanted.
[Report This]Date: March 31 2016 6:22 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
great work so far. I hope he does come in contact with the toes.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was planning on doing something with them in the future, but I'm not sure when or what yet.
Date: March 30 2016 2:57 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I wrote the review around midnight; so you have to bear that mind. And looking back, yeah people wouldn't automatically assume they're aliens: they could be deities, or as you said larger humans (though I think this option is outlandish personally because somebody would need to create them in the first place and it would never be allowed to get to the scenes we see in the story). Aliens is, to me, the most sensible explanation.
In terms of the vagueness, I think I meant to focus on the scenery, i.e. the post apocalyptic landscape, not the little details about the giantesses (or at least their upper bodies). The narrator is always going to be close to the ground where the impact of the giantesses is felt the most:- he's going to be on the look out for feet and listening out for tremors. He's also got other humans to worry about given his position.
So I think I was saying don't spent too much time telling the reader about her looks, if at all. I gather you want them to be distant, emotionless even, so keep their appearance vague and focus on the parts of her body that are meaningful to the situation. As you've said it's about the survival. So in that sense it does make sense to have some focus on the feet because they have caused the most destruction (though I think it would be a mistake focus solely on feet of the smaller giantesses).
Really emphasize the post apocalyptic landscape. There must be more impact that just footprints. You don't have to deviate too much from your passions, all I was saying is, be a bit creative with the destruction: The smaller giantesses have a greater opportunity to interact with the landscape. Use that. So what I was saying is there is that giantess could use humans and their surviving structures for pleasure.
It's like: “Oh, you're not just lower down than me, you're just a mere toy for my own gratification”. Now, obviously, she doesn't speak human language (that's what I'm picking from the story), she's an alien, but actions speak louder than words as they say. She doesn't need waste time spelling out what she's going to do because she has the authority to simply do as she pleases.
Now, as for concluding the story. Maybe you can leave it open ended; without a resolution. What I mean by this is the narrator ultimately dies in some way and that's how the story ends. How would you do this in a journal type fashion (which you said you're writing in) you may ask?
Well that's easy. He can die a slow death (or commit suicide), which allows him to detail how exactly he died. And the reader finds his journal, which is what makes it a story. The are several ways to have a slow death which would allow the read to find the journal.
1. Rubble/a building falls on him – he gets trapped and concludes that it's the end. A sequel may be that he actually miraculously survived and he becomes friends with the reader.
2. He becomes wounded from an altercation with another a human. Clearly a giantess would kill him instantly so it might be that he gradually bleeds to death from a being stabbed or shot.
3. He decided to commit suicide. Maybe the journal details his slow descent into madness.
4. He falls into one of those feet shaped craters (perhaps in a desperate escape from another human(s) trying to kill him). Like the other scenarios, his journal is eventually found the reader.
I think you have potential as an author. I come on this website hopeful for a good story. So I don't appreciate too much smut. You seem to have a good balance; and you're emphasizing the fear it's good to be liberal with the giantesses. Another long review, sorry.
Author's Response: Again, thanks for the review and feedback. I think you make some very good points. I'll try and focus more on the landscape in the next chapter. Thanks for the clarification about vagueness. I'm not sure what I'll do for interaction just yet, as there's only so much that can be done with feet. I take in one chapter at a time, so I really don't know how the story will progress yet.
Date: March 29 2016 11:51 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I agree the chapter was rushed. However I mostly liked what was there. You've made me like giga giantesses now. Or at least the one in this story.
One thing that stood out to me is that you need to learn to trust the reader a bit more. They can quite easily guess that she's an extraterrestrial for example. Not need to spell it out. So thought that paragraph was a waste.
Secondly, the narrator writes as if the reader isn't part of this universe and is unaffected by the events of it. I can understand why you'd automatically do that - because it's easier to do. However it means that the story doesn't feel as immersive as it could be. Who is the narrator actually writing to? It doesn't feel like a diary but I suspect the story wants to be just that. Now, that is a bit harder, granted, but it'd pay off.
Still, there's enough mystery to keep my interested, like I've alluded to. The story seems like it could be fun so I'll be interested to see what you do with it. It's the unknown that's going to keep me reading and I appreciate there wasn't much information dumping in this initial chapter (don't worry, that's a good thing) so there was just enough information to set the scene and nor be too boring.
I mean, there's detail and there's detail. One needs to find the right balance. There were parts in would have written differently, as I said, but it's a decent start. You've made me sufficiently scared for the narrator and I hope you keep this up.
