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Reviewer: Zalrus IX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2007 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 6: Confused, Used, and Abused

Yes! You can be taught! Very very very good improvement, just remember to end the quotations as well, and very good twist. I hope things work out in the end, but I think it will.

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Author's Response: I do listen. thanks for the insight.

Reviewer: billyevil Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 26 2007 11:21 AM Title: Chapter 6: Confused, Used, and Abused

I told you she was evil.. i doubt the father will see through her until it's too late for him to do anything to stop her.. and any attempts to expose her by the son will not be believed due to the history the son has with Cindy.. the father will just think that he is trying to get her in trouble out of revenge for turning him in as a pervert.. the best thing the son can do is go on the run in the house.. gather information on Cindy without her knowing.. in his current position she's in total control.. something needs to be done to change the situation.. or she will win.. i'm really enjoying this story as you can tell.. i hope you keep it going..

Author's Response: with reviews like this, I'd hate to end the story.  thanks

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