I really do like mystery giantesses like this large one. The fact you can only see her toes/feet (and ankles?) shrouds her in mystery. We get no sense of her emotion and so her motives remain unclear. Is this a chore for her or does she actually enjoy it?
I'm hoping you don't reveal too much too fast. I don't care if you don't have constant giantess content. The thing about the horror genre, and it can apply to this story, is it's really the suspense that scares people. To much gore and it loses its impact.
You need to keep reinforcing the fear. And yes, don't show too much of the giantesses. Dehumnize them. I don't care; they're aliens. Perhaps focus just on their lower bodies (stomach and below) for as long as possible. Focus on the running for his life aspect. Don't give away too much about them.
That's what makes them scary. It's the not knowing. If he's running for his life he won't remember every last detail about their appearance anyway. The main thing would be "Oh crap, another set of legs/feet gotta hide." He's not going to stop and stare given how he could easily die.
And remember, the story is called "Surviving With The Giants". He's not coexisting. He's surviving. So you that needs to be reinforced.
His life means nothing to them. Reinforce that. Don't go into too much detail on the giantesses. The main thing, if you want it to be scary is to focus on the destruction. Have some symbolism too: Maybe a giantess using a landmark as a sex toy to serve as a stark reminder of how pathetic the humans are.
I think you can do great things with story. And don't worry about not having enough scenes with giantesses. It may well work. Just remember to keep them vague each time they appear. But obviously you'll need to conclude the story somewhere so a gradual reveal is clearly necessary. But that's up to you how much you'd want to share.
I do love the description of the big feet though. You emphasized the destruction just enough but didn't get too bogged down with details. And, remember really try to put yourself in the mind of the narrator. The pun in the chapter title was fun.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'll take it one paragraph at a time. 1. Glad to hear you like them now. They've always been my favorite. The bigger the better for me. 2. I agree I need to "trust the reader" but I'm not sure how the reader would have understood she was an alien. Unless I mentioned she was not from the planet, I didn't think the readers first thought would be alien. My first thought would be a giant human, but I can't speak for everyone. 3 I don't really know who the narrator is writing to. I tried to make it logical, because since it's first person, he can't be telling the reader events as it unfolds. It has to be recounting from a past experience, and I thought a journal was a good way to do that. Also, for a little comedic value, I tried to include a few fourth wall breaks (not really wall breaks but whatever). 4. Thanks for the compliments. My idea for this story wasn't actually focused on the giantesses but the survival instead. Then again, this is a giantess site, and the story needs the content with them. 5. I agree with what you've said. I never really have been good with detail. I can get the basic stuff out of the way, but I've always been focused more on the plot. My plan was to add details about the character(s) as I go along so the reader can know more. I also will try to add more detail in certain encounters (like the giantess and the man in the aisle). 6. I put the giant in because, again, I just like really really big women. I'm not sure what will happen with her but I'm liking your ideas so far. 7. Thanks. I like the giantess content so I always try to add when it would make sense but they're not the main focus, really. It's about the people. I agree it could be a horror story, since the situation the main character is in is pretty scary. 8. I'm not sure how the giantesses will be yet. I'm with you on the emotionless part, as I was considering something like that. I'll try to keep them shrouded in mystery. 9. You make a good point but I can't help but notice how it contrasts with an earlier one. Yeah, he wouldn't remember every detail as he is running for his life, but I don't know how I can fit the extra detail in like you mentioned before if I take this route. 10. Yeah, he isn't living "with" them, you could say, but "with them." As in, they're not friends, they're just always there and he lives with them. I agree the survival needs to be emphasized. 11. I've never been too good with symbolism but I'll try. I'll try to focus on the destruction, but as you may know I'm about feet and people who read my stories likely have that in mind. And as this is a giantess site, it would be a by difficult to be all about he destruction but forget to mention the actual giantess committing the act. 12. Thanks for he compliments. Not sure where this story is going yet, though. As with pretty much all of my stories, I get an idea or scene in my head and work from there, so the ending hasn't even crossed my mind yet. 13. Again, thanks for the compliments. I'm a bit of a weird guy because I like feet I guess, but with all the feet I've seen I guess I can provide some pretty good descriptions of them.
Date: March 29 2016 4:44 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
My mobile phone won't let me copy my long review into the reviewing box so it'll have to wait until the morning. It's sad but since I've written over 600 words it'll be worth it I'm sure.
[Report This]Date: March 29 2016 3:21 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
Good start.
Author's Response: Thanks.